Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetition and fix tense and word choice errors (e.g. bored, stress-reliever).

Exemplo: Yes. I loved going to the park as a child because I spent evenings there with my friends. It was a great stress-reliever after staying at home all day, and we often played games or walked around together.

Sugestão: Give a clear present-tense topic sentence, then use a linking phrase to add one or two specific activities. Correct verb forms and avoid mixing past and present. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks, especially in the evenings. I often play football or do exercises there to stay fit, and sometimes I meet friends to chat or play basketball.

Sugestão: Answer directly and politely, then give a specific reason using linking words. Fix phrasing (e.g. “in the city” not “in the city bus”) and avoid unclear sentences. Limit to two or three sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I prefer the park in my village because it feels quieter and cleaner than the city parks. It suits my needs better as a calm place to relax.

Sugestão: Use a clear conditional sentence and one specific detail about what you want to see. Correct verb forms and word order, and avoid overly long or repetitive clauses. Use linking words like 'because' or 'to' to show purpose.

Exemplo: If I get the chance to travel to hill stations in the future, I would like to visit their parks. I would be interested in how they are designed and what facilities they offer, such as playgrounds and walking paths.

× When I was a child, I used to go to park to spend my evening time with my friends and it is a very stress faster activity for me that I'm because I used to board and frustrated while remaining whole day in the house and in a bounded area.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go to the park to spend my evenings with my friends, and it was a very stress-relieving activity for me because I used to feel bored and frustrated while staying at home all day in a confined area.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and gerunds ('spend my evening time' -> 'spend my evenings', 'remaining whole day' -> 'staying all day'); incorrect adjective/adverb choices fixed to 'stress-relieving' (matches noun) and 'bored' (past participle used as adjective). Suggestion: use '-ing' or participle forms properly for continuous/state verbs (e.g., 'staying', 'feeling') and prefer natural collocations like 'go to the park', 'spend my evenings', 'feel bored'.

× Yes, I still like to go to parks and I often visit there in the evening because it was a time when all my friends and I was free to spend our memorable time and perform some activities like playing football, basketball and exercises also to fit my body.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to parks and I often visit them in the evening because it is a time when all my friends and I are free to spend memorable moments and do activities like playing football and basketball, and exercising to keep fit.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('my friends and I was' -> 'my friends and I are'); incorrect pronoun/object ('visit there' -> 'visit them'); awkward verb forms ('perform some activities' -> 'do activities', 'exercises also to fit my body' -> 'exercising to keep fit'). Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and use correct object pronouns for places ('visit them' or 'visit the park'), and prefer simple verbs like 'do' or 'play' for activities.

× No, I'm not much interested to see and visit the parks in the city bus, just I like my own village park because it is very suitable for me and the environment around the park is very suitable as compared to the others parks.

✓ No, I'm not very interested in seeing and visiting the parks in the city, I just like my village park because it suits me and the environment around it is much better compared to other parks.

Errors: wrong prepositions and articles ('interested to see' -> 'interested in seeing', 'in the city bus' unclear -> 'in the city'); article and plural errors ('the others parks' -> 'other parks'). Suggestion: use 'interested in' + gerund for preferences, and say 'in the city' rather than 'in the city bus' unless meaning the bus; compare using 'compared to other parks'.

× And it is, it is not a park, it is just for a space where I can.

✓ And it is not really a park; it is just a space where I can relax.

Errors: incorrect article and incomplete clause ('just for a space' -> 'just a space', sentence fragment 'where I can' missing verb). Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles ('a space' is correct) and complete the clause with a verb that explains purpose (e.g., 'where I can relax' or 'where I can meet friends').

× In the future if I gets chance to go anywhere around out of the station and hill station, I definitely prefer to visit those parks and how it was built and what are the facilities are available in that the those parks and how many swings for children's and moreover.

✓ In the future, if I get the chance to go to other places like hill stations, I would definitely prefer to visit those parks to see how they were built, what facilities are available, how many swings there are for children, and more.

Errors: verb form and agreement ('gets' -> 'get'); tense and modal choice for future hypothetical ('prefer' -> 'would prefer' fits conditional), incorrect word order and redundant words ('around out of the station and hill station' -> 'other places like hill stations'), article and plural errors ('children's' -> 'children'). Suggestion: use correct conditional structure ('if I get the chance' or 'if I had the chance'), use 'would' for polite future preferences, and list items with clear clauses: 'to see how they were built', 'what facilities are available', 'how many swings there are'.