Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and repetition. Use correct verb tense and plural/singular agreement (e.g., 'I liked parks' or 'I used to go').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were great places to play and relax. For example, I often played cricket and football with my friends, and we would also spend time on the swings and slides. My parents sometimes took us on picnics, which made those visits even more memorable.

Sugestão: Use correct verb forms and reduce hesitations. Begin with a clear topic sentence and then add one or two specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Replace vague phrases with precise ones (e.g., 'clear mind' → 'clear my mind').

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because they help me relax after work. For instance, when I have free time I walk in the park to clear my mind and watch people and children playing, which I find calming.

Sugestão: Make your answer concise and grammatically correct. Use a clear opening sentence (Yes/No + reason), then give a specific example or benefit. Avoid repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'parks are').

Exemplo: Definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are important for family recreation and mental relaxation. For example, I regularly use parks for exercise and jogging, and additional parks would make these activities more accessible to other residents.

Sugestão: Be specific and orderly: start with a topic sentence (Yes + which park), then give concrete details and a reason to visit. Correct tense and possessive forms (e.g., 'my father told me', 'my child'). Avoid run-on sentences by using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'so').

Exemplo: Yes. My father recently told me about a new park near our neighborhood that includes a small zoo for children, and I would like to visit it. Because it offers animal exhibits and play areas, it would be a fun outing for my family and my child.

× I like very much parks and tires, so I go daily in parks for playing cricket or any other uh, like football with my friend and also plays, uh, plays, plays on swings and slides.

✓ I liked parks and rides very much, so I used to go to parks daily to play cricket or other sports like football with my friends, and I also used to play on the swings and slides.

Incorrect word order and choice of adjectives/adverbs: 'I like very much parks' is awkward in English; adverb should come after the verb or before the object ('liked parks very much' or 'really liked parks'). 'Tires' is incorrect; context indicates 'rides'. Verb forms and plurality: 'go daily in parks' should be 'used to go to parks daily' to show habitual past. 'playing cricket' should be 'to play cricket' or 'played cricket'. 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match general habit. 'also plays' is wrong because subject is 'I'; use past habitual 'used to play'. Suggestion: use natural English word order, correct nouns ('rides'), correct verb tense for past habits ('used to'), and match subject-verb agreement and plurality.

× Yes, I still going to park with my family and when we when I am free from my work, I am I just go to park for, uh, clear mind and, and see the people, how they are working and what they are doing.

✓ Yes, I still go to the park with my family, and when I am free from work, I just go to the park to clear my mind and to see how people are behaving and what they are doing.

Present tense and auxiliary omission: 'I still going' lacks the auxiliary 'am' for continuous tense but present simple 'I still go' is more appropriate for habitual actions. 'to park' needs the article 'the park'. 'clear mind' should be 'clear my mind' with possessive. 'see the people, how they are working' should be 'see how people are behaving' or 'see what they are doing' without an extra comma. Suggestion: for habitual actions use present simple ('I go'), include definite articles for specific places ('the park'), and use correct infinitive structures ('to clear my mind').

× And also I like Childs uh, to see how they are playing and.

✓ I also like to watch children to see how they are playing.

'Childs' is an incorrect plural form; the correct plural is 'children'. The sentence also has awkward structure: 'I like children to see how they are playing' should be 'I like to watch children to see how they are playing' or 'I like seeing children play.' Suggestion: use correct plural 'children' and a clear verb phrase such as 'like to watch' or 'like seeing'.

× Uh, definitely I like to go, I like to see more parks in my city because parks is very important for us and every, everyone want to go with their families for their relaxing, for relaxing their minds.

✓ Definitely I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are very important for us and everyone wants to go with their families to relax and clear their minds.

Subject-verb agreement and plurality: 'parks is' should be 'parks are' because 'parks' is plural. 'everyone want' should be 'everyone wants' (singular 'everyone' takes singular verb). 'for their relaxing' is ungrammatical; use 'to relax' or 'to relax and clear their minds'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects, use correct verb forms for intentions ('would like'), and use infinitives ('to relax') for purpose expressions.

× And I, I go to park now for exercise and jogging.

✓ And I go to the park now for exercise and jogging.

Missing definite article: 'go to park' should be 'go to the park'. Tense 'go to the park now' is acceptable for present habitual action. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'park' when referring to a specific or habitual place.

× Yes, recently my father tell me about the park that it's open in the very good location and the park there is like a zoo for children and which is very interesting for our families to see the zoo and my child's also and I want to go there.

✓ Yes, recently my father told me about a park that opened in a very good location. The park has a zoo for children, which is very interesting for our family and my child, and I want to go there.

Incorrect past tense: 'tell' should be 'told' for a past event. 'it's open' is okay but better as 'opened' if referring to recent opening. Article and possessive errors: 'the park there is like a zoo for children and which is' is ungrammatical; split into two sentences. 'my child's also' is incorrect: use 'my child as well' or 'my child' without apostrophe. Suggestion: use past tense for reported past events ('told', 'opened'), use correct possessive and plural forms, and simplify sentence structure to avoid run-on sentences.