Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more consistent with tense and reduce hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "but", "because"). Avoid filler sounds ("uh").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child, but my parents rarely took me there because they thought parks were full of germs and I might get sick and miss school.

Sugestão: Answer directly and concisely. Begin with a clear statement about your current preference, then briefly explain the reason with specific details. Eliminate repetition and fillers; use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: No, I don't go to parks much nowadays because many people bring dogs there and I am allergic to dog dander, which gives me itchy, red skin.

Sugestão: Keep the answer natural and include specific examples of activities. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "such as") instead of repeating fillers. Correct the park's name if needed and be precise about "watching live" (what is being watched).

Exemplo: Yes, I would. For example, there is a local park called Tennis Park where people walk, play tennis or volleyball, and sometimes watch live performances or community events.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence about your dream, then add specific reasons and link them using words like "because" or "so." Avoid vague phrases and fillers; be accurate with expressions ("the green heart of America" is okay but say "the United States").

Exemplo: I'd love to visit Central Park in New York because I watched it in the TV show Friends; it's often called the green heart of the United States and seems like a perfect place to relax, watch people stroll, and enjoy outdoor performances.

× When I was a child, uh, I love to go to the parks, but my parents barely took me to the parks because they believe that, uh, the parks are full of germs and I might get sick and miss school.

✓ When I was a child, I loved going to parks, but my parents rarely took me because they believed the parks were full of germs and I might get sick and miss school.

The sentence mixes past context ('When I was a child') with present-tense verbs ('I love', 'they believe'). Use past tense consistently for past events: 'loved' (past of 'love'), 'rarely' is better than 'barely' for frequency, and 'believed' and 'were' match past perspective. Also 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' is more natural than 'go to the parks'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent; use past tense verbs for past situations and prefer natural collocations like 'going to parks' or 'the park'.

× Uh, nowadays I don't, uh, like go to the parks, uh, because, uh, I'm allergic to dead dogs and most of the people come to the parks with their dogs.

✓ Nowadays I don't like going to parks because I'm allergic to dogs and many people come to parks with their dogs.

The original has tense and form issues: 'don't like go' is ungrammatical; use 'don't like going' (verb + -ing after 'like' for general dislikes). 'Allergic to dead dogs' is odd and likely incorrect; 'allergic to dogs' is natural. 'Most of the people' is wordy; use 'many people' or 'most people'. Also remove unnecessary articles: 'come to parks' is fine. Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns (like + gerund) and clearer noun phrases.

× Uh, I'm allergic and I got, uh, itchy skin and uh, I got red skin.

✓ I'm allergic and I get itchy, red skin.

The speaker mixes present state ('I'm allergic') with past-tense 'I got'. For recurring or current allergic reactions, use present tense 'I get'. Also combine adjectives 'itchy' and 'red' before 'skin' or use 'itchy, red skin'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense for habitual or typical reactions and use concise adjective order.

× Uh, yes, actually, uh, I would love to visit more parks in my city. There is a, uh, great park in my city named tennis Park and people, uh, go there for walking, uh, playing tennis, playing volleyball and uh, they also, uh, watch, uh, the live.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit more parks in my city. There is a great park called Tennis Park, and people go there for walking, playing tennis, playing volleyball, and watching live performances.

Issues: unnecessary indefinite article 'a, uh, great park' can be simplified; proper names need capitalization and 'called' is more natural than 'named'. 'the live' is unclear; likely 'live performances' or 'live shows'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: Use correct article and name capitalization, and be specific about 'live' events.

× It was my dream as a little girl to, uh, visit the Central Park.

✓ It was my dream as a little girl to visit Central Park.

Use 'Central Park' without the definite article 'the' when referring to the famous park in New York. Tense 'It was my dream' is fine for a past desire, so only article correction needed. Suggestion: Omit 'the' before well-known proper names of places like 'Central Park'.

× Uh, I know it because of the movie Friends and, uh, I think it's a green heart of the America.

✓ I know it from the TV show Friends, and I think it's the green heart of America.

'Because of the movie Friends' is better as 'from the TV show Friends' since Friends is a TV show, not a movie. 'a green heart of the America' has incorrect article and preposition: use 'the green heart of America' (definite because it's a unique metaphor, and drop 'the' before America). Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('from' to indicate source) and proper articles with country names.

× It's a great place for, uh, watching people walking and uh, enjoying and relaxing.

✓ It's a great place to watch people walking and to relax and enjoy.

After 'a great place', use infinitive form 'to watch' and 'to relax' rather than gerund chains. Also 'enjoying and relaxing' lacks an object for 'enjoy'; use 'enjoy' without object only if context clear, but better: 'to relax and enjoy' or 'to relax and enjoy oneself'. Suggestion: Use infinitives to describe purposes ('a place to...') and parallel structure for activities.