Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Pronunciation and word choice: correct 'perks' → 'parks' and avoid 'the friends' (use 'my friends'). Grammar: use simple past consistently ('I liked going', 'I hung out', 'I usually played soccer'). Structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific supporting details. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

Exemplo: I loved going to parks as a child. I often played soccer there with my friends and sometimes we had picnics near the playground. My hometown had many parks, so we could always find a place to play.

Sugestão: Grammar and collocation: use 'schoolwork' (uncountable) and say 'I don't have enough time' and 'go to the park'. Cohesion: use linking words like 'however' or 'but' correctly. Keep sentences natural and concise, and maintain consistent tense (present simple).

Exemplo: I don't go to parks as often now because I have a lot of schoolwork and I don't have enough time during weekdays. However, I usually visit the park on weekends to play soccer with my friends.

Sugestão: Clarity and vocabulary: 'products' is incorrect—use 'parks' or 'green spaces'. Fix grammar: 'I don't have enough facilities or space for parks' and avoid informal 'wanna'. Structure: give a topic sentence then specific reasons (e.g. more apartments, less green space). Use linking words: 'because', 'therefore', 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because many new apartments and shopping centers have been built, which has reduced green space. Therefore, new parks would give residents places to relax and exercise.

Sugestão: Register and pronunciation: avoid informal interjections like 'baby' in a formal test. Use 'I'm going to' instead of 'gonna'. Grammar: 'I have been playing soccer for 13 years' is good—connect it to future plans: 'I will continue to play in parks even if I go abroad.' Be specific about which parks or types (e.g. national parks, local parks).

Exemplo: Yes. I plan to visit many parks in the future because I have played soccer for 13 years and parks are where I usually play. Even if I move abroad, I will look for local parks to continue playing with my friends.

× Yes, I liked to go to perks, especially when I hang out with the friends.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks, especially when I hung out with my friends.

Use the gerund 'going' after 'liked' for habitual past actions (type 8). Also 'hang' should be past 'hung' to match past tense (type 5). 'Perks' is a spelling error and should be 'parks'; 'the friends' should be 'my friends' (type 12). Overall, use 'liked going' and past tense consistency: 'liked going' and 'hung out with my friends'.

× Actually, my hometown is a wide range of parks, therefore I usually play the soccer with my friends.

✓ Actually, my hometown has a wide range of parks, so I usually play soccer with my friends.

Use 'has a wide range of parks' rather than 'is a wide range' (sentence structure error, type 26). 'Therefore' is formal and can be replaced with 'so' for natural speech; include article omission: 'play soccer' not 'the soccer' (article error, type 22). This fixes subject-verb and article usage.

× No I don't because now I have a lot of school works and homework therefore I don't enough time to go to park.

✓ No, I don't because now I have a lot of schoolwork and homework, so I don't have enough time to go to the park.

'Schoolwork' is uncountable, not 'school works' (type 14 quantifier/article). Missing verb 'have' after 'don't' created an incomplete verb phrase (sentence structure/type 23). Add articles: 'go to the park' requires 'the' (type 17). Add comma and conjunction for clarity.

× But sometimes, especially on weekends I go to park to play soccer with my friends.

✓ But sometimes, especially on weekends, I go to the park to play soccer with my friends.

Add commas for clarity (type 26). Include definite article 'the' before 'park' (type 17). Verb 'go' is fine; main issue is article and punctuation.

× Yes, I want to see more products in my town because recently like more apartments and shopping facilities have been built over the years.

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my town because recently many apartments and shopping facilities have been built.

'Products' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'parks' (vocabulary error counted as sentence structure/type 26). 'Like' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here; use 'many' to quantify (type 14). 'Have been built over the years' is redundant; 'recently' and 'over the years' conflict, so use 'recently' alone (tense/time expression consistency, type 6).

× So I don't enough to facilities to watch parks.

✓ So I don't have enough facilities to visit parks.

Missing verb 'have' after 'don't' (sentence structure/type 23). Word order and preposition incorrect: 'enough facilities to visit parks' is correct; 'watch parks' is wrong verb choice (type 26). Remove extraneous 'to' and correct article/word order.

× So that's why I wanna see a more parks.

✓ So that's why I want to see more parks.

'A more parks' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'more parks' (type 1). Also 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to' for standard speech.

× Yes, baby, I'm gonna go any parks in the future because actually I have been playing soccer for 13 years.

✓ Yes, I'm going to go to some parks in the future because I have been playing soccer for 13 years.

'Baby' is inappropriate in this context and should be omitted (register). 'Gonna' -> 'going to' for standard grammar (type 4 modal/colloquial). 'Any parks' is ungrammatical in affirmative sentences; use 'some parks' (type 14 quantifier). Include preposition 'to' after 'go' (type 11).

× Soccer is part of my life. Therefore I'm gonna play soccer with my friends even if I go to the abroad.

✓ Soccer is part of my life. Therefore I'm going to play soccer with my friends even if I go abroad.

Don't use 'the' before 'abroad' (definite article error/type 17). Replace 'gonna' with 'going to' (informal/modal usage/type 4). 'Even if I go abroad' is the correct prepositional structure (type 11). The rest is fine.