Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Correct tense and article use will improve clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and climbed the jungle gym with neighborhood friends, so we spent hours outdoors. Because of that, I have many happy childhood memories of being active and social.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence about your current habit, then support it with a specific reason and one example, using linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Avoid vague phrases and incorrect plurals.

Exemplo: Not really, because I am busy studying for exams at the moment. However, I do visit the park occasionally with my sister to watch her play or to relax for a short break.

Sugestão: Make your point simply and give one clear, specific reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "noise pollution") and avoid unclear time phrases. Link your reason with words like "because" or "so".

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks built in my city because they would reduce noise pollution and provide peaceful places to relax. For example, a small green area near busy streets would make the neighborhood quieter and more pleasant.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear statement about your future plans, then give a specific example and reason. Use linking words like "for example" or "such as" and avoid filler words. Keep sentences grammatically correct.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks abroad in the future. For example, I want to see the national parks in the United States because they offer diverse landscapes and great opportunities for hiking and photography.

× Yes, I do there is.

✓ Yes, I did.

The original uses 'there is' incorrectly; the question asks about past preference ('as a child'), so use past tense 'did'. 'There is' indicates existence and is unnecessary here. Use 'Yes, I did.' to answer directly. Suggestion: Answer with the correct tense and avoid unnecessary existential 'there is'.

× There was a lot of fun things to play with others and to hang out with others in my childhood.

✓ There were a lot of fun things to play with others and places to hang out during my childhood.

Plural subject 'a lot of fun things' requires plural verb 'were' (singular/plural issue and subject-verb agreement). Also 'in my childhood' is awkward; 'during my childhood' is natural. Repeating 'with others' is redundant; replace second phrase with 'places to hang out'. Suggestion: Use 'were' for plural subjects and prefer 'during my childhood'.

× Not really for my age now 'cause I'm struggling on tests and studies stuffs, but specifically with my sister.

✓ Not really at my age now because I'm struggling with tests and studies, but I do go with my sister sometimes.

Use 'at my age' not 'for my age'. 'Struggling on' is incorrect preposition; use 'struggling with'. 'Studies stuffs' is uncountable 'studies' or 'study stuff'—here 'studies' is enough. Also sentence lacked clarity; provide a coherent present-tense response. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('at my age', 'struggling with') and avoid plural 'stuffs'.

× I will go with her to play with child in the playground.

✓ I will go with her to play with children in the playground.

Singular 'child' is incorrect when speaking generally; use plural 'children'. Also include plural article or 'a child' if referring to one. 'Play with children' is natural. Ensure pronoun references are clear. Suggestion: Use 'children' when speaking generally and ensure pronouns match number.

× Yes I do, I am willing to see more parks built in my city cause in this temporary 10 comparatory days, sound pollutions and many others are just too not often.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks built in my city because recently, during these past ten days, there has been too much noise pollution and other problems.

Multiple issues: 'I do' is fine but 'I am willing to see' is unnatural—use 'would like to see'. 'Cause' should be 'because'. 'This temporary 10 comparatory days' is ungrammatical; 'recently, during these past ten days' conveys meaning. 'Sound pollutions' should be 'noise pollution' (uncountable). 'Too not often' is incorrect—likely meant 'too much' or 'too frequent'. Suggestion: Use natural phrases ('would like to see', 'because', 'during these past ten days', 'noise pollution') and avoid literal translations.

× Yes I do, especially parks that it's umm, besides my country cause because there's lots of different kinds of park.

✓ Yes, especially parks outside my country because there are many different kinds of parks.

'It's umm, besides my country' is ungrammatical; use 'outside my country'. 'Cause because' is redundant—use one. 'There's lots' should be 'there are many' because 'kinds of parks' is plural (subject-verb agreement). Also 'park' should be plural. Suggestion: Use 'outside my country' and 'there are many different kinds of parks'.

× For example, in the US there's national parks that I've never been to, but I'm excited and willing to.

✓ For example, in the US there are national parks that I have never been to, but I'm excited and willing to visit them.

'There's' should be 'there are' because 'national parks' is plural (there be/subject-verb agreement). 'I've never been to' is fine, but the sentence ends abruptly; add 'visit them' to complete the idea. Suggestion: Use 'there are' with plural nouns and finish the verb phrase ('visit them').