Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and sentence structure, use linking words and give one or two specific details. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. For example, start with “Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child,” then explain why and add a specific memory or detail. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they made me feel refreshed and happy. I often played games with my friends and relaxed under the trees. I remember one park near my house that used to close early, which was disappointing because we wanted to stay longer.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add specific details and linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., tense, articles) and avoid filler. Mention frequency or typical times you go and one benefit. Keep it to 2–4 coherent sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks, but it depends on my schedule. Since I work full time, I usually visit a park in the evenings when I am free because walking there helps me relax and reduces my work-related stress.

Sugestão: Answer directly, use correct nouns and articles, and provide specific reasons with linking words (e.g., because, therefore). Explain how more parks would help residents with clear examples such as exercise, community space, or environmental benefits. Keep sentences concise and well structured.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many people use them for running and exercising in the mornings and evenings. More parks would give residents safe places to stay healthy and would improve the neighbourhood by adding green space.

Sugestão: Start with a clear direct answer, then give a specific example of a park or country you want to visit and explain why. Use correct vocabulary (country, developed, famous park names) and linking words (for example, because). Avoid hesitation words and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks in other countries, especially famous urban parks like Hyde Park in London or Central Park in New York. I want to see how they are designed and whether they offer better facilities than parks in my country, for example more playgrounds and walking paths.

× Yeah, usually I when I'm child I still go to park because it make me fresh and I go play with my friend and relax and it's sad for me because park near my house it does have food and no more the.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I usually went to the park because it made me feel refreshed. I played with my friends and relaxed. It was sad for me because the park near my house did not have food facilities anymore.

Multiple sentence structure issues: incorrect word order ('I when I'm child'), wrong tense (should be past), singular/plural ('friend' -> 'friends'), verb forms ('make' -> 'made'), awkward clauses and negative form ('it does have food and no more the' -> 'did not have food facilities anymore'). Suggestion: break the long run-on into shorter sentences, use past tense consistently for past habits, use correct plural where appropriate, and use clear negative construction like 'did not have'.

× Now depend on situation or my time personally because now I'm working so if I free at every IT evening I also still go to park because it make me fresh and can release my stress of work.

✓ Now it depends on the situation and my time. Because I am working, if I am free in the evenings I still go to the park because it makes me feel refreshed and helps relieve my work stress.

Errors: missing subject and verb ('Now depend' -> 'Now it depends'), incorrect time expression ('every IT evening' unclear; corrected to 'in the evenings'), tense and agreement ('I am working' OK, but 'if I free' -> 'if I am free'), third person singular agreement ('make' -> 'makes'), and verb choice ('can release my stress' -> 'helps relieve my stress'). Suggestion: include subjects with verbs, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural collocations like 'feel refreshed' and 'relieve stress'.

× Yeah, I want, uh, have a more park in my city because now people like to run in the park in the, in the country the very well running and evening or morning.

✓ Yes, I would like to have more parks in my city because people like to run in parks in the country; many people run in the morning and in the evening.

Errors: article and count noun ('a more park' -> 'more parks'), modal/formality ('I want' -> 'I would like' more polite), redundant phrases and word order ('in the park in the, in the country the very well running' unclear). Suggestion: use plural for countable noun with 'more', simplify the sentence, and use clear time phrases 'in the morning' and 'in the evening'.

× So if have more park, it's also good for us and for rent.

✓ So if there are more parks, it would be good for us and for renting.

Errors: missing 'there are' for existence, singular/plural ('more park' -> 'more parks'), and incorrect noun form ('for rent' -> 'for renting' or 'for rental'). Suggestion: use 'there are' for plural existence, match plural forms, and choose correct noun/gerund for purpose phrases.

× Yeah, it actually have. I want to go the park uh, for another country.

✓ Yes, there are some. I want to go to parks in other countries.

Errors: incorrect verb with dummy subject ('it actually have' -> 'there are some' or 'there is one'), wrong preposition and article ('go the park for another country' -> 'go to parks in other countries'). Suggestion: use 'there is/are' to indicate existence and 'go to' plus location; use plural or specify singular as needed.

× I want to know another con, another country that have park like my country are they develop more than my country.

✓ I want to visit another country that has parks like those in my country to see whether they are more developed than my country.

Errors: fragmented and redundant phrasing ('another con, another country'), wrong verb agreement ('that have park' -> 'that has parks'), awkward comparative clause ('are they develop more than my country' -> 'to see whether they are more developed than my country'). Suggestion: use 'visit' or 'go to' and correct subject-verb agreement; express comparisons with 'more developed' and use subordinate clause 'to see whether'.

× I want to go a lot of umm, park MOA.

✓ I want to visit many parks.

Errors: ungrammatical phrase and word choice ('a lot of park MOA' unclear). Use plural countable noun with 'many' or 'a lot of parks'. Suggestion: simplify to 'visit many parks' or 'go to a lot of parks' for clarity.