Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense (past) and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, and, because) and precise vocabulary (crowded, exciting, memorable). Keep to fewer than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were lively and full of activities. For example, I often played games with my friends on the grass and we fed ducks near the pond. Those visits were memorable because we laughed a lot and felt free.

Sugestão: Answer directly with present tense and give a clear reason. Avoid confusing phrases and unclear nouns. Use one linking word (because or although) and provide a specific current habit or feeling. Keep it concise and grammatical.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of happy times with my friends. For instance, I like strolling there now to relax and watch families and birds, which makes me feel calm.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion (yes/no) and give specific reasons why more parks are beneficial (community, leisure, family). Use linking words (because, so) and avoid irrelevant or unclear country references. Limit to three to four sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for families to gather and children to play. For example, new parks could include playgrounds and seating areas, which would encourage neighbors to socialize and exercise.

Sugestão: Give a clear, consistent response. If you are unsure, say so and offer a brief reason or possible condition (e.g., if a new park opens). Use linking words (however, but) and avoid contradictory statements. Be concise and grammatical.

Exemplo: I'm not sure at the moment; I don't have any specific parks I plan to visit in the near future. However, if a new park with interesting facilities opened nearby, I would consider going to explore it with friends.

× Yes, I like to go to parks as a child because it was very frantical and try et cetera, enjoy.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because it was very fun and exciting.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I like' with the past time phrase 'as a child'. Use past tense 'liked' or the gerund 'liked going' to match the time reference. Also 'frantical' is incorrect word choice; 'fun and exciting' conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with time expressions (use past for childhood).

× But other people, like with old friends at that time, it was the best experience.

✓ Spending time with my friends back then was the best experience.

The original has an unclear subject and redundant prepositions ('like with old friends at that time, it was...'). This is a sentence structure problem; reorganize to have a clear subject 'Spending time with my friends' and appropriate time phrase 'back then'. Suggestion: state the subject first and remove unnecessary words.

× I enjoyed a lot.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot.

The verb 'enjoyed' is correct past tense but the object is missing; add 'it' and place adverb 'a lot' after the verb phrase for natural English. Suggestion: include an object when using 'enjoy' in past tense.

× Yes, I still like to go to parks because I actually enjoy, because what in my mind comes the old man who used with my friends and the park we used to enjoy and play along.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because I enjoy remembering the times with my friends at the park where we used to play together.

This sentence mixes tenses and has many unclear fragments. Use present simple 'I still like' with gerund 'going' for habits, and 'used to play' for past habitual action. 'Used with my friends' and 'play along' are incorrect; replace with 'times with my friends' and 'play together'. Suggestion: simplify into one clear clause: present habit + reason + past memory.

× The mammals are still in my mind, so yeah.

✓ Those memories are still in my mind, so yeah.

'Mammals' is the wrong word; the intended word is 'memories'. This is an incorrect noun choice that makes the sentence meaningless. Suggestion: use accurate vocabulary; 'memories' fits the context.

× I would like to see more parks in my city, definitely because, uh, that's an Australia for me to remember our families together with my friends, with my uncle, like with anyone, whoever I used to play with.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city, definitely, because parks help me remember family times with my friends, my uncle, and others I used to play with.

The modal 'would like' is fine, but the sentence contains wrong noun 'Australia' and awkward phrasing. This is a modal context with vocabulary errors; replace 'that's an Australia' with 'parks help me remember'. Also simplify the list of people. Suggestion: keep the modal phrase then provide a clear reason using correct nouns.

× So this is one of the very best part of my life.

✓ So this is one of the very best parts of my life.

There is a number agreement error between 'one of the' which requires a plural noun 'parts'. This falls under adjective/adverb or plural correctness; use 'parts'. Suggestion: after 'one of the', always use a plural noun.

× I think now because I would not like to go any parks in future because I'm not very interested in it.

✓ I think that now I would not like to go to any parks in the future because I'm not very interested in them.

Multiple issues: 'go any parks' requires preposition 'to' and plural agreement 'parks' with pronoun 'them'. Also add 'in the future' for natural phrasing. This involves incorrect verb phrase and pronoun agreement. Suggestion: use 'go to any parks' and match pronoun 'them' to plural 'parks'.

× But yeah, hope so, like we'll see that because I'm blank right now.

✓ But yeah, I hope so; we'll see, because I can't decide right now.

'Hope so' needs subject 'I' and 'we'll see that' is awkward—use 'we'll see'. 'I'm blank' is informal and unclear; replace with 'I can't decide right now'. Tense 'we'll see' (future) fits the context of uncertainty. Suggestion: use clear subjects and common expressions for indecision.