Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically consistent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense for childhood) and then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix subject-verb and article errors.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my local park had large oak trees and colorful flowerbeds, which made it a pleasant place to play and relax.

Sugestão: Use consistent tense and link your ideas more clearly. Provide one clear reason and a specific example; correct grammar (e.g., 'adds' not 'add') and reduce redundancy (avoid repeating 'I love going to the park').

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the atmosphere is very relaxing. For instance, hearing birdsong or feeling light rain makes me calm and often brings back fond childhood memories.

Sugestão: Make the sentence structure natural and use conditional correctly. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific benefits using linking words. Fix verb forms (would add, attract tourists) and avoid vague phrases like 'have teas'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would attract tourists and improve residents' quality of life. For example, new parks would provide spaces for afternoon walks, picnics and social gatherings.

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. State the park you want to visit and give a specific reason. Remove repeated doubts about whether it counts as a park. Use correct articles and phrasing ('Disneyland' not 'the Disneyland').

Exemplo: I would like to visit Disneyland in the future because it is a large theme park I have dreamed of since childhood, and I want to experience its attractions and shows.

× Yes, I absolutely love going to the parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I absolutely loved going to parks as a child.

The original mixes past context 'as a child' with present tense 'love'. Use past tense 'loved' to match the time frame. Also 'parks' is better without 'the' when speaking generally about parks.

× I even love it going to the parks even now, because parks have these trees and plants and this exuberant looks that people can get.

✓ I even love going to parks now, because parks have trees and plants and an exuberant look that people can enjoy.

Remove the extra 'it' before the gerund 'going'. Use 'going to parks now' for general reference. 'This exuberant looks' is ungrammatical: use singular 'an exuberant look' or plural 'exuberant looks' with correct article; 'people can get' is awkward—use 'people can enjoy'.

× And you know, when you look at them, you feel, you feel really good.

✓ And you know, when you look at them, you feel really good.

Repeated 'you feel' is redundant. Keep a single instance to be grammatically and stylistically correct; present tense is appropriate for general feelings.

× Yes, as I said, I love going to the parks now because the atmosphere is relaxing.

✓ Yes, as I said, I love going to parks now because the atmosphere is relaxing.

Use 'parks' without 'the' when speaking generally about parks. Present tense 'love' and 'is relaxing' are appropriate.

× The bird chirping sounds and when it's raining it add more to the atmosphere.

✓ The bird-chirping sounds, and when it's raining it adds more to the atmosphere.

Hyphenate 'bird-chirping' as a compound adjective is optional but clarifies meaning. Subject 'it' (referring to raining) requires singular verb 'adds' not 'add'. Also add a comma for clarity.

× So I would say that I love going to the park.

✓ So I would say that I love going to the park.

Sentence is grammatical; no change needed. Present tense and article 'the park' is acceptable when referring to the experience in general, but consistency with earlier 'parks' could be considered.

× It's the part of it brings out the nostalgic memories that I have going to the park as a child.

✓ It's the part that brings out the nostalgic memories I have of going to the park as a child.

Remove extraneous 'of it' and use 'that brings' correctly. Use 'memories I have of going' for standard phrasing.

× Yes, I would love if my city would have added more parks on it because it would added more tourist attraction.

✓ Yes, I would love if my city had more parks because they would add more tourist attractions.

Avoid double 'would' in conditional. Use past subjunctive 'had' for hypothetical present desire. 'Would add' (not 'added') is needed for result clause. Use plural 'park s' and 'tourist attractions' and remove 'on it'.

× People would love to go there and spend their afternoon and have teas and relaxing and spend some quality time together.

✓ People would love to go there, spend their afternoons, have tea, relax, and spend quality time together.

Use plural 'afternoons' for general habits, 'have tea' (uncountable) not 'have teas', and parallel verb forms 'spend, have, relax, and spend' for clarity. Remove redundant 'and'.

× I don't know if it's counted as a park, but I would love to go to the Disneyland.

✓ I don't know if it's counted as a park, but I would love to go to Disneyland.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before proper name 'Disneyland'. Present conditional 'would love to go' is fine.

× It would be a huge park in Disneyland and have always been my childhood dream place to go to so I would love to visit there.

✓ Disneyland is a huge park and has always been my childhood dream destination, so I would love to visit.

Original mixes tenses and has awkward structure. Use present 'is' for fact ('is a huge park'), 'has always been' for past-to-present relevance, and 'destination' is clearer than 'place to go to'. Remove redundant 'there'.

× I don't know if it's still counted as a park, but I don't know any other parks.

✓ I don't know if it's still counted as a park, but I don't know of any other parks.

Use 'know of' when indicating awareness/existence of other parks. The rest is acceptable; keep tense consistent.