Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise, fix tense and grammar errors, and include one specific memory to enrich content. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and add a linking phrase before the supporting detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my father often took me there on weekends when he was free, and we would feed the ducks at the large pond near our house.

Sugestão: Use clear contrasting language and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, use linking words ('however'/'now') and give a specific present activity or frequency to make the answer more informative.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks, but now I usually visit them to relax and exercise. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk in the park near my home three times a week to enjoy the scenery and get some fresh air.

Sugestão: Correct word choice ('green' not 'greed'), avoid repetition, and support your opinion with a specific reason or comparison. Use linking words (because/for example) and keep it within a few sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces improve mental health and air quality. For example, having small neighborhood parks with trees and flowers would give residents a place to relax instead of only seeing cars and buildings.

Sugestão: Be specific about which parks or types of parks you want to visit and why. Start with a clear topic sentence and add a reason and a short plan or time frame to make the answer more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, since this is my last year in Nanjing, I plan to visit several parks I haven't seen yet, such as Xuanwu Lake and Purple Mountain Park, to enjoy their views and take photographs before I leave.

× Usually it was my father who takes me to parks.

✓ Usually it was my father who took me to parks.

The sentence mixes past narrative 'it was' with present-tense verb 'takes'. Use simple past 'took' to maintain past tense consistency. Suggestion: When describing past habitual actions, use past tense verbs (e.g., 'took').

× I think whenever he has free time from his job, he will take me to the parks and there used to be a lot of parks near my house.

✓ I think whenever he had free time from his job, he would take me to the parks, and there used to be a lot of parks near my house.

The sentence mixes present ('has', 'will') with past habitual 'used to'. For past habits, use past-tense forms 'had' and 'would'. Use a comma to separate clauses. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when describing past routines: 'whenever he had..., he would...'.

× I still like going to parks, but now what I do in parks is different than what I used to do in when I was a children.

✓ I still like going to parks, but now what I do in parks is different from what I used to do when I was a child.

Multiple issues: 'different than' is acceptable but 'different from' is more standard here; 'in when' is incorrect—remove 'in'; 'a children' uses plural with singular article; use singular 'a child' or just 'child'. Suggestion: Use 'different from' and 'when I was a child'.

× When I was a children like I would play in the park, but now I go to the parks.

✓ When I was a child, I would play in the park, but now I go to the parks.

'a children' incorrectly combines singular article with plural noun. Use singular 'a child'. Also add comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: Match article and noun number: 'a child'.

× I just enjoy the view, take a walk.

✓ I just enjoy the view and take a walk.

The original is a sentence fragment with two verbs missing a conjunction. Use 'and' to connect the coordinated verbs into a complete sentence. Suggestion: Use conjunctions to join parallel actions: 'enjoy the view and take a walk'.

× I feel like it's a human need to see greed.

✓ I feel like it's a human need to see green.

The word 'greed' is a different noun meaning desire for wealth; the intended word is 'green' referring to vegetation. This is vocabulary choice rather than a grammar rule but corrects meaning. Suggestion: Use 'green' when referring to vegetation or greenery.

× Like seeing the birds, seeing the trees, seeing the flowers.

✓ I like seeing the birds, the trees, and the flowers.

Fragmented list lacks subject-verb structure; use complete sentence 'I like...' and include commas and 'and' before final item. Suggestion: Make list part of a full sentence and use parallel structure.'

× But nowadays in the city all I always see is cars and houses.

✓ But nowadays in the city all I see are cars and houses.

Redundant 'all I always see' is awkward; use 'all I see'. Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'cars and houses' requires plural verb 'are' rather than 'is'. Suggestion: Use 'all I see are...' for plural objects.

× Yes, I would like to go to some parks because it's my last year living in Nanjing, so I would like to go to more parks in the Nanjing.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to some parks because it's my last year living in Nanjing, so I would like to go to more parks in Nanjing.

'the Nanjing' incorrectly uses definite article before a proper noun (city name). Remove 'the'. Also sentence is repetitive but grammatically fixed by deleting 'the'. Suggestion: Do not use 'the' before city names: say 'in Nanjing'.