Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 答えをもっと自然で文法的に正しくし、1つのトピック文に続けて具体的な詳細をつけましょう。現在の答えは時制や語順の誤り、冗長な表現があり、聞き手にとって分かりにくくなっています。改善ポイント：①最初に簡潔な主張（I loved going to parks）を述べる。②その後で時制を過去形で統一して、具体的な活動（例：playing basketball）や頻度・時間帯を付け加える。③文は3〜4文以内にまとめ、つなぎ言葉（for example, usually, after school）を使って論理的につなげる。

Exemplo: I loved going to parks when I was a child. I was very active and often went there with my friends from about 8 a.m. until 6 p.m. We usually played basketball and other outdoor games, so we spent most of the day running around and having fun.

Sugestão: 回答を簡潔にし、現在の状況と理由を明確に述べましょう。現在形と過去形の混同や文法ミス（be a high school is）を直し、因果関係を示す接続詞（because, so）を使うと論理的になります。改善ポイント：①主張を明確に（I don’t go to parks much now.）②理由を2つ以内に絞って具体的に述べる（study commitments; friends are busy or prefer indoor games）③文法と語順を整える。

Exemplo: I don’t go to parks much now because I’m in high school and I have to study every day. Also, my friends prefer staying home and playing video games, so I rarely have anyone to go with.

Sugestão: 意見をはっきり述べ、賛否両論を整理して述べましょう。語彙や表現の誤り（proximity, shoot loudly, plant plan planners）を直し、提案は具体的に（more green spaces, quiet zones）述べること。改善ポイント：①まず立場を明確に（I’m not sure we need more parks.）②反対意見と賛成意見を一つずつ示す（noise complaints vs need for green spaces）③改善案を具体的に述べる（designated quiet areas, separate sports zones）。

Exemplo: I’m not sure more parks are always necessary. Some residents, especially elderly people, complain about noise from ball games, but parks are also important for green space. City planners should focus on improving existing parks by creating quiet zones and dedicated sports areas to balance different needs.

Sugestão: 回答は簡潔にしつつ、過去の出来事と今の希望を分けて述べましょう。文法ミス（I don't have my the park, it's already gone）、語順や語彙の誤用（complain weird too loudly）を修正する必要があります。改善ポイント：①まず現在の状況を明確に（I don’t have a park I want to visit.）②過去の出来事を簡潔に説明（the nearby park closed due to complaints）③将来の希望があれば述べる（I would like to visit a larger, quieter park in the future）

Exemplo: I don’t have a particular park I want to visit right now. The nearest park to my home was closed after local residents complained about noise and damage to nearby houses. In the future, I would like to visit a larger, quieter park where families can relax without disturbing neighbors.

× Yes, yes I was. I was really active child and I was go park in at 8:00 AM morning and I go home like 6:00 PM I was go with my friends often I was playing basketball or.

✓ Yes, I was. I was a really active child and I went to the park at 8:00 AM and went home around 6:00 PM. I often went with my friends and we played basketball.

The student mixes past and present forms and uses incorrect verb forms and word order. Use simple past for habitual actions in the past: 'was' for state, 'went' for movement, 'played' for activities. Include articles ('a really active child') and correct prepositions and time expressions ('to the park', 'at 8:00 AM', 'around 6:00 PM'). Also remove redundant words and fix sentence boundaries. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I'm not really since I be a high school is I don't go to park anymore because my I have to study every day and I don't have enough time to go park and I don't have friend to go park anymore. We always playing games.

✓ Not really. Since I started high school, I don't go to the park anymore because I have to study every day and I don't have enough time. I also don't have friends to go with; we always play games instead.

Use present perfect or simple past to mark change ('since I started high school') and simple present for general facts ('I don't have enough time'). Use correct verb forms ('play' not 'playing') and include articles and prepositions ('to the park', 'friends to go with'). Remove unnecessary words and split into clear sentences. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I'm not sure we need more proximity. Elderly residents complain that parks can go too noisy because children play ball and shoot loudly. So city planning to plant plan planners should focus on improving exciting park and creating quietly areas.

✓ I'm not sure we need more parks nearby. Elderly residents complain that parks can become too noisy because children play ball and shout loudly. So city planners should focus on improving existing parks and creating quiet areas.

Multiple issues: 'proximity' is wrong word choice for 'nearby parks', 'go too noisy' should be 'become too noisy', 'shoot loudly' is incorrect verb choice — use 'shout', and 'plant plan planners' is nonsensical; use 'city planners'. Use 'existing' not 'exciting' and 'quiet areas' adjective form. Correct verb forms and word order. Grammar problem type ID:14

× I don't have my the park, it was most close from my home. It's already gone because some old people complain weird too loudly and throw ball and broke some house windows.

✓ I didn't have a favorite park; the one closest to my home is gone. It was closed because some older people complained that children were too loud, threw balls, and broke some house windows.

Use past tense for past events ('didn't have', 'was closed'), correct articles ('a favorite park', 'the one closest'), and proper prepositions ('closest to my home'). Fix verb forms: 'complained', 'were too loud', 'threw', 'broke'. Also clarify subjects and use 'older people' or 'residents' instead of 'old people', and restructure sentences for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:5