Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your response is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a specific example or memory to make it more vivid (use one linking word to connect ideas). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to spend entire afternoons on the swings and playing hide-and-seek with my friends, which kept me active and happy. Those memories still make me smile.

Sugestão: Good structure: direct answer plus specific routines and reasons. To improve, combine similar ideas to avoid repetition (e.g., 'brisk walk or jog' and 'daily goals') and use one linking word for flow. Add a brief contrast with childhood if relevant.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy parks. After college I usually go for a brisk walk or a short jog to meet my daily exercise goals, and I also appreciate the peaceful scenery and fresh air that help me relax.

Sugestão: Strong answer with clear reasons and effects. To improve further, tighten phrasing and use one cohesive linking word (e.g., 'therefore' or 'consequently') to connect cause and effect. Add a brief concrete benefit or example of a park feature.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love more parks in my city because industrialization has reduced tree cover; therefore, new parks would restore greenery and improve air quality. They would also give residents places to exercise and relax, such as walking paths and playgrounds.

Sugestão: Very good: specific park named, cultural details and concrete features mentioned. To make it slightly more natural, combine short phrases with linking words and add a brief personal reason why those features appeal to you.

Exemplo: Yes, I want to visit Pula Deshpande Udyan in Pune because its blend of Japanese and Indian design sounds fascinating. I’m especially excited to walk along its tree-lined paths and water features with friends to relax and take photos.

× I used to have good exercise and a lot of fun when I was playing in the park.

✓ I used to get good exercise and have a lot of fun when I played in the park.

The original sentence uses 'have' with 'good exercise' which is unnatural; 'get exercise' is the correct collocation. Also 'when I was playing' mixes past continuous unnecessarily with 'used to'; simple past 'when I played' is clearer and fits habitual past actions. Suggest using simple past for habitual actions and correct verb collocations.

× When my college ends in the evening, I go for a brisk walk or sometimes even a jog which helps me complete my daily goals.

✓ When my college ends in the evening, I go for a brisk walk or sometimes even a jog, which helps me complete my daily goals.

The main grammar issue is punctuation: a comma is needed before the nonrestrictive clause 'which helps me complete my daily goals'. Also 'my college ends' is acceptable for scheduled events; no tense change needed. Suggest adding the comma to separate the clause for clarity.

× Also, being an adult, I really enjoy the nature and the scenic views which I get from the parks around me.

✓ Also, being an adult, I really enjoy nature and the scenic views that I get from the parks around me.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'nature' is incorrect here; 'nature' is an uncountable noun used generally without an article. Additionally, 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural in this restrictive clause. Suggest removing 'the' before 'nature' and using 'that' for a natural phrasing.

× Yes, I would love to see new parks being built in my city.

✓ Yes, I would love to see new parks built in my city.

The continuous passive 'being built' is unnecessary after 'see' in this context. Using the past participle 'built' after 'see' is more natural: 'see parks built' expresses the desire to witness new parks exist. Suggest using 'built' instead of 'being built' for a more natural construction.

× They would also give local people a place to exercise, relax, and reconnect with nature, which would bring back pleasant childhood memories.

✓ They would also give local people a place to exercise, relax, and reconnect with nature, which would bring back pleasant childhood memories for them.

The relative clause 'which would bring back pleasant childhood memories' lacks a clear referent for whom the memories return. Adding 'for them' clarifies that local people would recall those memories. Suggest adding an explicit pronoun when the referent could be ambiguous.

× It is built on Japanese and Indian themes and is a great mix of diverse cultures.

✓ It is built on Japanese and Indian themes and is a great mix of cultures.

The phrase 'diverse cultures' after 'mix of' is redundant because 'mix of cultures' already implies diversity. While not strictly ungrammatical, simplifying to 'mix of cultures' is more natural. Suggest removing 'diverse' to avoid redundancy.

× It has plenty of trees, water bodies, walkways which I would love to explore with my friends.

✓ It has plenty of trees, water bodies, and walkways that I would love to explore with my friends.

A comma or 'and' is needed to separate list items; also a comma before the relative clause helps clarity. 'Which' is fine but 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses describing these features. Suggest adding 'and' and using 'that' to improve flow and clarity.