Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve fluency by reducing hesitations and unnecessary fillers (uh, like). Use one clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details. Pay attention to tense consistency (use past simple: “was” vs “used to be”). Combine short ideas with linking words to make the answer coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my parents and my younger brother, who always rode his bike, while my mother walked our little dog. Also, my father often bought ice creams for us, which made those visits very memorable.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and be more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise reasons with linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Replace vague phrases like "filled with emotions" with concrete details (e.g., relaxing, meeting friends).

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are relaxing and a great place to meet friends. For example, I often go with classmates to chat and play games, and sometimes I visit with my family for a peaceful walk.

Sugestão: Clarify sentences and remove colloquial phrases like "work guys" and excessive fillers. Give a clear opinion, support it with a reason and a realistic suggestion. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid exaggeration.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are only two or three at present. I think the city should create at least ten small parks to give residents more green spaces for walking and relaxing.

Sugestão: Be precise and use correct names and grammar ("Central Park in New York"). Explain specifically what appeals to you and give a brief reason. Avoid vague phrasing like "isolated it on Pinterest"; instead say "I've seen photos on Pinterest."

Exemplo: Yes, there is one park I would love to visit: Central Park in New York. I want to see its landscapes and iconic views because I have seen many inspiring photos of it on Pinterest and other sites.

× 'I usually was with my family, uh, like with my mom, dad and my little brother, he always rode his bike and my mom is, uh, always was with our dog, little dog.'

✓ 'I was usually with my family, like my mom, dad and my little brother; he always rode his bike, and my mom was always with our little dog.'

'Subject-verb agreement and word order: "I usually was" is awkward; adverbs of frequency like "usually" typically come before the main verb (I was usually). Mixing tenses "is, uh, always was" is incorrect; choose past tense "was always" to match the narrative. Use punctuation to avoid run-on sentences. Suggestion: place adverbs before verbs and keep consistent past tense for past events.'},{