Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid fillers (umm, uh) and unclear phrases. For example, say when and what you did, and why it was enjoyable.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends to play on the swings and feed ducks, which created happy memories because we spent whole afternoons running and laughing together.

Sugestão: Use present tense consistently and combine ideas into a clear, linked response. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific details, using linking words like 'and' or 'because'.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. In my free time I often go cycling and jogging there because these activities help me stay fit and I can spend quality time with my family.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and explain one specific reason. Avoid vague statements and filler words. Use simple linking words (because, so) to connect your reason to your opinion.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more green spaces would encourage people to exercise outdoors and improve public health.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, grammatical description with one or two specific details about the park and why you want to visit. Correct word order and use precise vocabulary (location, atmosphere, scenery).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Manzakitti Park in the center of Bangkok. It is famous for its wide running paths and beautiful lakes, so I want to go there to cycle and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

× Yes I did. I think it's the it's a good memory for me that when I go to the park and like, umm, play with my friends, uh, Pastebo pay toy.

✓ Yes, I did. I think it was a good memory for me when I went to the park and played with my friends.

The response refers to past habitual actions and memories, so past tense verbs should be used. 'I think it's the it's a good memory' mixes present and past; use 'I think it was a good memory' or better 'It was a good memory'. 'When I go' and 'play' should be 'when I went' and 'played' to match past time. Remove filler and unclear words for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when describing childhood memories; e.g., 'When I went to the park, I played with my friends.'

× Yes, I did. When I have my free time, I always think about park. I like to go bicycle ride to run. It make me good health and it's an activity that I like to do with my family.

✓ Yes, I do. When I have free time, I always think about the park. I like to ride my bicycle and run. It makes me healthier and it's an activity I like to do with my family.

Several tense and agreement issues: the question asks about present habits, so use present tense 'Yes, I do' not 'Yes, I did'. 'When I have my free time' is improved to 'When I have free time'. 'Think about park' needs the article 'the park'. 'Go bicycle ride to run' is ungrammatical; use 'ride my bicycle and run'. 'It make me good health' should be 'It makes me healthier' (subject-verb agreement and comparative adjective). Suggestions: match tense to the question, use correct articles, and use collocations like 'ride a bicycle' or 'ride my bicycle'.

× Yes, I do. Nowaday I see people, umm, take care themselves and like healthy. So I think it's the P. It is the way that if we view it, it's not the best. It's so good.

✓ Yes, I do. Nowadays I see people taking care of themselves and being more health-conscious. So I think it's a positive trend. From that point of view, it's very good, though not perfect.

'Nowaday' is misspelled; correct form is 'Nowadays'. 'I see people, umm, take care themselves' requires gerund and preposition: 'people taking care of themselves'. 'Like healthy' is incorrect; use 'being more health-conscious' or 'being healthier'. 'It's the P' is unclear; clarified to 'it's a positive trend'. 'It is the way that if we view it, it's not the best. It's so good.' is awkward; rephrase to 'From that point of view, it's very good, though not perfect.' Suggestions: use gerunds after 'see' when describing observed actions in general, use correct adverb forms and clearer expressions for opinions.

× Yes, I do. I want to go to Manzakiti Park. It at middle of Bangkok is the famous place that people like to go run and bicycle and it's very beautiful place, the attitude, the environment.

✓ Yes, I do. I want to go to Manzakiti Park. It is in the middle of Bangkok and is a famous place where people like to run and ride bicycles; it is a very beautiful place with a pleasant atmosphere and environment.

The sentence misses the verb 'is' after 'It' ('It at middle of Bangkok' should be 'It is in the middle of Bangkok'). Use 'in the middle of Bangkok'. 'Is the famous place' should be 'is a famous place'. 'Like to go run and bicycle' is incorrect; use 'like to run and ride bicycles'. 'Very beautiful place, the attitude, the environment' is ungrammatical; clarify to 'very beautiful place with a pleasant atmosphere and environment'. Suggestions: ensure 'there is/it is' constructions include verbs, use correct prepositions ('in the middle of'), and use relative clauses 'where people...' for describing what people do there.