Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting details. Avoid invented words (e.g. "watersheds") and repetitions. Use linking words like "because" or "and" correctly and include specific activities and a brief feeling or reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my family and friends because we could play games and swim in the pool. I especially remember racing down the slides and having picnics on the grass, which made me very happy.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and a short conditional statement about future visits. Fix tense and phrasing: use "recently" with present perfect or say "these days". Avoid trailing off sentences.

Exemplo: Not very often. I have been quite busy living in Delhi recently, so I rarely have time to visit parks. However, if I get a free weekend, I would definitely go to relax and exercise.

Sugestão: Answer directly, use correct article/noun forms ("a new park" not "a new parks"), and give specific reasons why more parks are desirable. Avoid unclear phrases like "really laugh and have a beautiful tea." Use linking words such as "because" and "so" correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. If there were more parks in my city, people would have more places to relax and exercise. For example, a new park with walking paths and tea stalls would be perfect for weekends, so I would visit it often.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer naming a specific park or type of park, and explain why you want to visit with clear reasons and a comparison. Use correct phrasing: "abroad" without "in" and avoid filler sounds. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a famous park abroad, such as Hyde Park in London. I think parks in other countries offer different scenery and culture, so visiting one would give me a fresh experience and new ideas for parks back home.

× Yes, when I watersheds I really enjoy to going to the park because when we go to the park we can spend time with our family and our our friend.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really enjoyed going to the park because when we went to the park we could spend time with our family and our friends.

Errors: incorrect word 'watersheds' likely intended 'was a child' (sentence structure/word choice) and tense consistency. 'Enjoy to going' mixes infinitive and gerund; correct is 'enjoyed going'. 'When we go' should match past narrative 'when we went'. 'Our our friend' is duplicated and 'friend' should be plural 'friends' for general family outings. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for childhood memories, use 'enjoyed + gerund', remove duplicate words, and use plural when referring to multiple people.

× So I remember going to the park and pair to swim or slider is really.

✓ So I remember going to the park and going to swim or slide was really fun.

Errors: tense and word choice problems. 'Pair to swim or slider is really' is ungrammatical. For past recollection use past tense: 'remember going' can be followed by a past activity description: 'going to swim or slide was really fun.' Use verbs 'swim' and 'slide' rather than nouns 'slider'. Suggestion: keep past tense and use correct verbs and an appropriate adjective like 'fun'.

× Actually, I do not go to the park often recently because I am quite busy in Delhi.

✓ Actually, I have not been going to the park often recently because I have been quite busy in Delhi.

Errors: tense mismatch with 'recently'. 'Do not go ... recently' is incorrect; use present perfect simple or continuous for actions over a recent period: 'have not been going'. Also 'I am quite busy' should be 'I have been quite busy' to match recent time frame. Suggestion: use present perfect (have/has + past participle) or present perfect continuous for recent repeated actions.

× If I have time, I would like to go to.

✓ If I have time, I would like to go.

Errors: sentence ending 'go to' is incomplete; 'go' alone is sufficient. Additionally, conditional sense mixes first and second conditional; 'If I have time, I would like to go' is acceptable for polite desire though 'I would like to go' fits. Suggestion: remove the unnecessary preposition 'to' when no object follows.

× MMM yes if I have opportunity I would like to go to visit a new parks in my city.

✓ Mmm yes, if I have the opportunity I would like to visit new parks in my city.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'opportunity'. 'Go to visit' is redundant — use 'visit'. 'A new parks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'parks'; use 'new parks' or 'a new park'. Suggestion: include correct articles, avoid redundant verbs, and match number (singular/plural).

× I heard about it, really laugh and have a beautiful tea.

✓ I heard about them; they look really lovely and have beautiful trees.

Errors: unclear referent 'it' for parks (should be plural 'them' or 'it' for singular). 'Really laugh' is incorrect — likely meant 'look lovely' or 'are lovely'. 'Have a beautiful tea' probably intended 'have beautiful trees' or 'beautiful scenery'. Suggestion: clarify referents, choose correct verbs ('look', 'are'), and correct nouns ('trees' or 'scenery').

× So I would like to visit there next week if it's possible.

✓ So I would like to visit there next week if it's possible.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'Would like to visit' is a polite future intention; 'if it's possible' correctly uses contraction for 'it is'. No change needed.

× MMM actually I thought about it, about to go to visit uh, the park in abroad because I think it will give a different mood in my country and abroad.

✓ Mmm actually I have thought about it, about visiting a park abroad because I think it will give me a different feeling compared to parks in my country.

Errors: tense and preposition use. 'I thought about it' is past simple but context suggests present relevance — use present perfect 'have thought'. 'About to go to visit' is ungrammatical; use 'about visiting' or 'going to visit'. 'The park in abroad' is wrong: 'abroad' does not take 'in' or 'the' here; use 'a park abroad'. 'Different mood in my country and abroad' is unclear; better 'a different feeling compared to parks in my country'. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent thoughts with present relevance, use gerund after 'about', and correct preposition use with 'abroad'.