Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be careful with tense and word choice, speak in past tense for childhood, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'explorer' instead of 'plunderer'), and avoid filler words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I enjoyed exploring the plants and trees, and I often took photographs of unusual flowers and colourful leaves. Because I was curious about nature, I spent hours observing different plants and learning their names.

Sugestão: Use present tense correctly and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a short consequence. Use linking words like 'but' and 'because' appropriately, and finish the sentence clearly without trailing off.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely have time at the moment because I am studying for my A-levels. As a result, my schedule is very packed, so I usually only visit parks on weekends when I have free time.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Avoid vague endings and repeated words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'green spaces' 'reduce air pollution' 'improve well-being'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Definitely — I believe every city should have more green spaces because trees and plants help reduce air pollution and cool down urban areas. For example, added parks can improve residents' health by providing places for exercise and relaxation.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitation and redundant location phrases. Start with a clear answer and give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example.' Use correct collocations (e.g., 'exotic plants' or 'herbs I've never seen').

Exemplo: I would like to visit a park on Penang Island in the future because it reportedly has many exotic plants and herbs. For example, I am curious to see rare species and take photographs for my nature collection.

× I do like going to park as a child since there's a lot of greeneries, plants and I'm a plunderer when I'm young.

✓ I liked going to the park as a child since there were a lot of plants and I was adventurous when I was young.

Article errors and tense issues: 'going to park' needs the definite article 'the park' because a specific place type is implied. 'Greeneries' is nonstandard; use 'plants' or 'greenery'. The original mixes present and past; 'as a child' requires past tense ('liked', 'were', 'was'). 'Plunderer' is incorrect word choice; 'adventurous' or 'curious' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: use appropriate articles with place nouns and keep tense consistent with time markers like 'as a child'.

× So usually when I go to park I would take a lot of photos on the flowers, the special leaves that have some different colours that you don't see every day.

✓ So usually when I went to the park I would take a lot of photos of the flowers and the special leaves that have unusual colors you don't see every day.

Article errors and preposition choice: 'go to park' needs 'the park'. Use past tense 'went' to match habitual childhood action. Use 'photos of' not 'photos on'. 'Different colours' is better as 'unusual colors'. Maintain consistent tense and correct preposition choice. Also use 'and' to join noun phrases correctly.

× I do still love going to park right now, but I just can't find suitable time to go to the park because I'm studying A levels right now and the schedule for my studies kind of packed so I don't really have the time to go to the park and just walk around and.

✓ I still love going to the park, but I can't find suitable time to go because I'm studying A levels now and my study schedule is quite packed, so I don't really have time to go to the park and just walk around.

Article errors and present tense/verb agreement: 'going to park' needs 'the park'. Avoid double 'right now'; use 'now'. 'Schedule ... packed' requires a linking verb: 'is quite packed' or 'is packed'. 'Don't really have the time' -> 'don't really have time' is more natural. Keep present tense consistent and include necessary verbs. Suggestion: simplify repeated time words and ensure subject-verb agreement ('schedule is packed').

× I do think every city should include a certain green space such as parks in the city, since there's a lot of air pollution going on in the city.

✓ I do think every city should include green spaces such as parks, since there is a lot of air pollution in the city.

Redundancy and article/number agreement: 'a certain green space such as parks' mixes singular and plural; use 'green spaces such as parks' or 'a green space such as a park'. Avoid repeating 'in the city' multiple times. Use 'there is' for singular uncountable 'a lot of air pollution'. Suggestion: keep number agreement (singular/plural) consistent and avoid redundant phrases.

× So I think trees and plants are really important in filtering out this dust and just.

✓ So I think trees and plants are really important for filtering out dust.

Sentence structure and incomplete thought: 'filtering out this dust and just' is incomplete and colloquial. Use 'important for filtering out dust' and remove trailing 'and just'. Keep present tense and concise phrasing. Suggestion: complete the idea and avoid trailing filler words.

× Uh, I've never thought of that before, but there's one park in Penang Island in which I'm living.

✓ I've never thought about that before, but there is one park on Penang Island where I live.

Preposition and relative clause use: 'in which I'm living' is awkward; use 'where I live' or 'on which I live' (but 'on Penang Island' is correct). Use 'on Penang Island' rather than 'in Penang Island'. Keep present perfect 'I've never thought about' is fine. Suggestion: use natural relative clauses ('where I live') and correct prepositions for islands ('on').

× I'm currently living in the mainland of Penang right now.

✓ I'm currently living on the mainland of Penang.

Redundancy and preposition: Use 'on the mainland' (correct preposition for mainland) and drop redundant 'right now' because 'currently' already indicates present time. Keep present continuous if describing current residence. Suggestion: avoid redundant temporal adverbs and use correct prepositions for locations.

× There's one park in the island that I really want to visit since there's a lot of exotic herbs that I've never encountered before and I would love to meet them.

✓ There is one park on the island that I really want to visit since there are many exotic herbs there that I have never encountered before and I would love to see them.

Article and number agreement: Use 'on the island' for location and 'there are many exotic herbs' (plural) rather than 'there's a lot of exotic herbs'. Use 'see them' instead of 'meet them' because you encounter plants, not people. Keep tense consistent: present perfect 'I have never encountered'. Suggestion: match singular/plural forms and choose verbs appropriate to the object (plants).