Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Улучшите грамматику и порядок слов, чтобы ответ звучал естественнее. Начните с простой тематической фразы в прошлом времени (I loved/ I liked), затем добавьте 1-2 конкретных детали с логическими связками (for example, because/so). Избегайте повторов и лишних слов; предельная длина — до 4–5 предложений. Также исправьте формы глаголов (go → went), используйте прилагательные и наречия правильно (we had fun, it was the best day).

Exemplo: I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends, and we had lots of fun playing games and having picnics. For example, we usually spent the whole afternoon on the swings and slides, which made it the best day of my week.

Sugestão: Работайте над последовательностью времени и естественным выбором слов. Используйте простое настоящее (I like) и описания чувств без ошибок (I feel like a child). Уберите повторяющиеся слова и замените неправильные выражения (I am funny girl → I feel happy/joyful). Добавьте одно конкретное объяснение почему, с подходящими связками (because/so).

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks with my friends. I usually feel happy and relaxed there because the green space helps me forget about stress. For instance, walking under the trees and chatting with friends always makes me feel like a child again.

Sugestão: Сделайте предложение более плавным и грамматически корректным: используйте связки (because, so) и корректные структуры (there is/there are). Уточните причину и предложите возможное следствие или решение. Избегайте пауз («uh») и повторов. Попробуйте сказать конкретные данные (only one park, crowded on weekends).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to have more parks in my city because there is only one park and it is very crowded on weekends. As a result, my friends and I often cannot find space to sit or play, so more parks would make it easier to spend time outdoors.

Sugestão: Уточните формулировки и используйте правильные времена и согласование. Назовите парк и объясните, почему вы хотите туда попасть, добавьте одну конкретную деталь (features/activities). Избегайте эмоционально неопределённых слов типа «really happy»; лучше сказать «beautiful, peaceful, has lakes/playgrounds».

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Singapore University Park in the future with my friends and family. I have heard it has beautiful gardens and lakes, and I would enjoy walking there and taking photos. It seems like a peaceful place perfect for a picnic.

× Yes, I really like go to parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks as a child.

The student uses present tense 'like' and the base verb 'go' where a past context is required. When talking about childhood (a past time), use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'going' after 'like'. Use: 'liked going'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits and use 'verb + -ing' after 'like' (e.g. 'I liked going to parks').

× Often I go to parks with my friends and we always funny together it it if I go with them it will be the best day of my week.

✓ Often I went to parks with my friends and we were always having fun together; if I went with them it was the best day of my week.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: the sentence describes past habitual actions, so use past tense 'went' and 'were'. 'Funny' is an adjective, not appropriate here; use the phrase 'have fun' in past progressive 'were having fun' or simple past 'had fun'. The conditional 'if I go with them it will be' should match past habitual context: 'if I went with them it was'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits and use 'have fun' to describe enjoying oneself (e.g. 'we were always having fun').

× Yes, I like going to parks now with my friends.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now with my friends.

This sentence is acceptable. It correctly uses present simple 'like' and the gerund 'going' to describe a current habit. Suggestion: No change needed; maintain present simple for current habits.

× When I go into parks I am funny girl and feeling feeling feel myself like a child.

✓ When I go to parks I feel like a child and become a happy girl.

The original uses 'funny' (means 'amusing') instead of 'happy' or 'playful', and incorrect verb forms 'feeling feeling feel myself'. Use 'feel' to describe emotions: 'I feel like a child'. Also 'go into parks' is unnatural; use 'go to parks'. Suggestion: Use 'feel' + adjective and avoid repeating verbs; e.g. 'I feel like a child' or 'I become playful/ happy.'

× Yes, I would like to see uh, more parks in my city because in my city has only one park and in on the weekends a lot of people there.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because my city has only one park and on weekends there are a lot of people there.

Problems: unnecessary filler 'uh' can be omitted. Word order error: 'in my city has only one park' should be 'my city has only one park'. 'In on the weekends' is incorrect; use 'on weekends' or 'at the weekends'. Also need 'there are a lot of people' for plural subject. 'Would like' is fine for desire. Suggestion: Use correct word order (subject + verb) and the preposition 'on' with 'weekends', and use 'there are' for plural existence.

× So I can't go there together with my friends because there is there are a lot of people.

✓ So I can't go there with my friends because there are a lot of people.

Redundant mix of 'there is there are' and awkward 'together with'. Use 'there are' for plural 'a lot of people' and 'with my friends' is sufficient. Negative 'can't' is fine in present context. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and use correct existential verb: 'there are'. Use 'with' instead of 'together with' for conciseness.

× Yes, I would like to go to Singapore University Park in the future with my friends and my family want to go to this park with me.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Singapore University Park in the future with my friends, and my family want to go to this park with me.

Mostly correct, but subject-verb agreement issue occurs: 'my family want' can be British English (family as plural) but often in American English 'my family wants' is used. The sentence structure is acceptable for future desire using 'would like'. Suggestion: Choose consistent variety: use 'my family wants to go with me' (American) or 'my family want to go with me' (British). Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.

× And I saw that this park is really happy.

✓ And I saw that this park is really lovely/pleasant.

'Happy' describes people, not places. Use adjectives appropriate for places: 'beautiful', 'pleasant', 'lovely', or 'enjoyable'. 'I saw that' is acceptable to indicate past observation but could be 'I saw that the park was really lovely.' Suggestion: Use place-describing adjectives and match tense: 'the park was really lovely' if referring to a past visit.