Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, correct pronunciation and small errors (parts → parks, repeated words, tense and phrasing). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words like “you know” or “literally.”

Exemplo: I didn’t go to parks much as a child; I preferred playgrounds. For example, I liked the swings and climbing frames because they helped me relax after school. As a result, playgrounds became my main outdoor activity.

Sugestão: Give a concise topic sentence answering the question, then briefly explain reasons with linking words. Fix repetition and word choice (walking student unclear; avoid "literally" as filler). Use correct verb forms and article use: “going to the park.”

Exemplo: Not really. As a full-time student with a busy schedule, I don’t have much free time to visit the park. Although I enjoy parks, I usually use my limited free time to study or rest at home.

Sugestão: Start with a direct affirmative/negative. Then give two clear and specific reasons linked logically (e.g., health and economic benefits). Avoid vague phrases like “contribute to success” and fillers. Use precise vocabulary and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would improve residents’ physical and mental health by providing space for exercise and relaxation. They could also increase local property values and attract visitors, which would benefit the city economy.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then describe specific features you want in future parks. Correct small errors (greener parts → green spaces; advise your stress → alleviate stress). Use linking words and give one concrete example of a park feature you would visit.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks with well-designed green spaces and pet-friendly areas. For example, a park with walking paths, native plants, and a dog run would help me relax and exercise my pet, which would reduce stress and improve wellbeing.

× Well, to be honest, I wasn't really into parts when I was a child because I I was actually fond of going to playgrounds instead because I feel like it was kind of an activity which can literally unwind my stress.

✓ Well, to be honest, I wasn't really into parks when I was a child because I was actually fond of going to playgrounds instead, since I felt they were activities that could help me unwind my stress.

Issues: 26 Sentence structure errors and 6 Present tense issue (mixed tenses) and 1 Singular and plural issue (parts -> parks). The original uses 'parts' (spelling error) and repeats 'I', and mixes present tense 'feel' with past context 'was a child'. Correction fixes 'parts' to 'parks', removes duplicate 'I', changes 'because I feel like' to 'since I felt' to keep past tense, and adjusts 'which can literally unwind my stress' to 'activities that could help me unwind my stress' for natural English. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, proofread for repeated words and spelling errors, and use 'that' for defining clauses about activities.

× Well as someone who is a walking student right now, I literally. Don't have much time to follow my, you know, favorite activities such as going to park because I have a really busy schedule so I don't like going to park.

✓ Well, as someone who is a working student right now, I literally don't have much time to pursue my favorite activities, such as going to parks, because I have a really busy schedule, so I don't go to parks.

Issues: 26 Sentence structure errors, 22 Article errors ('going to park' -> 'going to parks'), 12 Incorrect use of pronouns/words ('walking student' -> 'working student'), and 20 Incorrect adverb placement and punctuation (period in middle). Correction replaces 'walking' with 'working', removes erroneous period, uses 'pursue' for activities, pluralizes 'parks', and streamlines clauses. Suggestion: check word choice ('working' vs 'walking'), keep sentences intact without mid-sentence periods, and use plural when speaking generally about places.

× Well, to be honest, of course, yes, I like to see more parks in my city and also in my neighborhood because I feel like it's a kind of development which can contribute to success and, you know, generate economic value to our city. So I would say yes.

✓ Well, to be honest, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city and in my neighborhood because I feel they are a type of development that can contribute to community success and generate economic value for our city, so I would say yes.

Issues: 22 Article errors and 26 Sentence structure errors ('it's a kind of development' awkward), 11 Incorrect use of prepositions ('to our city' -> 'for our city'). The correction changes 'it's a kind of development' to 'a type of development', replaces 'contribute to success' with 'contribute to community success', and uses 'generate economic value for our city'. Suggestion: prefer 'type of' instead of 'kind of' in formal speech, and use 'for' when indicating benefit to a place.

× Well, since I have fewer greener parts in my neighborhood, so I wish I could visit more parks that have, you know, well designed greener spaces.

✓ Well, since I have fewer green parks in my neighborhood, I wish I could visit more parks that have well-designed green spaces.

Issues: 1 Singular and plural issue and 13 Incorrect use of adjectives (greener parts -> green parks; 'well designed' needs hyphenation as adjective). Original 'fewer greener parts' is ungrammatical. Correction uses 'fewer green parks' (countable plural) and 'well-designed green spaces'. Suggestion: use 'fewer' with countable nouns and use adjective order and hyphenation for compound modifiers.

× And also of course pet friendly because I feel like it can not only improve people's health and well-being, it can advise your stress.

✓ Also, of course, pet-friendly parks, because I feel they can not only improve people's health and well-being, they can also help relieve stress.

Issues: 13 Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and 8 Verb + -ing form and 6 Present tense issue ('advise your stress' incorrect verb). 'Pet friendly' should be hyphenated as 'pet-friendly' when used as a compound adjective. 'Advise your stress' is incorrect; 'help relieve stress' is appropriate. Correction pluralizes subject to 'they' to match 'parks' and uses 'help relieve stress'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs collocations ('relieve stress'), hyphenate compound adjectives, and match subject plurality.