Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on clarity, correct grammar and natural expressions. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid incorrect words (e.g., “dry”, “sighs”, “deadly”), and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Use one or two specific details (activities, who you went with, a memorable moment) and simple linking words like “and” or “so”.

Exemplo: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. After school my friends and I would spend hours playing on the swings and climbing frames, and sometimes we had picnics on the grass. Those carefree afternoons were my favorite part of the week and I still remember them fondly.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but needs better grammar and cohesion. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct phrases (e.g., “green spaces are a perfect place to unwind”), and use linking words (e.g., “so”, “because”) to connect reasons. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and add a brief specific example of what you do there (read, laptop work, walk).

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often go to a nearby park to work on my laptop and take short walks because it helps me refresh my mind and reduce stress. The green space is a perfect place to unwind after a busy day at the office.

Sugestão: Clarify ideas and use accurate vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two concise reasons with correct grammar and linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”). Replace awkward phrases (“weighs too many buildings”, “sums quickly to save severe air pollution”) with precise expressions about pollution and lack of green space. Provide a specific benefit (exercise, cleaner air, community gatherings).

Exemplo: Yes, I would. My city has become very built-up and suffers from heavy traffic, so more parks would help improve air quality and give people places to exercise. For example, new parks could provide safe areas for morning walks and community activities.

Sugestão: Good idea and positive tone, but correct grammar and be specific about features you want to experience. Use present perfect or simple infinitive correctly (“visiting ... is on my bucket list” is OK) and avoid unclear phrases (“we are painted”, “luxurious atmosphere” for a park). Add one concrete activity you plan to do there (see views, walk trails, take photos).

Exemplo: Yes — visiting Ocean Park in Haiphong is on my bucket list. I want to see its colorful, historic buildings and walk the wooded trails to enjoy the scenery and take photos. It looks like a beautiful place to relax and explore.

× To be honest, when I was dry, I like doing outdoor activities.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child, I liked doing outdoor activities.

The original mixes past context 'when I was...' with present tense 'like'. The correct tense for a past habitual activity is past simple 'liked'. Also 'dry' is incorrect word choice; 'a child' is appropriate.

× After school, my friends and I used to go to parks to play together.

✓ After school, my friends and I used to go to parks to play together.

Sentence is correct; it properly uses 'used to' to indicate a past habit. No change needed.

× We spent hours there playing on swings and sighs.

✓ We spent hours there playing on swings and slides.

The verb form 'playing' is correct after 'spent hours', but 'sighs' is a wrong word choice. The intended noun is likely 'slides'. Replace with 'slides' to convey correct meaning.

× I was really fun and I still deadly cherished those memories.

✓ I had a lot of fun and I still dearly cherish those memories.

'I was really fun' is incorrect because 'fun' describes experiences, not the person; use 'I had a lot of fun'. 'Deadly cherished' is incorrect collocation and tone; 'dearly cherish' expresses affection. Also tense consistency: 'still cherish' (present) fits better than 'still cherished' if the speaker meaning is ongoing.

× Yes, absolutely. I still love going to parks to escape the hustle and bustle.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I still love going to parks to escape the hustle and bustle.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches present habitual action. No change needed.

× Currently I often go there to work, refresh my mind and reduce stress.

✓ Currently, I often go there to work, refresh my mind, and reduce stress.

Verb tenses are appropriate (present simple for habitual actions). Minor punctuation: add commas for clarity. No tense change required.

× In the green spaces is a perfect place for me to climb down after a long day at work.

✓ The green spaces are a perfect place for me to unwind after a long day at work.

Original word order is incorrect and 'is' doesn't agree with plural 'spaces'. Use subject-first order: 'The green spaces are...' Also 'climb down' is wrong collocation for relaxing; 'unwind' or 'relax' is appropriate. Subject-verb agreement corrected as well.

× Yes, absolutely, because today the city weighs too many buildings and heavy traffic sums quickly to save severe air pollution.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because nowadays the city has too many buildings and heavy traffic, which quickly causes severe air pollution.

Multiple errors: 'weighs too many buildings' is incorrect verb choice; use 'has too many buildings'. 'Sums quickly to save' is nonsensical; intended meaning is that traffic quickly causes or leads to severe air pollution. Rephrase for clarity and correct verb usage.

× So I think the government and citizens need to grow more plants and build more parks.

✓ So I think the government and citizens should plant more trees and build more parks.

'Need to grow more plants' is understandable but 'should plant more trees' is more natural. This uses modal 'should' to express recommendation; 'plant' is better collocation than 'grow' for policy suggestions.

× That way people will have more space do morning.

✓ That way people will have more space to exercise in the morning.

Missing 'to' before verb 'do' and 'do morning' is incomplete. Add infinitive 'to' and specify action; 'exercise in the morning' makes intended meaning clear.

× Actually visiting Ocean Park in Haiphong is on my bucket list.

✓ Actually, visiting Ocean Park in Haiphong is on my bucket list.

Sentence is acceptable; added comma for clarity. No tense change required because 'is on my bucket list' correctly indicates future intention.

× I really want to go there because it's a beautiful place.

✓ I really want to go there because it's a beautiful place.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches present desire. No change needed.

× I love the classic style buildings that we are painted in different vibrant colors.

✓ I love the classic-style buildings that are painted in different vibrant colors.

'We are painted' incorrectly uses pronoun 'we'; the subject should be 'buildings'. Also 'classic style' should be hyphenated 'classic-style' when used as an adjective. Remove incorrect pronoun and use passive 'are painted'.

× Also, the woods park has a very luxurious atmosphere.

✓ Also, the wooded park has a very pleasant atmosphere.

'Woods park' is awkward; 'wooded park' or 'woodland park' is better. 'Luxurious' usually refers to opulence; if the intended meaning is serene and pleasant, use 'pleasant'. Adjust adjective choice to match likely meaning.