Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/grammar errors (e.g., use past simple: 'I liked').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and my favorite part was the playground, especially the small roller coaster for kids. Those visits were fun because I could play with friends and feel free outdoors.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clearer phrasing and linking words. Say whether you still like parks, then give specific reasons in 1–2 sentences. Correct collocations (e.g., 'get fresh air', 'go jogging') and avoid filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I like them because I can get fresh air and relax under the trees, and the paths are ideal for jogging or walking.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion first, then provide clear, specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct vocabulary ('parks', 'clean air', 'atmosphere'). Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they show urban development and provide places for people to relax. More parks would offer clean air, green space, and safe areas for families to spend time outside.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly (mention a specific park or say none) and explain reasons concisely. Use correct tenses and phrases ('I rarely go because it's not near my house' or 'I hope to visit X park in the future'). Avoid trailing off and fillers.

Exemplo: To be honest, I rarely visit parks because none are near my home and I am usually very busy. In the future, I would like to visit the city botanical garden because I have heard it is beautiful and peaceful.

× That place or really common for those children in a childhood and so do I, so did I and when I was a child I really like to go into the park because there are many place to play like a roller coaster for children.

✓ That place was really common for children during childhood, and I did too. When I was a child I really liked to go to the park because there were many places to play, such as a roller coaster for children.

Errors: 'place' should be plural 'places' (singular/plural issue). 'Those children in a childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'children during childhood' for correct noun phrase. Tense inconsistency: mix of present and past ('like' should be 'liked', addressed under past tense but corrected here to maintain coherence). Use 'were' for existence in past. Suggestion: make nouns agree in number, keep consistent past tense when describing childhood, and use clear prepositional phrases (during childhood).

× Now I'm mature, but actually I really love to go to the park because I want to absorb some fresh air and because of the trees their, their place, that place are really cool and cozy, uh, for people to jogging.

✓ Now I'm an adult, but I still really love going to the park because I want to get some fresh air, and because of the trees the place is really cool and cozy for people to jog.

Errors: 'I'm mature' is awkward; 'I'm an adult' is natural. 'I really love to go' better as 'I really love going' (present tense habitual action). 'absorb some fresh air' is unnatural; use 'get some fresh air'. 'their, their place' is incorrect pronoun use; 'the place' needed (pronoun error ID 12). 'that place are' has subject-verb agreement and plural issue; 'place is' correct. 'to jogging' is incorrect verb form; after 'to' use base form 'jog' or use gerund with 'for jogging'. Suggestion: use consistent present tense for current habits, correct pronouns, and correct verb forms after 'to'.

× When my seat is when my city has more parts, which mean it's really developed and so I hope to see more parts in my city.

✓ When my city has more parks, which would mean it's more developed, I hope to see more parks in my city.

Errors: 'parts' is incorrect word choice and plural issue; should be 'parks'. 'When my seat is' is incorrect and likely unintended; removed. 'Which mean' needs agreement with singular 'which' and should be 'which would mean' or 'which means' depending on style. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('parks') and ensure verbs agree with subjects; use conditional/modal ('would') for hypothetical statements.

× Umm, and it's also have people there, has the atmosphere, has the clean and fresh atmosphere to relax.

✓ It would also have people there and a clean, fresh atmosphere to relax in.

Errors: 'it's also have' is incorrect verb form and auxiliary; use 'it would also have' for hypothetical. Repetition 'has the atmosphere, has the clean and fresh atmosphere' is redundant. Use article 'a clean, fresh atmosphere' (article error). Also add preposition 'in' to complete 'relax in'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct articles before singular nouns, and include necessary prepositions.

× Umm, to be honest, I rarely go to the park because it's not near my house and for my busy schedule I have no time to go to any parks near in my, uh, locals.

✓ To be honest, I rarely go to the park because it's not near my house and due to my busy schedule I have no time to go to any parks nearby.

Errors: 'for my busy schedule' is awkward; use 'due to my busy schedule'. 'parks near in my locals' is ungrammatical; use 'parks nearby' or 'parks near my home' (preposition error). 'locals' misuse; wrong noun. Suggestion: use natural prepositional phrases ('nearby', 'near my home') and correct causal connectors ('due to').

× And I wish, I hope, I wish I have many time to go to the park because.

✓ And I wish I had more time to go to the park.

Errors: 'I wish I have' is incorrect sequence of tenses for unreal present; use past tense 'I had' after 'wish' (past tense issue). 'many time' is incorrect; use 'more time' or 'a lot of time' (quantifier/adjective issue). Also sentence fragment ends with 'because'—removed to form complete sentence. Suggestion: use 'I wish I had' for unreal present wishes and correct quantifiers ('more time').