Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: もっと流暢で自然な文を作ることに集中してください。繰り返し（「I, I, I」や「uh」）を減らし、主題文の後に1～2の具体的な補足（どのような運動をしたか、誰と行ったか、どんな思い出があるか）をリンク語（for example, because, so）でつなげると良いです。発音や語順も簡潔にまとめ、5文以内に収めてください。

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I often played soccer and climbed trees with my friends, which helped me stay active and made many happy memories.

Sugestão: 回答は直接的で良いですが、文法と語順を整え、あいまいな表現（"I'll still" や不要な繰り返し）を避けてください。理由を述べるときは接続詞（because, so, therefore）を正しく使い、一つか二つの具体例（どんな設備を使うか、どのように気分が変わるか）で裏付けると効果的です。

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often use the jogging tracks and outdoor gym equipment because exercising there helps me relieve stress from work.

Sugestão: 主張は理解できますが語彙と文法の誤り（"directly see more parts" "products for refreshment"）を直してください。簡潔なトピック文の後に理由を明確に述べ、具体例（子どもの遊び場、緑地、リラックスできるベンチなど）を挙げてください。接続詞（because, so, for example）を用いると論理的になります。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because Tokyo has many buildings and few green spaces. For example, more small neighborhood parks with benches and trees would give people a place to relax.

Sugestão: 目的と理由は伝わりますが時制と語彙の選び方（"tried to go"は過去志向）を正確にし、曖昧な語句（"fill the great big nature"）を具体化してください。将来に行きたいという点は明確にし、場所の特徴（壮大な景観、ハイキング、写真を撮りたいなど）を具体的に述べると良いです。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Grand Canyon in the United States in the future because I want to experience its vast natural landscapes. I hope to go hiking there and take photos of the dramatic views.

× 'Yes, I like to, to go to park parks as a child, uh, because, uh, I, I, I like to exercise and uh, uh, athletic, uh, stuff in the parks and it's a good experience too.'

✓ 'Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I liked to exercise and do athletic activities there, and it was a good experience.'

'The student is speaking about a past habit (being a child), so present tense "like" is incorrect; past tense "liked" should be used. Also "to go to park parks" is ungrammatical and plural "parks" is needed. "Athletic stuff" is informal and vague; use "athletic activities." Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and choose clearer nouns (e.g., "athletic activities").'

× 'Yes, I like going parks now. So now because I'll still, I like to use a playground equipment in in the parks and it's very refreshing in the working life.'

✓ 'Yes, I like going to parks now. I still like to use playground equipment in the parks, and it's very refreshing for working life.'

'Going parks' is missing the preposition "to" (go to parks). "Playground equipment" is uncountable here so do not use the article "a." The phrase "in the working life" is unnatural; use "for working life" or "in my working life." Also remove unnecessary "I'll" which is incorrect here. Suggestion: add "to" after "going," drop "a" before uncountable nouns, and use "for" to indicate benefit.'

× 'Uh, yes, I directly see more parts in the city because I live in Tokyo now and uh, there are so many buildings in Tokyo. Uh yeah. Uh, we need to have, have more products for refreshment.'

✓ 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because I live in Tokyo now and there are so many buildings. We need more places for relaxation.'

'Directly see more parts' is incorrect word choice and "parts" should be "parks." "Would like to see" is a better polite response. "Products for refreshment" is incorrect collocation; "places for relaxation" or "green spaces for refreshment" is appropriate. Also drop the repeated words. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary (park, place, green space) and correct articles as needed.'

× 'Yes, uh, uh, I tried to go to, uh, Grand Canyon parks in the United States, all because I want to fill the, uh, great big nature, uh, which I can't feel in Japan, uh.'

✓ 'Yes, I would like to go to the Grand Canyon in the United States because I want to experience the vast natural scenery that I cannot find in Japan.'

'I tried to go to' implies a past attempt; the student meant a future desire, so use "would like to go" or "want to go." "Grand Canyon parks" is incorrect: use "the Grand Canyon." "Fill the great big nature" is ungrammatical; use "experience the vast natural scenery" or "experience nature." "Which I can't feel in Japan" should be "that I cannot find in Japan." Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for intentions (would like/want) and more precise nouns for natural features.'