Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense consistency (use past tense), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often ran around and played games with my friends, and sometimes we climbed trees or had small picnics, which made those days very memorable.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer first (Yes/No), use correct grammar and avoid hesitation. Explain reason concisely with a linking word and one specific detail about your schedule or feelings.

Exemplo: Not really. I work full time as a service crew, so my shifts are long and stressful, and I rarely have free time to visit parks.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give a clear reason. Fix grammar and repetition, use linking words like 'because' and be specific about benefits of more parks (e.g., family space, relaxation). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. Because parks give children safe places to play and also provide quiet green spaces for families and people to relax, more parks would improve the city's quality of life.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, complete response and correct grammar (e.g., 'give' → 'gives'). State a specific park or type of park if possible, use linking words and finish the sentence. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the large botanical garden near my city when I have free time because it gives me peace and a chance to unwind after busy workdays.

× Yes, I like going to the park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park.

The question asked about the past (Did you like going to parks as a child?). The student used present simple 'like' which is inconsistent. Use past tense 'liked' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: Use past simple when referring to habits or feelings in childhood: 'I liked going to the park.'

× As a child I used to run around and play games with my with my friends and sometimes we climb trees or had a little picnics which made it really fun and more memorable.

✓ As a child I used to run around and play games with my friends, and sometimes we climbed trees or had little picnics, which made it really fun and more memorable.

Mixed verb forms: 'used to' with base forms is correct, but 'we climb' is present tense and should be past 'we climbed' to match 'used to' and 'had'. Also duplicate 'with my' and plural article agreement 'little picnics' not 'a little picnics'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, keep past tense consistently, and use correct article/number: 'we climbed trees' and 'had little picnics.'

× Now that I'm 22 years old, I don't know because now I I am working as a service crew and it's really stressful and I don't have any more time.

✓ Now that I'm 22 years old, I don't know because I am working as a service crew member and it's really stressful, so I don't have much free time.

Tense is present but sentence contains repetition 'now I I' and incorrect noun phrase 'service crew' which needs 'member' or 'on the service crew.' 'Any more time' is awkward; use 'much free time.' Suggestion: remove repeated words and use 'service crew member' and 'much free time.'

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in in the city because children played all the time in the into the park.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because children used to play in the park all the time.

Repeated 'in in' and wrong preposition sequence 'in the into the park.' Also tense should reference habitual past: 'played' is okay but 'used to play' better matches habitual sense. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, choose one preposition 'in the park', and use 'used to play' for habitual past actions.

× And when you see children playing, it feels like you're going back to the to the childhood.

✓ And when you see children playing, it feels like you're going back to childhood.

Duplicate 'to the to the' and incorrect article 'the childhood.' 'Childhood' is an uncountable noun that does not need 'the.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words and drop the article: 'going back to childhood.'

× If I have a free time in the near future, I would like to go to the park many times as possible because it give me peace and.

✓ If I have free time in the near future, I would like to go to the park as many times as possible because it gives me peace.

'a free time' is incorrect: 'free time' is uncountable and needs no article. Word order 'many times as possible' should be 'as many times as possible.' Verb agreement: 'it give' should be 'it gives.' Sentence ended abruptly; complete final noun. Suggestion: remove 'a', reorder phrase, and use third-person singular 'gives.'