Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and articles (e.g., "when I was a child"). Avoid vague phrases like "can avoid" and replace them with clear descriptions of activities or feelings.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, after a long day of studying my parents and I would walk to a nearby park to relax and play games, which helped me unwind and socialize with other children.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar by using simple, correct sentences. Use linking words (however, but, so) properly and avoid repetition. State current situation clearly and then mention a plan or intention with specific actions and timeframes.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like parks, but nowadays I am very busy with work, so I don’t have much free time. However, I plan to set aside at least one afternoon each weekend to visit a park and relax.

Sugestão: Make your reasons clear and use accurate vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence, then give two specific benefits with linking words (for example, not only... but also). Use correct collocations: "produce oxygen," "people’s health," "green spaces," "help people relax."

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. More parks would be beneficial because they produce oxygen and improve people’s health. In addition, green spaces help reduce stress and give residents a place to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Be specific about the park and give clear reasons for wanting to visit. Correct grammar and reduce repetition. Use linking words to contrast the park’s busy location with its calming features. Name the park correctly if possible (e.g., "Central Park"), and describe what you want to do there.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York, which I’ve heard is very popular. Although it is in the middle of a busy city, it offers large lawns, lakes and walking paths where I could relax, have a picnic and escape the city noise.

× Yes I did, when I was child I always went to a park with my family that can avoid after long day of study.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I always went to a park with my family to relax after long days of study.

Errors: missing article before 'child' (should be 'a child'), 'a park' is okay but 'can avoid' is incorrect and unclear, and 'long day of study' should be plural 'long days of study'. Type: singular/plural and wording. Suggestion: add articles where needed ('a child'), use plural for habitual plural time periods ('long days'), and replace incorrect phrase 'that can avoid' with 'to relax' or 'to get away' to convey intended meaning.

× Yes I do. However nowadays I will very busy with my job that a reason why is is is difficult to find the last time with the past.

✓ Yes, I do. However, nowadays I am very busy with my job, which is the reason why it is difficult to find time like in the past.

Errors: incorrect future form 'will very busy' should be present 'am very busy' for current state; redundant words and wrong phrasing 'that a reason why is is is'; 'the last time with the past' is incorrect—use 'time like in the past'. Suggestion: use present simple for current situations ('I am very busy'), use 'which is the reason why' or 'that's why', and say 'time like in the past' or 'as I did before'.

× In the future I will try to spend a lot of time to the past.

✓ In the future, I will try to spend a lot of time in parks.

Errors: 'to the past' is nonsensical here; likely intended 'in parks' or 'like in the past'. Use future tense 'I will try' is fine. Suggestion: specify the object of spending time ('in parks') or say 'spend more time, like in the past' to convey meaning.

× Yes, absolutely, as the a park is very important for the atmosphere, not only for building oxygen for the people healthy but also greenery health, they relax.

✓ Yes, absolutely. A park is very important for the environment, not only for producing oxygen to keep people healthy but also because greenery helps people relax.

Errors: 'the a park' has double articles; 'atmosphere' wrong word—use 'environment'; awkward phrases 'building oxygen for the people healthy' and 'greenery health, they relax'. Suggestion: remove redundant articles, use correct nouns ('environment'), and restructure: 'producing oxygen to keep people healthy' and 'greenery helps people relax'.

× Yes, of course I heard about the New York City Center park that it very popular.

✓ Yes, of course I have heard about New York City's Central Park; it is very popular.

Errors: tense and verb form: 'I heard' can be acceptable but 'I have heard' fits present relevance; 'New York City Center park' is incorrect name—use 'Central Park' or 'New York City's Central Park'; the clause 'that it very popular' lacks auxiliary verb 'is'. Suggestion: use correct proper name and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it is very popular').

× Even though these parks stay in the center of the hustle and bustle city but also provide a numerous relaxing.

✓ Even though these parks are in the center of the bustling city, they also provide numerous opportunities for relaxation.

Errors: incorrect verb 'stay'—use 'are'; 'the hustle and bustle city' should be 'the bustling city' or 'the hustle and bustle of the city'; sentence combines 'Even though' and 'but' redundantly; 'provide a numerous relaxing' is ungrammatical—use 'numerous opportunities for relaxation'. Suggestion: avoid doubling subordinators ('Even though' with 'but'), use correct adjective 'bustling', and restructure noun phrase 'opportunities for relaxation'.