Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer grammatically correct, more concise, and add a specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and safe places to play. For example, I often spent afternoons on the swings and slides with my friends, and we would also have small picnics under the trees.

Sugestão: Structure the response: give a direct answer, then one clear reason with a linking word. Use correct verb forms and avoid hesitations and repeated phrases. Be specific about what prevents you from going and what you enjoy about parks now.

Exemplo: I still like parks emotionally, but I rarely go now because I am a busy teenager with school and extracurriculars. However, I enjoy visiting occasionally to watch younger children play and to relax for a short time.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clarify your reason with specific examples. Use linking words like 'because' and correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases and supply who benefits and how.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give children safe places to play and families spaces to exercise. For instance, additional playgrounds and green areas would help younger kids socialize and stay active.

Sugestão: Clarify the specific place and give a concise reason. Use correct names and tense, avoid repetitions, and contrast clearly if needed. Mention one or two concrete things you expect to do there.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Enchanted Kingdom in the future because I’ve heard it has many exciting rides suited to my age. For example, I want to try the roller coasters and other thrill rides rather than the gentle attractions for young children.

× Yes, I like going to park when I am a child because I enjoy the the place, the things that I need to do as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I enjoyed the places and the activities I could do as a child.

The sentence mixes present tense with past-time reference. Use past tense ('liked', 'was', 'enjoyed') for childhood. Also plural forms 'parks' and 'places' are natural here, and 'the things that I need to do' should be 'the activities I could do' for past. Remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time reference (childhood = past) and use plural nouns when generalizing about parks and activities.

× Emotionally yes, but physically no. I am a teenager now. I have a lot of things to do so I don't have a time to go with park, but in uh, my emotional yes, I want to enjoy my life. I want to enjoy. Oh no, I want to see kids playing on the swing and meeting.

✓ Emotionally yes, but physically no. I am a teenager now. I have a lot of things to do, so I don't have time to go to the park, but emotionally I do: I want to enjoy my life and see kids playing on the swings and meeting each other.

Errors: unnecessary article 'a' before 'time' and incorrect preposition 'with' before 'park'. Use 'time' without 'a' in this context and 'go to the park'. Also 'on the swing' should be plural 'on the swings' and phrase 'in my emotional yes' is corrected to 'emotionally I do' for clarity. Remove filler 'uh' and repeated fragments. Suggestion: Use 'go to the park' for movement to a place and omit 'a' when saying 'don't have time'.

× As a teenager that was not like parks. Now I would like to see more parks in our city because this is the way of the kid to enjoy their.

✓ As a teenager I did not like parks. Now I would like to see more parks in our city because this is a way for children to enjoy themselves.

Use past tense 'did not like' for a previous preference. 'That was not like parks' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'I did not like parks.' 'This is the way of the kid to enjoy their' has pronoun and noun issues: use 'a way for children to enjoy themselves' for correct pronoun reference and natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb structure and appropriate pronouns ('children', 'themselves') when speaking generally.

× Yes, the United I know. No, no, the enchanted Kingdom, because I heard that there's a lot of extreme rides there. That's walk for my age. I want some interesting, interesting rides. Unlike when I was a child, there's a relaxing rides.

✓ Yes, I mean Enchanted Kingdom, because I heard that there are a lot of extreme rides there that suit my age. I want some exciting rides. Unlike when I was a child, there were more relaxing rides.

Problems: 'the United I know' is unclear; likely intended 'Enchanted Kingdom'. Proper nouns should be capitalized and used clearly. 'There's a lot of extreme rides' mixes singular 'there's' with plural 'rides'—use 'there are'. 'That's walk for my age' is incorrect phrasing; use 'that suit my age' or 'suitable for my age'. 'Interesting, interesting' is repetitive—use 'exciting'. Last clause 'there's a relaxing rides' should be past plural 'there were more relaxing rides' to compare past and present. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are' for plural nouns, correct proper noun naming, and match tense when comparing past and present.