Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (tense and articles). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Use correct past tense and plural/singular forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they provided a safe, clean place for my friends and me to play. For example, we often climbed the swings and slid down the slides after school, which was a great way to relax and have fun.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and repetition; correct small vocabulary and phrasing (e.g., "a barbecue" or "barbecues"). Keep sentences linked logically with connectors. Add a concise reason or example to support your main idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit on weekends with friends or family because we can have a barbecue and chat together, and the fresh air and peaceful surroundings help me relax and feel refreshed.

Sugestão: Make the reply clearer and grammatically correct: state your opinion, then give two specific benefits using linking words. Avoid unclear fragments and finish sentences completely.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space for children to play and for older people to exercise. For instance, new parks encourage people to walk, cycle, and meet neighbors, which improves health and community life.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: name the park, explain why with specific details, and avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use correct adjectives and nouns (e.g., "I was impressed by") and give one clear reason or example.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Balboa Park in California because I was impressed by its large open spaces and interesting architecture. For example, it houses several beautiful museums and gardens, so I could spend a full day exploring art and nature.

× Yes, I really enjoyed uh, going to the park as a child because it's provided a safe and clean environment where my friends and I could play after school.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed going to the park as a child because it provided a safe and clean environment where my friends and I could play after school.

The original uses 'it's provided' which combines present contraction 'it's' with the past participle 'provided'. The correct simple past 'it provided' matches the past time reference 'as a child' and the main verb 'enjoyed'. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past situations (it provided).

× We often played on the screens and went down the slides, which was very, uh, great way, which was a great way to relax and.

✓ We often played on the swings and went down the slides, which was a great way to relax.

There are several issues: 'screens' is likely a mispronunciation for 'swings'; the phrase repeats 'which was' and ends incomplete with 'and.' The corrected sentence uses the correct noun 'swings', removes duplication, and completes the idea. Suggestion: say one clear clause and finish the sentence (which was a great way to relax).

× Yes, I still like going to the park. Now I often go there with my friends or sometimes with my family on the weekend.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park. Now I often go there with my friends or sometimes with my family on the weekend.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. The present simple 'like' and 'go' appropriately describe habitual actions. Keep as is.

× UMM it's one of my favorite leisure activities because we can have BBQ or a chat with one another.

✓ It's one of my favorite leisure activities because we can have a BBQ or chat with one another.

Minor article/word choice: add 'a' before 'BBQ' and remove unnecessary 'a' before 'chat'. Also avoid filler 'UMM' in formal response. Suggestion: use 'have a BBQ' and 'chat' without article.

× The fresh air and peaceful surroundings help me re refresh and ready.

✓ The fresh air and peaceful surroundings help me refresh and feel ready.

The phrase 're refresh and ready' is incorrect: 'refresh' should not be split and 'ready' needs a verb or adjective structure. Use 'help me refresh and feel ready' or 'help me feel refreshed and ready'. Suggestion: choose either 'help me refresh and feel ready' or 'help me feel refreshed and ready'.

× Yes, of course more parks will mean that having more the greenery space for not only children but also older people to play, work and do exercise.

✓ Yes, of course more parks will mean more green space not only for children but also for older people to play, work and exercise.

Problems: unnecessary 'having', wrong word order 'more the greenery space', and awkward verbs 'do exercise'. Use 'more green space' and include 'for' before groups. 'Play, work and exercise' is clear. Suggestion: simplify structure and use 'will mean more green space for...'.

× In my city, a lot of new parks have uh, the other people not only left to exercise to prove they.

✓ In my city, a lot of new parks have been built, and people use them not only to exercise but also to relax.

The original is fragmented and unclear: 'have uh, the other people not only left to exercise to prove they' is ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is parks were built and people use them for exercise and other activities. Use passive 'have been built' for new parks and parallel structure 'not only... but also...'. Suggestion: express completed action (have been built) and parallel verbs for uses.

× Yes, I would like, I would say I want to go to the borough Park in California.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the Borough Park in California.

Redundancy and capitalization: 'borough Park' should be 'Borough Park' if it's a proper name, and saying 'I would like, I would say I want to' is repetitive. Simplify to 'I would like to go to the Borough Park in California.' Suggestion: use one modal ('would like') for politeness and capitalize proper nouns.

× I was very impressive with the structure and the large space in the park inside the park with a lot of beautiful museum.

✓ I was very impressed with the architecture and the large open spaces in the park, which include several beautiful museums.

Use 'impressed' (adjective describing the speaker's feeling) not 'impressive' (which describes something else). 'Structure' is better as 'architecture' and 'large space' as 'large open spaces'. 'Museum' should be plural 'museums'. Also clarify that museums are in/near the park. Suggestion: use correct adjective 'impressed', appropriate nouns, and plural where appropriate.

× Uh, I was like, I would like to go to the uh.

✓ I would really like to visit it one day.

Fragment and filler words ('uh, I was like') make this sentence incomplete. Provide a complete, concise statement: 'I would really like to visit it one day.' Suggestion: avoid fillers and finish the thought with a clear intention.