Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more fluent, grammatical, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense and plural nouns, and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often rode my bike there with friends and we would gather around the big oak tree to chat and play. This routine made weekends feel relaxed and fun.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly. Remove filler words (um, ah), use correct verbs and collocations (e.g., 'help me relax' not 'help me relax and write'), and provide a specific reason or example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. I often visit a local park after a long day because walking there helps me relax and clear my mind. For instance, I like sitting on a bench near the pond and reading for 20–30 minutes.

Sugestão: Provide a clear opinion with reasons and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct word forms (parks, city). Be specific about benefits of more parks (air quality, recreation) and give one concrete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think the city should create more parks because they improve air quality and give people space to exercise. For example, a new park with walking paths and trees would encourage families to spend time outdoors and reduce pollution.

Sugestão: Give a specific park or type of park and explain why you want to visit it. Use correct vocabulary (future phrasing: 'I would like to go to' or 'I want to visit') and link reasons with words like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes — I would like to visit a large botanical garden near the coast because it offers extensive green space and interesting plant collections. Visiting there would be relaxing and would encourage me to spend more time outdoors.

× I usually went to park with my friends and they we are always go went to surround the trees and went by bike.

✓ I usually went to the park with my friends; we always went around the trees and rode our bikes.

Errors: missing article before 'park' (should be 'the park'); mixed and incorrect verb forms 'are always go went' and inconsistent tense; 'went by bike' is awkward — use 'rode our bikes'. Correction uses past simple consistently. Suggestion: use the definite article 'the' for a specific place, keep verbs in the same past tense, and use appropriate verb 'ride' -> past participle 'rode' for past simple.

× I feel that umm going to the parks help me relax and write and umm more comfortable by go to parks and see the bench in the parks.

✓ I feel that going to the park helps me relax and write, and I feel more comfortable when I go to the park and sit on the bench.

Errors: subject-verb agreement—'going to the parks' as a singular gerund requires 'helps' (third person singular); inconsistent forms 'more comfortable by go' and missing pronoun 'I'. Also articles: 'the park' and 'the bench'. Correction uses gerund as subject with correct verb 'helps', includes pronoun 'I', uses 'when I go' and 'sit on the bench' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and use complete clauses with proper articles.

× Yes definitely uh, I think more parts in my cities have wishes give.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think we need more parks in my city.

Errors: 'more parts in my cities have wishes give' is ungrammatical—wrong words and plurality. The intended meaning is to request additional parks in one city. Correction simplifies to natural expression. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'parks' and singular 'my city' if referring to one city; use verbs like 'need' or 'should have'.

× The city is more umm fresh air and green city is help me.

✓ A greener city with fresher air would help me.

Errors: incorrect structure 'The city is more fresh air and green city is help me' — mixing nouns and adjectives and missing auxiliary. Correction forms an adjective phrase 'greener city' and uses conditional 'would help me'. Suggestion: use comparative adjective 'greener' and noun phrase 'fresher air', and include appropriate auxiliary verbs.

× Green city and UMM deserve umm deserve more. Too long.

✓ A green city deserves more parks; the city is too spread out.

Errors: repetition 'deserve umm deserve' and fragment 'Too long' unclear. Correction clarifies meaning: green city deserves more parks and interprets 'Too long' as 'too spread out' or 'too far apart'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and complete fragments into full sentences; state the intended complaint clearly.

× Yes I am. I think in the future I want to the past which gives me green space and umm it's good.

✓ Yes, I am. In the future I want parks that provide green space because that would be good.

Errors: 'I want to the past' is nonsensical and tense/word choice errors. The sentence should express desire for parks in future—use 'want' + noun clause 'parks that provide'. Correction uses modal 'would be' to indicate hypothetical future benefit. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases for desired things (parks) and relative clauses to describe them.

× Also make the city healthier and encourage people to spend time outdoors.

✓ They would also make the city healthier and encourage people to spend time outdoors.

Errors: sentence fragment missing subject. To be grammatical, include subject (e.g., 'They' referring to parks) and keep parallel verb forms. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and verb; use 'would' for conditional future benefits.