Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating that you liked parks, then give one or two specific reasons with simple linking words (for example, because / so). Avoid vague phrases like "this disappointment will release" and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I really liked going to parks as a child because they gave me a sense of freedom and helped me relax. For example, I used to run and play on the swings, which made me forget my worries and feel happier.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clearer grammar. Say whether you currently like parks, then give a concise reason with one specific example. Use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly, and avoid repeating ideas.

Exemplo: Not really, I don't go to parks much now because pollution has worsened in my city. For instance, the air near busy parks often smells and I worry about health effects, so I prefer cleaner indoor spaces.

Sugestão: Keep the answer simple and specific. State that you would like more parks, give one or two concrete benefits (e.g., more green space, exercise areas), and use linking words like "because" and "so". Avoid vague adjectives like "glamorous" and "dazzling" without examples.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they add green space and places for people to exercise. For example, more small parks in neighborhoods would make it easier for families to walk or children to play safely.

Sugestão: Be specific about the park and why you want to visit. Provide one clear reason and an example of an activity you would do there. Fix repetitions and ensure sentences are grammatical and concise.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Iqbal Park with my family in the future because it is a large, well-known park with pleasant gardens and playgrounds. We could have a picnic and let the children play on the swings while we enjoy the scenery.

× Yes, I would like to go to the parks as a child because from this disappointment will release and the more freedom will come from which ultimately our physical and mental peace will become strong, so we will easily enjoy and move on further.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because it helped me release stress and gave me more freedom, which ultimately strengthened my physical and mental well-being, so I could enjoy myself and move on easily.

The original uses modal 'would' and future-like constructions that do not match the past habitual situation asked by the examiner. Use past simple 'liked' for a past habit and clear cause-effect clauses. Replace awkward phrases: 'from this disappointment will release' -> 'it helped me release stress'; 'the more freedom will come' -> 'gave me more freedom'; 'physical and mental peace will become strong' -> 'strengthened my physical and mental well-being'. Also adjust pronouns and verb forms to maintain past narrative consistency.

× No, I would not like to go to the parks right now because the pollution rate is increasing or exceeding day by day, from which the air pollution and the other pollution are automatically increases.

✓ No, I do not like going to parks right now because pollution is increasing day by day, which causes air and other types of pollution to rise.

The original mixes modal 'would' with present circumstances; use present simple 'do not like' for current preference. 'is increasing or exceeding day by day' is redundant; 'pollution is increasing day by day' is clearer. 'are automatically increases' has subject-verb agreement and form errors; use 'to rise' or 'increases' matching subject. Remove unnecessary 'from which' phrasing.

× So which will give a bad impression and badly effect on our mental health and physical health.

✓ This has a bad effect on our mental and physical health.

The sentence uses 'which' incorrectly as a subject and 'badly effect' (verb noun confusion). Replace with a clear noun phrase: 'This has a bad effect' or 'This adversely affects our mental and physical health.' Also avoid repeating 'health' and use adjective 'mental and physical' in correct order.

× So that's why we will not go.

✓ So that's why I will not go.

The examiner asked about current preference; earlier context used 'I' not 'we'. Using 'we will not go' wrongly switches person. If referring to the student's choice, use 'I will not go' or present 'I am not going.' Also 'will' is unnecessary for planned immediate preference; 'I am not going' or 'I do not go' may be better, but 'I will not go' is acceptable for decision.

× Yes, I would be happy when I see more parks surrounding my neighbors and in my city from because it will give a quite fantastic look and a glamorous look from which a dazzling environment will create for each one which will make everyone happy.

✓ Yes, I would be happy to see more parks around my neighborhood and in my city because they will give a beautiful, glamorous appearance and create a pleasant environment that will make everyone happy.

Original misuses prepositions ('surrounding my neighbors' should be 'around my neighborhood'), has extraneous words ('from because'), and awkward phrasing ('give a quite fantastic look and a glamorous look' -> 'give a beautiful, glamorous appearance'). Use plural 'parks' and 'they' to refer back. Simplify clauses and correct word order.

× Yes, I will want to go to the park in future with my family.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park in the future with my family.

Mixes 'will want' and simple future awkwardly. For future plans or desires, use 'would like to' or 'want to' with 'in the future.' 'the park' is indefinite here so use 'a park' or name the park. 'in future' should be 'in the future.'

× The famous which is the most famous one in our city is the Iqbal Park because it will give a family family year in familiar environment and outstanding swings and from which the people will automatically get excellent scene.

✓ The most famous park in our city is Iqbal Park because it provides a family-friendly environment, great swings, and beautiful views.

The sentence is ungrammatical and redundant ('The famous which is the most famous one'). Reorder to 'The most famous park in our city is Iqbal Park.' Remove repeated words 'family family year' and incorrect 'familiar environment' -> 'family-friendly environment.' 'from which the people will automatically get excellent scene' is awkward; use 'and beautiful views.' Simplify structure and ensure parallelism in the list of features.