Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "used to" and multiple similar phrases).

Exemplo: Yes. I loved visiting a large park near my home every evening with my grandparents. It had many swings and open lawns, so I always looked forward to spending time there.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and use more precise vocabulary. Use a clear topic sentence, then link reasons with a connector (e.g., "because" or "since") and give one specific example of when you go.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often walk there when I have free time because the greenery and sunlight create a peaceful atmosphere, for example, I go to a nearby park after work to relax.

Sugestão: Avoid fillers and fix sentence structure (do not use both "although" and "but"). Give a concise opinion then a specific reason or example of what you'd like to see (e.g., playgrounds, sports fields).

Exemplo: Yes. Although Melbourne already has many parks, I would like more large parks or playgrounds in my neighborhood so families and children have space for sports and picnics.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct grammar (e.g., "a park with hiking trails" not "hike a park"). Provide a short reason why and whom you'll go with to make it richer.

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit a park north of Melbourne that has several hiking trails. I'm looking forward to hiking there with friends because the trails offer great views and good exercise.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I used to go this park, which was near my home.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I used to go to this park, which was near my home.

The verb phrase 'go to' requires the preposition 'to' before the noun. This is a preposition + verb collocation, so add 'to' to form 'go to the park'.

× It was one of the largest park in my neighborhood.

✓ It was one of the largest parks in my neighborhood.

After 'one of the' the noun should be plural because it refers to a member of a group. Use 'parks' rather than 'park'.

× And I remember that I used to go there every single evening with my grandparents and there were a lot of swings over there and I was, umm, looking, I looked forward to, uh, go to the park.

✓ And I remember that I used to go there every single evening with my grandparents; there were a lot of swings, and I used to look forward to going to the park.

The phrase 'look forward to' requires a noun or verb in the -ing form after 'to'. Also maintain consistent past habitual tense with 'used to' and simplify repeated phrases. Use 'going' not 'go'.

× Yes, whenever I get a free time, I like to walk to a park.

✓ Yes, whenever I get free time, I like to walk to a park.

The phrase 'get free time' does not take the article 'a' in common usage. Remove 'a' to form the correct expression 'get free time' or alternatively 'have free time'.

× And one of the main reason is that parks has a lot of natural light and they have plants and trees and it always gives a peaceful vibe.

✓ One of the main reasons is that parks have a lot of natural light; they have plants and trees, and they always give a peaceful vibe.

'One of the' requires a plural noun 'reasons'. Subject-verb agreement: 'parks' (plural) takes 'have' not 'has'. Also split into clearer clauses and use 'they' consistently.

× That's why I try to visit a park whenever I can.

✓ That's why I try to visit a park whenever I can.

This sentence is acceptable but note alternative 'visit parks' if speaking generally. No correction needed; kept for clarity.

× Absolutely, yes, even though, uh, Melbourne has a lot of parks, but I do feel there's a need of umm, a playground or a larger park in my neighborhood and I would love to see a lot of huge parks around the city in future.

✓ Absolutely. Even though Melbourne has a lot of parks, I do feel there's a need for a playground or a larger park in my neighborhood, and I would love to see many large parks around the city in the future.

Do not use 'even though' and 'but' together; choose one. Use 'need for' not 'need of'. 'A lot of huge parks' is awkward; use 'many large parks'. Add 'the' before 'future' as 'in the future'.

× Yes, in the future I am planning to hike a park which is located in the north side of Melbourne.

✓ Yes, in the future I am planning to hike at a park which is located on the north side of Melbourne.

We usually 'hike at' or 'hike in' a park; use preposition 'on' for 'on the north side'. Also 'hike a park' is not idiomatic; 'hike at/in a park' is better.

× It is basically it has hiking trail and I am looking forward to hike it with my friends.

✓ It basically has a hiking trail, and I am looking forward to hiking it with my friends.

Add article 'a' before 'hiking trail'. After 'looking forward to' use the -ing form 'hiking', not the base verb 'hike'.