Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.), then add one specific reason or a brief example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were safe public spaces where I could play with friends. For example, we often played tag near the swings, which I remember fondly.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and concise structure. Answer directly (Yes/No) then give one clear reason in present tense. Avoid long run-on sentences and repetition. Limit to 2 sentences and include a specific detail about your current routine.

Exemplo: Not really — I don’t have much free time at the moment because my college schedule is very busy. I usually study and commute, so I rarely visit parks these days.

Sugestão: Be direct and use singular/plural forms correctly. Start with a clear opinion (Yes, we need more parks.) then give one or two specific, relevant reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they offer safe play areas for children and green spaces for adults to relax. For example, a new park with playground equipment and walking paths would benefit families and older people.

Sugestão: Give a clear, concise answer and one specific reason or example. Use future tense correctly and avoid vague phrases. Mention a particular national park or animal to make your answer more concrete and interesting.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit national parks in India in the future, such as Ranthambore, because I want to see wild tigers and enjoy the extensive greenery. Visiting a park like that would give me a chance to observe wildlife and learn about conservation efforts.

× Well in two years time I I have not that much spare time to do such activities as I have a hectic schedule of my study and in which I usually go to my college and did not have any leisure time to go to the parks and do the activities which I like the most in the parks to be done.

✓ Well, for the past two years I have not had much spare time for such activities because I have had a hectic study schedule; I usually go to college and have not had leisure time to visit parks and do the activities I enjoy there.

Tense consistency error: the student mixes present and past forms incorrectly ('have not that much' and 'did not have'). Use present perfect ('have not had') to describe a situation continuing from the past to now. Also simplify and split clauses for clarity.

× Well, parks plays an important role in providing basic facilities to the children's and adults because children's, uh, the most of the activities of the children's are, can be done in the parks with, uh, a lot of restrictions and uh, any risk of their injury.

✓ Well, parks play an important role in providing basic facilities to children and adults because most children's activities can be done in parks with fewer restrictions and less risk of injury.

Subject-verb agreement: 'parks' is plural so use 'play' not 'plays'. Articles and possessive errors: 'the children's' is incorrect here; use 'children' or 'children's activities' appropriately. 'A lot of restrictions' contradicts 'fewer restrictions'—context suggests parks allow safe activities, so 'fewer restrictions' is clearer. Remove redundant words.

× And adults, uh, adults usually want to roam around the park.

✓ Adults usually like to stroll around the park.

Redundant repetition of 'adults' and informal filler 'uh'. Use a single subject and a suitable verb ('stroll' or 'walk') and remove filler words for clarity.

× Well, in the future, I like to visit national parks in India because they have a lot of greenery in which I want to roam around and see and so and want to see a such animals which are quite which are only seen in these places because a lot of research has been done by the government because.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit national parks in India because they have a lot of greenery where I can walk and because I want to see animals that are found only in those places.

Incorrect verb form and redundancy: use 'would like' or 'want to' for future intentions. Remove repeated words ('and see and so and want to see a such animals') and incorrect constructions ('a such animals'). Use relative clause correctly ('animals that are found only in those places'). The clause about government research is incomplete and irrelevant; omit or clarify if needed.