Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear past-tense structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I enjoyed the playground equipment, especially the swings, and it was a relaxing place where my family and I spent weekend afternoons together.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence in the present tense and one or two specific reasons. Use correct pronouns and simple linking words to make the answer coherent. Avoid hesitations and unclear words.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. My child loves the playground, so we often go so she can run freely, and it gives us a good opportunity to bond as a family.

Sugestão: Answer directly and add a brief reason that includes a specific benefit. Remove repeated phrases and hesitations; use a linking word like 'because' to connect your reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and give families more outdoor options for weekend activities.

Sugestão: Be specific about which parks or countries you mean and explain one clear reason. Use complete sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'folks' or trailing off at the end.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit national parks abroad in the future, for example, Japan's gardens or New Zealand's national parks, because I want to experience different landscapes and park designs that differ from those in the Philippines.

× Yes, because I enjoyed playing in the playground and it's relaxing and also it's, it was, it was together with my family.

✓ Yes, because I enjoyed playing in the playground; it was relaxing, and I used to go there with my family.

The original mixes present participle 'it's relaxing' with past context 'I enjoyed' and redundant fragments 'it's, it was, it was together'. Use past tense consistently for past habits: 'it was relaxing' and 'I used to go there with my family'. Also remove repeated words and join clauses clearly.

× Yes, because I have my child that love to go to the park because it has a playground and it has an extent or extent that she that he can run and play and also that is the bonding with my family.

✓ Yes, because I have a child who loves to go to the park; it has a playground and space where she or he can run and play, and it is good for family bonding.

Errors: wrong relative pronoun 'that' for people (use 'who'), subject-verb agreement 'child ... love' should be 'child ... loves', awkward phrase 'extent' should be 'space' or 'area', and clumsy gender phrasing. Use 'a child' (article) and 'who loves'. Also use 'where' for place and a clear phrase 'family bonding'.

× Yes, since I have my child that I love playing around. I I'm still, I still, I'm still like to see more parks here in the city.

✓ Yes, since I have a child who loves playing outside, I would still like to see more parks in the city.

Problems: 'my child that I love playing around' is ungrammatical; use 'a child who loves playing outside'. Repeated filler words removed. 'I'm still like to see' is incorrect; use 'I would still like to see' for preference. Subject-verb agreement: 'child who loves'.

× If there are any folks that I want to go in the future, that is in the other country because that is so much difference here in the Philippines.

✓ If there are any places I want to visit in the future, they would be in other countries because things are very different there compared to the Philippines.

Errors: 'folks' (people) is incorrect for places; use 'places'. 'I want to go' should be 'I want to visit'. Tense and modality: use conditional/modal 'would be' for hypothetical future choices. 'So much difference here' is awkward; rephrase to 'things are very different there compared to the Philippines'.

× I am not saying that it's not good here in the Philippines, but I want to experience a different.

✓ I am not saying that the Philippines is not good, but I want to experience something different.

Problems: 'experience a different' is incomplete—different what? Use 'something different'. Also simplify 'it's not good here in the Philippines' to 'the Philippines is not good' to avoid awkward pronoun reference. Conjunction use 'but' is fine; adjust following clause for completeness.