Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases (e.g. “my children child”). Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Link ideas with a simple connector if needed.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and we would feed the ducks and have picnics, which made those afternoons relaxed and memorable.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Start with a clear direct answer, then give one or two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers (“uh”, “can, can”) and repetitive phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They provide a peaceful environment where I can relax and unwind after a busy day, and I also appreciate the fresh air and greenery.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then provide specific reasons and realistic examples. Avoid repeating words and correct conditional phrasing. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) properly and keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and encourage exercise. For example, with more nearby parks I would be more likely to jog or do yoga outdoors several times a week.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give specific details about why you want to visit. Use correct noun forms and reduce hesitations. Mention particular features or memories to make the response vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Hebin Park in the future. It is a famous park in my city with playgrounds and lakes, and visiting it reminds me of carefree childhood afternoons when I played there with friends.

× I believe that most of children like to go to park to enjoy a joyful time and close to nature.

✓ I believe that most children like to go to parks to enjoy a joyful time and be close to nature.

Use 'most children' (no 'of' with plural noun without determiner) and plural 'parks' when speaking generally. Also use 'be close to nature' for correct verb phrase and 'to parks' with article omitted or plural noun. Suggestion: say 'most children' and 'go to parks' and use 'be close to nature.'

× I like to go to park with my parents while my children child.

✓ I liked going to the park with my parents when I was a child.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect words ('children child'). Use past tense 'liked' to refer to childhood and singular 'a child'. Use article 'the park' or 'parks' depending on context. Suggestion: 'I liked going to the park with my parents when I was a child.'

× Yeah, I still like to go there, even I was adult now, but I still see park can, can give people a relax, a special relaxed time and we can, uh, we can enjoy the good environment in the park and have a rest time.

✓ Yes, I still like to go there; even though I am an adult now, I can still see that parks can give people a sense of relaxation, a special relaxed time, and we can enjoy the pleasant environment in the park and rest.

Several tense and form errors: 'was adult now' should be present 'am an adult now'. 'see park can, can give' is ungrammatical; use 'see that parks can give'. 'a relax' is incorrect noun form; use 'relaxation' or 'a relaxing time'. Also use plural 'parks' when speaking generally and 'pleasant environment' is more natural. Suggestion: keep present tense when describing current liking and use correct noun forms.

× Definitely, I want more parks in my city because parks always stand for good environment and healthy lifestyles.

✓ Definitely. I want more parks in my city because parks contribute to a good environment and healthy lifestyles.

'Stand for' is not the best collocation here; 'contribute to' or 'represent' fits better. Also article 'a good environment' is needed. Suggestion: use 'contribute to a good environment'.

× So if I have if I can get more parks in my city, I will have a better lifestyle and I will try my best to exercise in the park every day.

✓ So if more parks were available in my city, I would have a better lifestyle, and I would try my best to exercise in the park every day.

Mixed conditional and redundant 'if I have if I can get'. Use a clear conditional: present unreal -> 'if more parks were available' with 'would'. Also avoid repeating modal ideas. Suggestion: choose appropriate conditional structure and avoid repetition.

× Yes, uh, there are quite famous park in my city called Hebin Park.

✓ Yes, there is a quite famous park in my city called Hebin Park.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'there are quite famous park' is wrong because 'park' is singular, so use 'there is' and include the article 'a' before 'quite famous park' or say 'a quite famous park'. Suggestion: use 'There is a quite famous park called Hebin Park.'

× Uh, it's every children's, uh, childhood memory for the people lived in my city.

✓ It is every child's childhood memory for people who live in my city.

Use singular possessive 'child's' to mean 'the childhood memory of each child'. 'The people lived in my city' is incorrect relative clause; use 'people who live in my city'. Suggestion: 'every child's childhood memory for people who live in my city.'

× Uh, so I always like to go there to remind my childhood time.

✓ So I always like to go there to remember my childhood.

'Remind my childhood time' is incorrect: 'remind' is transitive and needs an object; use 'remember my childhood' or 'remind me of my childhood'. Also 'childhood time' is redundant; 'childhood' suffices. Suggestion: use 'remember my childhood' or 'remind me of my childhood'.