Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, avoid filler words and tense errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense) and smoother phrasing will improve clarity.

Exemplo: Not really. When I was a child I was quite introverted, so I preferred staying at home and playing video games with a close friend rather than going to parks. As a result, I didn’t spend much time outdoors.

Sugestão: Answer directly, reduce pauses and correct verb forms. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'so') and give one specific reason plus a brief consequence.

Exemplo: Not really. Because of the demands of my job, I rarely have time to relax, so after a short walk I usually go home and focus on work instead of visiting a park.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and filler words, choose correct vocabulary (e.g. 'high-rise buildings', 'green spaces', 'air quality'). Keep it concise and coherent using linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. My city has many high-rise buildings, so we urgently need more green spaces to improve air quality and provide residents with places to relax. For example, parks can reduce pollution and offer recreational areas for families.

Sugestão: Start with a direct statement about whether you want to visit a specific park. Mention the park's name and give one specific reason you want to go. Explain travel constraints briefly if relevant, using correct grammar and fewer hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Car Park in Ho Chi Minh City, which is famous for its large trees and peaceful atmosphere. However, I currently live outside the city, so I haven’t been able to go there often.

× Actually when I was young, uh, actually I am the introvert person, so I would refer to stay at home and, uh, playing video games with my friend instead of, uh, go to the parks.

✓ Actually when I was young, I was an introverted person, so I preferred to stay at home and play video games with my friends instead of going to the park.

Pronoun and word-choice errors: 'I am' conflicts with past time 'when I was young' so use past 'I was'. 'the introvert person' is incorrect; use adjective form 'an introverted person'. 'would refer to stay' is incorrect collocation; use 'preferred to stay'. Parallel verb forms needed: 'stay' and 'play' (infinitive or base) or use gerunds consistently; here 'preferred to stay and play' is natural. 'my friend' should be plural if referring to general childhood friends: 'my friends'. 'go to the parks' should be 'going to the park' to match 'instead of' which requires a gerund and singular/general 'the park'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, use correct adjective form, correct collocations and parallel structure.

× Umm, no. Because of the, the characteristic of my work, uh, I don't usually have time to relax. So I whenever I done walking, I will go home and, uh, concentrate on my work instead of go to the park.

✓ Umm, no. Because of the nature of my work, I don't usually have time to relax. So whenever I finish walking, I go home and concentrate on my work instead of going to the park.

Tense and verb form errors: 'the characteristic of my work' is awkward; 'the nature of my work' is natural. 'I don't usually have time' is correct. 'I whenever I done walking' mixes tenses and uses wrong past participle; use present tense 'whenever I finish walking'. 'I will go home and concentrate' should be simple present 'I go home and concentrate' to express habitual action. 'instead of go to the park' needs gerund 'going to the park' after 'instead of'. Suggestion: use consistent present-tense forms for habitual actions and proper verb forms after 'instead of'.

× You know, because the densities of the high building in my city is, uh, Cutter High and, uh, I think that the city needs more, uh, green place like a park to improve the, the atmosphere because, uh, the Siri, the city is, uh, surrounded by the.

✓ You know, because the density of high-rise buildings in my city is rather high, I think the city needs more green spaces like parks to improve the atmosphere because the city is densely built up.

Preposition and noun-form issues: 'densities of the high building' should be 'density of high-rise buildings' (singular 'density' for overall measure, plural 'buildings'). 'Cutter High' is unclear; 'rather high' fits meaning. 'green place like a park' should be plural or uncountable 'green spaces like parks' for general need. 'surrounded by the.' is incomplete; express 'densely built up' or 'surrounded by buildings'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and prepositions, and complete the sentence with the object of 'surrounded by'.

× Uh, actually I have heard about, uh, go the car rental park in Ho Chi Minh City before, uh, and it is famous for uh, uh, having a lot of like, uh, big trees, but uh, my house is outside the city, but the, the park is in the center, so I cannot, uh.

✓ Uh, actually I have heard about the car rental park in Ho Chi Minh City before, and it is famous for having a lot of big trees, but my house is outside the city and the park is in the center, so I cannot go there often.

Verb form and article errors: 'have heard about, uh, go the car rental park' mixes infinitive incorrectly; after 'heard about' use noun phrase 'the car rental park'. 'having a lot of like big trees' is disfluent; 'having a lot of big trees' is correct. 'the park is in the center, so I cannot,' needs completion: 'cannot go there often' or similar. Also fix article use 'the car rental park'. Suggestion: after 'heard about' use the noun, remove filler words, use gerund 'having' correctly and complete the clause with a clear verb phrase.