Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and irrelevant phrases. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with a simple connector (e.g., "and" or "so").

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends to play football and sometimes we would play hide-and-seek, which was always fun.

Sugestão: Make sentences grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (present tense), then give a specific reason and one brief example. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas logically.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit them when I feel exhausted because being in nature helps me relax and recharge after a long, busy day.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give two clear, specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to organise your points.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide places to relax and exercise. For example, parents can take their children to play safely outdoors, which improves community life.

Sugestão: If you are unsure, give a simple honest response and then expand with a general idea. Use a conditional or future phrase to show willingness to visit a park, and give one specific suggestion or reason.

Exemplo: I'm not sure about a specific park right now, but I would like to visit a large botanical garden in the future because I enjoy seeing different plants and relaxing walks.

× 'Yes sure, when I was a child I usually going to parks with my friends playing different activities like football.'

✓ 'Yes, sure. When I was a child I usually went to parks with my friends to play different activities like football.'

'Original uses "usually going" which is incorrect because after an auxiliary or modal we need base or past form. Here the simple past "went" fits the time reference "when I was a child." Also change "playing" to "to play" to express purpose.'

× 'Don't review, hide and see.'

✓ 'We used to play games like hide-and-seek.'

'"Don't review, hide and see" is an ungrammatical phrase and unclear. The student likely meant the game "hide-and-seek." Rewriting as "We used to play games like hide-and-seek" makes the meaning clear and fits past habitual action.'

× 'Uh, this is umm, sometimes we are going to rephrase or something.'

✓ 'Uh, umm, sometimes we would rephrase or change things.'

'"We are going to rephrase" is odd in recounting past childhood habits. Using "would" or "used to" fits a past habitual action. Also removing filler words and clarifying intent improves clarity.'

× 'Yes, definitely. I'm usually going to park when I feel so depressed and exhausted after a long busy days.'

✓ 'Yes, definitely. I usually go to the park when I feel depressed and exhausted after long, busy days.'

'"I'm usually going" is awkward for habitual present; use simple present "I usually go." Use the singular countable noun "the park" (or "parks") and correct "a long busy days" to "long, busy days." Remove extra intensifier "so."'},{

× 'I'm going to park for the busy atmosphere and recharge myself.'

✓ 'I go to the park for the peaceful atmosphere and to recharge.'

'"Going to park for the busy atmosphere" is contradictory and uses wrong preposition/article. Parks are typically "peaceful." Use "the park" and express purpose with "to recharge." Remove reflexive "myself" which is unnecessary.'

× 'Yes, I like to see more parks in my cities because park helps us to relax and reach us after the visitors and park are very important and when we are we are.'

✓ 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks help us relax. Parks are very important, and they are useful for families and visitors.'

'Multiple issues: "my cities" should be singular "my city" unless the speaker has multiple cities; "park helps" should be plural "parks help" to match subject; sentence is run-on and unclear. Break into simpler sentences, correct agreement, and clarify meaning.'

× 'When some people have a child, they can take their child in the park and enjoying.'

✓ 'When people have a child, they can take their child to the park and enjoy it.'

'Use "to the park" (preposition), not "in the park" when describing going somewhere. "Enjoying" is incorrect without auxiliary; use "and enjoy it" or "and enjoy themselves." Also simplify "some people" to "people."'