Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and coherence: use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and give one or two clear supporting details. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add specific memories linked with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "and").

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often played on the swings with neighbourhood children and we sometimes had small picnics under the trees. Those afternoons helped me make friends and enjoy being outdoors.

Sugestão: Work on word choice, tense and fluency: avoid filler words and repetition, use appropriate adjectives (e.g., "calm" or "refreshed") and correct verb forms. Provide one concise reason and a specific example of what you do there to support your statement, using a linking word such as "because" or "so".

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me feel calm and refreshed. For example, I often take short walks there and these strolls bring back vivid childhood memories.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar: use accurate words ("parks," not "parts"), avoid hesitations, and present a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and a brief note about current availability. Use linking words like "because" and "however."

Exemplo: From my perspective, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give people a place to relax and have short picnics. However, currently there are very few parks and the ones that exist are too far from most neighbourhoods.

Sugestão: Improve tense consistency and conciseness: start with a clear sentence about the park you want to visit, then give one or two specific memories or reasons. Use correct past/present tense and stronger word choices (e.g., "lasting memories" instead of "firm memories").

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit a park in Mogadishu called Floral Fantasy, a water-themed park I went to with my family as a child. I have many lasting memories of playing on the slides there, and I would love to return to relive those moments.

× I do love going to the park when I was a child because the I used to play in the swing in the garden with other children.

✓ I loved going to the park when I was a child because I used to play on the swings in the garden with other children.

Tense inconsistency: 'do love' is present tense but the clause 'when I was a child' requires past tense. Use 'loved' to match past time. Preposition and article: 'in the swing' should be 'on the swings' and remove extra 'the'. Suggestion: use past simple 'loved' and 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× So I do love to go in the park though we used to do the picnic.

✓ So I loved going to the park; we used to have picnics there.

Tense and structure: 'do love' conflicts with past context; use 'loved'. 'go in the park' is awkward; 'go to the park' or 'going to the park' is correct. 'do the picnic' is incorrect collocation; use 'have picnics'. Suggestion: keep past tense and use natural collocations.

× I don't remember that.

✓ I don't remember that.

This sentence is grammatical and fits the speaker's uncertainty about specific memories; no tense change needed. (Kept to follow rule: only correct items in the provided problem types list.)

× Yeah exactly. I still love to go to the parks because it makes me so calm and so cool and my my mind will get so freshly.

✓ Yes, I still love going to parks because they calm me and help me feel refreshed.

'Still love to go' is acceptable but 'still love going' is more natural. Use plural 'parks' with plural pronoun 'they'. 'Makes me so calm and so cool' is informal and redundant; use 'calm' and 'refreshed'. 'My my mind will get so freshly' is ungrammatical: 'refreshed' is adjective, not 'freshly'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual feelings and choose correct adjective forms.

× So I do love going to parks and I will get vivid phones of my memories which I had in my childhood.

✓ So I love going to parks and I get vivid flashes of the memories I had in my childhood.

Pronoun and word choice issues: 'will get' implies future but the meaning is habitual present, so use 'get'. 'vivid phones' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'vivid photos' or 'vivid flashes' (mental images). 'Which I had in my childhood' is better as 'from my childhood' or 'I had in my childhood'. Suggestion: use correct noun ('flashes' or 'photos') and present simple for habitual experiences.

× So it is my comfort zone to be doing in the park for a short walk also.

✓ So it is my comfort zone to take a short walk in the park.

Awkward structure: 'to be doing in the park for a short walk' is ungrammatical. Use infinitive 'to take a short walk' and place location 'in the park' after the activity. Suggestion: simplify to 'to take a short walk in the park.'

× Like from my perspective, I would like to see more parts in my city because it's quite uh, remarkable that it's make people happy and for a short picnic also and for a relaxing moment it will be so helpful.

✓ From my perspective, I would like to see more parks in my city because they make people happy, are good for short picnics, and are helpful for relaxing.

Multiple errors: 'parts' should be 'parks' (word choice). 'It's make' wrong verb form; use 'they make' to agree with plural 'parks'. Preposition 'for a short picnic also' is awkward; use 'for short picnics'. 'For a relaxing moment it will be so helpful' is awkward and tense-mixed; use 'are helpful for relaxing'. Suggestion: use plural agreement, correct noun, and parallel list structure.

× But the fact is there is no more parks left in my city, It is too distance where they are located.

✓ But the fact is there are no more parks left in my city; they are located too far away.

Subject-verb agreement with 'there is/are': 'parks' is plural so use 'there are'. 'It is too distance' is incorrect; use 'too far' or 'too far away'. Also join clauses correctly. Suggestion: 'there are no more parks... they are located too far away.'

× Exactly, there is my park which is located in Mogadishu and it is named the Floral Fantasy.

✓ Actually, there is a park I like in Mogadishu called Floral Fantasy.

'There is my park' is awkward; use 'there is a park' or 'my park is'. Use article 'the' only if specific; 'Floral Fantasy' as a name doesn't need 'the'. Suggestion: 'a park I like in Mogadishu called Floral Fantasy.'

× Actually it is a water theme park which I went with my family when I was a child.

✓ Actually it is a water-theme park which I went to with my family when I was a child.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'went' for visiting a place: 'went to'. Hyphenate 'water-theme' or 'water theme park' is fine. Tense 'went' is correct for past. Suggestion: include 'to' in 'went to'.

× I had many firm memories in them and I was very happy that I still remember the enjoyable moments which I have played with.

✓ I have many fond memories from there, and I was very happy; I still remember the enjoyable moments I shared with my family.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'firm memories in them' is incorrect; use 'fond memories from there' or 'many fond memories there'. 'Which I have played with' is incorrect verb choice for memories; use 'shared with my family' or 'spent with'. Tense mixing: use 'have' for present relevance or past simple consistently. Suggestion: use 'have many fond memories' and 'I shared those moments with my family.'