Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often met friends there. For example, we played football and tag together every afternoon, which helped me make new friends and stay active.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and a clear reason using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant details. Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Not as much as before, because I no longer meet my old friends in the park. Many people have moved away or prefer indoor activities now, so I rarely visit parks.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct verb forms to improve clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there are very few now and children have fewer places to play. For example, if more parks were built with playgrounds, parents could take their children there instead of staying at home with phones.

Sugestão: Provide a direct response and a brief reason with one supporting detail. Use present/future tense correctly and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I probably won't visit many parks in the future because I plan to focus on my studies and career. However, I might go occasionally if I need a short break to relax.

× Yes, I like going to the park when I was a child because I met my friends and play too much and I and I met new children or new friends that is over my that is my in my age group and I talked to them and enjoy playing with them also.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child because I met my friends and played a lot. I also met new children in my age group, talked to them, and enjoyed playing with them.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. The action 'when I was a child' requires past tense verbs (liked, played, met, talked, enjoyed). Use past simple consistently for completed past actions. Also simplify and remove repetitions for clarity.

× Not that much as compared to my childhood as because I didn't pet my friends now as compared to my childhood, because in my childhood all friends were met at the same time. But as compared to this time in my present time, it's not that much because so much people go another or abroad that's.

✓ Not as much as in my childhood, because I don't meet my friends now like I used to. In my childhood I met many friends at the same time, but now many people have moved away or gone abroad.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly and has word choice errors. Use present simple 'don't meet' for current habitual actions and past simple 'used to' or 'met' for past habits. Replace incorrect words ('pet', 'so much people', 'another or abroad') with 'meet', 'many people', and 'gone abroad'.

× RBS because in my city now there's so less park and so not much children's play in my, in the park. Uh, because the technology has been come and technology has take taken away the active, the offline activities. Uh, so now, so now children's play in playing phone, not in parks.

✓ Because in my city there are very few parks now, and not many children play in the park. Technology has arrived and taken away many outdoor activities, so children now play on their phones instead of in parks.

Errors include article/number agreement and awkward expressions. Use 'there are very few parks' (plural + quantifier) and 'not many children'. 'The technology has been come' is incorrect; use 'technology has arrived' or 'technology has taken away'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun phrases.

× No, I didn't want to go to the any park in my future as because now, now I have not that much that much interest in the park or going somewhere else.

✓ No, I don't want to go to any park in the future because I don't have much interest in parks or going out.

The sentence uses past tense 'didn't want' incorrectly for a present/future preference. Use present simple 'don't want' for current intentions about the future. Remove redundant words and fix article usage ('to any park' -> 'to any park' but better 'any park').

× I want to focus in my studies and another career activities. So I don't have that much free time to go to the another parks in my future also.

✓ I want to focus on my studies and other career activities, so I don't have much free time to go to other parks in the future.

Use the correct preposition 'focus on' not 'focus in'. Use 'other' instead of 'another' before plural noun 'parks'. Remove redundant words 'in my future also' and replace with 'in the future'. Ensure proper article and preposition use.