Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child”), then add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and correct tense errors (use past for childhood).

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played tag and football with neighborhood kids, which helped me stay active and made weekends very fun.

Sugestão: Give a clear, structured answer using present tense and avoid filler words. State the main idea, then add one specific reason and a brief result. Avoid contradictory or unclear statements (e.g., “you can't see a big progress” is confusing).

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go there every morning to walk and exercise because it helps me stay healthy and reduces stress, even though physical changes are gradual.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific detail. Use correct grammar and quantify carefully. Mention benefits of more parks and link ideas with words like ‘because’ and ‘so’.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because we only have two small, poorly maintained parks. More parks would reduce crowding, give people more places to exercise, and improve the neighborhood environment.

Sugestão: Be clear and polite; give a direct answer then support it with a reason. Avoid unclear or awkward phrases. If you’re familiar with local parks, explain why visiting new ones isn’t necessary or mention one you might like to visit and why.

Exemplo: Not really — I already know most parks near my home, so I’m happy visiting the ones I like. However, I might visit a larger city park in the future to try different facilities or events if the chance arises.

× Yes, yes I do because when I was a child I like to do active activities like playing in the yard, playing with other children, being gathered with other children and enjoy my time there.

✓ Yes, yes I did because when I was a child I liked to do active activities like playing in the yard, playing with other children, gathering with other children and enjoying my time there.

The speaker is describing past habits, so past tense verbs are required. 'do' -> 'did', 'like' -> 'liked'. Parallel verb forms should be used: use gerunds consistently for activities: 'gathering' and 'enjoying' instead of 'being gathered' and 'enjoy'. Use active form 'gathering with other children' rather than passive 'being gathered'. Suggestion: convert all verbs describing past routines to past tense and use consistent gerund forms for lists of activities.

× It was a really nice time and I really enjoyed the time there.

✓ It was a really nice time and I really enjoyed being there.

Redundant phrasing 'enjoyed the time there' is awkward; keep past tense 'enjoyed' and use natural collocation 'enjoyed being there'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and prefer concise, idiomatic expressions.

× Uh yes I do. I like to go to parks to do active activities and walk and and finished my daily walking everyday.

✓ Uh yes I do. I like to go to parks to do active activities and walk and finish my daily walking every day.

The sentence mixes present habitual tense with an incorrect past form 'finished'. Use the base verb 'finish' after 'and' to describe habitual actions: 'walk and finish my daily walking every day'. Remove the duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: for habitual present use simple present verbs in sequence: 'walk and finish'.

× It is healthy and it's nice to do it every day and you can't see a big progress in your body shape.

✓ It is healthy and it's nice to do it every day, although you may not see much progress in your body shape.

'A big progress' is incorrect because 'progress' is uncountable and usually modified by 'much' or 'a lot of'. Also the modal/politeness suits 'may not' instead of 'can't' to indicate possibility. Suggestion: use 'much progress' or 'a lot of progress' and consider adding a contrasting connector 'although' for clarity.

× Yes I would like to see more parks because there is a 2 parks in my city which is littered and I wish there is more.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks because there are two parks in my city that are littered and I wish there were more.

Use plural agreement with 'there are' for multiple items and write the number as 'two'. Modify relative clause: 'that are littered' instead of 'which is littered'. For desire about a nonpresent situation use subjunctive or past form 'I wish there were more'. Suggestion: match number agreements and use correct relative pronoun and verb forms after 'wish'.

× So many people enjoy their time there and the park does not become very crowded.

✓ So many people enjoy their time there and the parks do not become very crowded.

Context refers to multiple parks, so 'park' should be plural 'parks' to agree with 'many people' and previous sentence. 'Become' is acceptable but 'get' or 'become' can be used; keep present simple 'do not become'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context and previous sentences.

× I guess no because I've all the parks are familiar So what is the point of going to another park while your your park or the park is near? Your house is beautiful and it's good.

✓ I guess not because all the parks are familiar to me. So what is the point of going to another park when your park is nearby? Your house is beautiful and that's nice.

Multiple problems: 'I guess no' should be 'I guess not' for negation. 'I've all the parks are familiar' is ungrammatical—use 'all the parks are familiar to me'. Use 'when' rather than 'while' for reason. 'your your' is repeated; 'park is near' -> 'park is nearby'. Final clause 'Your house is beautiful and it's good' is awkward; 'that's nice' or 'that's great' is more natural. Suggestion: simplify sentences, correct negation, use 'familiar to me', remove duplicate words, and use 'nearby'.