Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., 'parks' and singular/plural agreement), avoid repetition, and add one specific memory to enrich the answer. Use a linking word when adding details.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my mother every Sunday, and we would feed the ducks and have a picnic together. Because of that routine, the parks became a special place for us to relax and talk.

Sugestão: Remove filler sounds, fix grammar and use a clearer linking phrase to explain reason and habit. Give one specific activity you do in the park to show variety and use present simple for habitual actions.

Exemplo: Definitely. Since I am usually busy with work, I often go to the park to unwind. For example, I sit on a bench and read or simply watch people and trees, which helps me feel calmer.

Sugestão: Correct factual phrasing and collocations (e.g., 'polluted air' not 'polluted air in the city' repeated; 'clean the air' not 'clean our ears'). Give a clear reason and a specific benefit with linking words. Avoid vague claims and add one concrete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. Shanghai is very urbanized and suffers from air pollution, so more parks would help improve air quality and give people green spaces to exercise. For instance, a new park with many trees could lower local pollution and encourage residents to jog or cycle.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and clarity: use singular/plural correctly, avoid awkward phrases ('say something new'). Start with a direct topic sentence, then explain why with specific details (which park, which animals, what you expect to learn or experience). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I would love to visit a national park in the future because it offers the chance to see diverse wildlife up close. For example, visiting a national park would let me observe native birds and deer in their natural habitat and learn about conservation efforts.

× When I was a child I always went to park with my mom and I think it's a wonderful bonding activities with my mom.

✓ When I was a child I always went to the park with my mom and I think it's a wonderful bonding activity with my mom.

Use of singular/plural: 'park' needs the definite article 'the' and 'activities' should be singular 'activity' to match 'a wonderful'. Suggestion: use 'the park' for a specific place and ensure noun number agrees with the article 'a' (a + singular noun).

× We can get some fresh air and relax ourselves.

✓ We can get some fresh air and relax.

Pronoun use: 'relax ourselves' is unnecessary and unnatural in English; 'relax' is sufficient. Suggestion: omit reflexive pronoun when the verb does not require it (simply say 'relax').

× Uh, definitely, because I am always busy with my work so when I feel I am stress I often go to the park and do nothing, just space out.

✓ Uh, definitely, because I am always busy with my work, so when I feel stressed I often go to the park and do nothing, just space out.

Tense/word form: 'I feel I am stress' is incorrect. Use adjective 'stressed' after 'feel' or say 'I am stressed'. Also add comma before 'so' and keep present simple/progressive as appropriate. Suggestion: use 'feel stressed' or 'am stressed' for correct adjective form.

× You know Shanghai is a modern city, so there are a lot of polluted air in the city.

✓ You know Shanghai is a modern city, so there is a lot of polluted air in the city.

'There be' agreement with uncountable noun: 'air' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is' not 'are'. Suggestion: use 'there is a lot of polluted air' for uncountable nouns.

× So if we had more parks, it can clean our ears and make the citizens more healthy.

✓ So if we had more parks, they could clean the air and make citizens healthier.

Modal and word choice: In conditional 'If we had' (second conditional) use 'could' not 'can'. 'Clean our ears' is incorrect; intended 'clean the air'. 'Make the citizens more healthy' is better as 'make citizens healthier.' Suggestion: match conditional modal and use correct collocations.

× Actually, I want to go to the National Park in the future because National Park have many different and real animals, so I say it's a good chance for me to say something new.

✓ Actually, I want to go to the national park in the future because the national park has many different real animals, so I think it's a good chance for me to see something new.

Plural/singular and article use: 'National Park' needs article 'the' and should be lowercased unless a proper name; 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject. 'Real animals' is fine but 'see something new' fits meaning better than 'say something new.' Also 'so I say' is unnatural; use 'I think.' Suggestion: add 'the', use correct subject-verb agreement, and choose appropriate verbs ('see' not 'say').