Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant words and incorrect phrases (e.g., “slice of drinks”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my brothers and I often walked together around the lake, and sometimes my parents bought us cold drinks, which made the outings feel special.

Sugestão: Give a clearer balanced response and correct word choices. Use linking words to contrast ideas (e.g., “however”, “but”) and give a specific reason why you prefer staying home and one concrete situation when you would go out.

Exemplo: Not really; I prefer staying at home because I find parks noisy and crowded. However, if the weather is pleasant I sometimes visit a quiet park to read or relax for an hour.

Sugestão: Clarify your opinion and fix grammar. Decide if you support more parks or more trees in general and express it with a clear topic sentence. Use specific examples and linking words like “for example” or “also”.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more green spaces in the city. For example, planting trees along sidewalks and creating small neighborhood parks would give people places to exercise and relax close to home.

Sugestão: Make your meaning clear and correct sentence structure and word choice. State directly whether you want to visit any park and give a realistic, specific reason or example. Avoid unclear phrases like “passed with a terrible place”.

Exemplo: I don't visit parks often at the moment, but in the future I'd like to go to a park that has animals and small pet areas, because spending time with cats or rabbits would be relaxing and attractive for families.

× Yes, I quite like it actually.

✓ Yes, I quite liked it actually.

The question 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' uses past tense. The response should match past tense when referring to childhood habits. Change 'like' to past simple 'liked' to maintain tense agreement. Suggestion: Use past simple for past experiences (I liked, I enjoyed).

× I love going out anyway with my brothers.

✓ I loved going out with my brothers anyway.

The question refers to childhood, so the verb should be in past tense ('loved'). Also, adverb placement: 'anyway' fits better at the end. Suggestion: Use past simple and place adverbs after the object.

× When we went to the park we usually went for a walk together and if I was lucky my parents would buy me slice of drinks.

✓ When we went to the park we usually went for a walk together and, if I was lucky, my parents would buy me a drink or a slice of cake.

Multiple issues: 'slice of drinks' is ungrammatical: 'slice' is used with countable items like cake; 'drinks' is plural and requires an article or quantifier. Also missing commas around the conditional phrase. Suggestion: Use correct noun collocation (a drink, a slice of cake) and punctuation.

× Well, I don't really like it anymore, I think it's quite annoying.

✓ Well, I don't really like it anymore; I think it's quite annoying.

Tense and meaning are fine, but the two independent clauses should be separated by a semicolon or period rather than a comma. Suggestion: Use proper punctuation to avoid comma splice.

× So nowadays I prefer staying at home.

✓ So nowadays I prefer to stay at home.

After 'prefer' the infinitive 'to stay' or the gerund 'staying' can be used, but 'prefer to stay' is more natural here. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to' + base verb for general preferences.

× However, if weather is pleasant I might go to parks to relax or just get lost in my chores.

✓ However, if the weather is pleasant I might go to the park to relax or just get away from my chores.

'Weather' normally requires the definite article 'the' when speaking generally. 'Go to parks' is awkward; use 'go to the park' or 'go to parks' consistently with article. 'Get lost in my chores' is unidiomatic; use 'get away from my chores'. Suggestion: Use 'the weather' and idiomatic expressions.

× To be honest, I wouldn't like trees are planted everywhere in Vietnam, such as on sidewalks, outside people's home and along the street, not just in parks.

✓ To be honest, I would like trees to be planted everywhere in Vietnam, such as on sidewalks, outside people's homes and along the streets, not just in parks.

'Wouldn't like trees are planted' mixes modal and clause forms incorrectly. Use 'would like' + infinitive 'to be planted' or 'I wish trees were planted'. Also plural forms: 'people's homes' and 'streets' are needed. Suggestion: Use 'I would like trees to be planted' or 'I wish trees were planted everywhere'.

× Additionally, locals can work out right in their neighborhood.

✓ Additionally, locals can work out right in their neighborhoods.

If referring generally to many people, plural 'neighborhoods' is more natural. 'Right in their neighborhood' is acceptable but plural makes it fit the general statement. Suggestion: Use plural when speaking generally about locations for many people.

× Actually I don't really like going to parse much right now, but if possible I hope that in the future I know we have passed with a terrible place like cats, dogs and rabbits to keep people company.

✓ Actually I don't really like going to parks much right now, but in the future I hope we can have places with animals like cats, dogs and rabbits to keep people company.

This sentence has multiple errors: 'parse' is a misspelling of 'parks'; 'if possible I hope that in the future I know we have passed with a terrible place' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'in the future I hope we can have places with animals...' which conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use correct spelling, simpler clause structure, and appropriate modal 'can' for future possibility.

× such as on sidewalks, outside people's home and along the street

✓ such as on sidewalks, outside people's homes and along the streets

When giving multiple examples in a general statement, plural forms 'homes' and 'streets' are appropriate. Suggestion: Make nouns plural for generalization.