Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer grammatically correct and more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating phrases. Link details with simple connectors like “because” or “with.”

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my older sister to a small park near our neighborhood because it had swings and a pond where we fed ducks.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with a specific reason using correct tense and grammar. Avoid unfinished sentences and redundant phrases. Use linking words like “because” and “for example” to connect ideas, and be specific about feelings or activities you do there.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when I feel stressed because the trees and ponds help me relax. For example, I like sitting by a lake and listening to birds, which calms me down.

Sugestão: Answer directly and explain one or two clear reasons. Use accurate vocabulary (park, not part) and avoid repetition. State preferred types of parks and how they would help you, linking ideas with “because” or “so that.”

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. I would like more parks of different types—large recreational parks and small neighborhood green spaces—because they would allow me to take short breaks from work and get some fresh air.

Sugestão: Be precise and natural. Start with a direct statement about your plans, then add a brief reason or what you will do there. Avoid repeating time expressions and use correct article and name forms.

Exemplo: I’m planning to go to Renmin Park this afternoon to relax. I intend to walk around the lake and sit on a bench to read for an hour.

× Yes, I did like going to parks when I'm a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child.

The sentence mixes past tense with present tense. The event happened in the past, so use past tense verbs: 'liked' and 'was'. Also use 'a child' with past form 'was'. Suggestion: Keep past time expressions consistent by using past tense forms for both verbs.

× When I'm a little girl, I always go to the park nearby our neighbor with my older sister in that surrounding in that park.

✓ When I was a little girl, I always went to the park near our neighborhood with my older sister.

The sentence uses present tense 'I'm' and 'go' while describing past habitual actions. Use past forms 'was' and 'went'. 'Nearby our neighbor' is incorrect; use 'near our neighborhood' or 'near our house'. Also 'in that surrounding in that park' is redundant and unnecessary. Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood habits and simplify location phrases (near our neighborhood).

× Yes, I like going to park now, especially when I feel the stressed because the parks has so many trees and animals and sometimes they have lakes in it and when I get to the park I can feel.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park now, especially when I feel stressed, because the park has so many trees and animals and sometimes a lake, and when I get to the park I can relax.

Several article and noun number errors: use 'the park' for a general place you visit now. 'Feel the stressed' is incorrect; use 'feel stressed' (adjective). 'The parks has' mixes plural and singular; choose 'the park has' or 'parks have'. 'Sometimes they have lakes in it' is awkward; use 'sometimes a lake' or 'parks sometimes have lakes'. The final clause 'I can feel' is incomplete; likely intended 'I can relax'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and articles, remove unnecessary definite article before uncountable adjective 'stressed', and complete the final verb to express the intended meaning.

× I really want a big part or some small park in different styles.

✓ I really want a big park or some small parks in different styles.

'Part' is wrong in context; should be 'park'. Also singular/plural mismatch: use 'some small parks' for multiple small parks. Keep articles consistent: 'a big park' is correct for one park. Suggestion: Choose the correct noun ('park') and match singular/plural with the intended meaning.

× Just stay around my location because I really want to have a break during my job which can which can give me.

✓ They should be located near me because I want to take a break during work to relax.

Sentence is ungrammatical and repetitive ('which can which can give me') and uses awkward phrases like 'stay around my location' and 'during my job'. Rephrase to 'located near me' and 'during work' and complete the idea 'to relax'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition, use natural phrases for location and reason, and finish the clause with the intended result.

× Yes, I like going to park now, especially when I feel the stressed because the parks has so many trees and animals and sometimes they have lakes in it and when I get to the park I can feel.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now, especially when I feel stressed, because parks have many trees and animals and sometimes lakes, and when I get to a park I can relax.

Alternative correction using plural 'parks'. Ensures present tense consistency for current habits: 'like', 'feel'. Fixes article and number agreement: 'parks have', 'lakes', and completes final clause 'relax'. Suggestion: For general statements about parks, use plural nouns without 'the' and keep present tense consistent.

× I want to go to the Renmin park this afternoon, just this afternoon, to relax.

✓ I want to go to Renmin Park this afternoon to relax.

Minor capitalization and article adjustments: proper name 'Renmin Park' does not need 'the' before it in English. Repeating 'this afternoon' is redundant. Keep present simple 'want' for future plans. Suggestion: Capitalize proper nouns and avoid unnecessary repetition.