Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds (umm, uh).

Exemplo: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, visiting the local park let me meet new friends and join group games like swinging and tag, which improved my social skills. Because of those experiences, parks were one of my favorite places to spend afternoons.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, then use linking words to connect a reason and an example. Remove hesitations and condense ideas to two or three sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Seeing children play motivates me and helps me feel relaxed, for example, watching a group of kids play football always cheers me up and reminds me of my own childhood.

Sugestão: Start with a concise opinion, then give two specific reasons linked clearly (use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repeating phrases and keep sentences well structured.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces encourage people to spend time outdoors and help neighbors socialize. For instance, a new park could host community events and playgrounds, which would especially benefit children and families.

Sugestão: Give a clear short answer naming the park, then explain why with specific reasons and an example. Remove repetitions and hesitations, and keep it within two or three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes — I would love to visit Disneyland in the future because I grew up watching animated films and enjoy the immersive attractions. For example, I am especially excited to try the themed rides and meet characters that remind me of childhood stories.

× Yes, I, I, I definitely love to go to parks.

✓ Yes, I definitely loved going to parks.

The question asks about childhood (past) preference, so the student should use past tense. Use 'loved' and the gerund 'going' to express habitual past action. Also remove filler repetitions for clarity.

× Well, park when I was a kid, going to park helped me meet new friends, make new friends, umm, playing a lot of games, be it swinging, be it, you know, any kind of outdoor activity, socializing with, uh, the kids my age.

✓ When I was a kid, going to the park helped me meet new friends and play many games, such as swinging and other outdoor activities, and socialize with children my age.

Original sentence is run-on and lacks articles and parallel structure. Use 'the park' and parallel verbs 'meet' and 'play'. Replace informal 'be it' with 'such as' and 'kids' with 'children' for formality. This corrects sentence structure and article use.

× Yeah, I do like going to parks because it helps me, you know, umm, when I, when I, when I see the kids playing in the park, that it motivates me, it helps me rejuvenate my inner child.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks because when I see children playing in the park, it motivates me and helps me feel like a child again.

Remove unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in simple present affirmative; simplify repetitions. Use 'children' for formality and correct clause structure: 'when I see..., it motivates me and helps me...'. 'Rejuvenate my inner child' is acceptable but 'feel like a child again' is clearer and more natural.

× It makes me feel happy again.

✓ It makes me feel happy again.

Sentence is correct; present tense appropriately expresses current feeling. No change needed.

× I just like watching kids play games.

✓ I just like watching children play games.

Use 'children' for formal register; sentence structure is fine otherwise.

× Yeah, definitely. I I definitely advocate for the green spaces, more of green spaces around my locality or my town.

✓ Yes, I definitely advocate for more green spaces around my neighborhood or town.

Use 'yes' instead of colloquial 'yeah' for formality and remove repeated 'I'. 'More green spaces' is the correct word order and use 'neighborhood' or 'town' for natural phrasing.

× Green spaces would really help people come outside, meet new people, socialize.

✓ Green spaces would really help people go outside, meet new people, and socialize.

'Come outside' implies moving toward the speaker; 'go outside' is more natural when speaking generally. Add 'and' for proper coordination.

× Even kids love outdoor games.

✓ Even children love outdoor games.

Replace informal 'kids' with 'children' for consistency in register; sentence is otherwise correct.

× But because of infrastructure and the pollution these days, people don't tend to go outside.

✓ But because of infrastructure issues and pollution these days, people do not tend to go outside.

Add 'issues' after 'infrastructure' to make the noun countable in this context and expand contraction 'don't' to 'do not' for formality. Present tense is appropriate here to describe current situation.

× I definitely want to go to a park, but it's not just any park.

✓ I definitely want to go to a park, but it's not just any park.

Sentence is acceptable: 'want to' expresses future intention. No grammatical change needed.

× It it, it is a theme park that Disneyland.

✓ I mean, it is a theme park, Disneyland.

Original has disfluencies and incorrect word order. Remove repeated fillers and correct order: 'it is a theme park, Disneyland' or better 'I mean, Disneyland is a theme park.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Umm, I used to watch a lot of animated movies.

✓ I used to watch a lot of animated movies.

This sentence is correct for past habitual action; remove filler 'Umm'. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit.

× I used to used to play a lot of games when I was a child.

✓ I used to play a lot of games when I was a child.

Remove the duplicated 'used to'. 'Used to play' properly expresses a past habitual action.

× So I am bit inclined towards Disneyland.

✓ So I am a bit inclined toward Disneyland.

Add the article 'a' before 'bit' and use 'inclined toward' (or 'inclined to') for correct prepositional use. Present tense 'am' is fine to express current inclination.

× I want to enjoy that world.

✓ I want to enjoy that world.

Sentence is acceptable as present simple expressing future intention; no grammatical change needed.