Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct unclear words, avoid filler and repetition, and add one or two specific details. Use linking words (for example, because) correctly and keep under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, every weekend my family would visit a local park where we played on the swings and slides and had small picnics. Because it was a chance to spend time together, those visits are some of my happiest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific, relevant details. Remove repeated phrases and unclear ideas (e.g. "catch up the news building"). Use linking words (especially, because) correctly to connect reasons and examples.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Especially at weekends I go there to relax and meet friends, because the open space is perfect for chatting and unwinding after a busy workweek.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid vague phrases ("Greens Bay") and redundancy ("refresh your mind and the brain"). Use linking words like "because" and "also" appropriately.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces help people relax and reduce stress. Also, parks provide convenient places for friends and families to meet and exercise, which improves community health.

Sugestão: Give a clear, concise answer naming the park and a couple of specific reasons you want to go. Correct grammar ("there is one park"; "northern Thailand") and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like "because" and "when" to explain plans.

Exemplo: Yes, there is a park I want to visit in Chiang Mai in northern Thailand. I plan to go when I visit my mother because I want to run there in the morning and enjoy the beautiful landscapes and fresh air.

× Absolutely yes, but I was a shower.

✓ Absolutely yes, but I was a show-er (I used to show off) -> Actually: Absolutely yes, but I was shy.

The original sentence 'I was a shower' is incorrect and unclear; likely the speaker meant 'I was shy'. This is a sentence structure/word choice problem. Use 'I was shy' to correctly describe temperament in past tense. Suggestion: replace the wrong word with the correct adjective 'shy'.

× I would like to go to the park because on the weekends we would like to play umm slide swing and it's like becau for example, we doing some activity with family gathering on the park and we have some little picnic for catch up during the week.

✓ I liked going to the park because on weekends we would play on the slides and swings. For example, we did activities and had family gatherings in the park, and we had small picnics to catch up during the week.

Multiple errors: incorrect use of 'would like' (should use past 'would' or 'liked') and incorrect verb forms 'we doing' (missing auxiliary; should be 'we did') and noun forms 'slide swing' (need plural and preposition 'on the slides and swings'). This fits the present participle/verb form and sentence structure categories. Suggestions: use past tense consistently for childhood habits ('liked', 'would play', 'did activities', 'had picnics') and include prepositions ('on the park' -> 'in the park').

× Absolutely yes. I still would like to go to the park now, especially during on the weekends because I can relax and catch up some of my friends and catch up the news building on the weekday with a fan gathering together.

✓ Absolutely yes. I still like going to the park now, especially on weekends, because I can relax and catch up with some of my friends and get news about what they are doing during the week when we gather together.

Problems: unnecessary 'would' with present habits ('I still would like' -> 'I still like going'), wrong preposition 'during on the weekends' -> 'on weekends', incorrect verb/phrase 'catch up some of my friends' -> 'catch up with some of my friends', and unclear phrase 'catch up the news building on the weekday with a fan gathering together' -> clarified to 'get news about what they are doing during the week when we gather together'. Use correct present tense for current habits and correct prepositions and collocations ('catch up with').

× To be honest I would like to see more park on my city because nature Greens Bay can help you calm your mind and catch up with your friends gathering.

✓ To be honest, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces can help calm your mind and help you catch up with friends when you gather.

Errors: 'more park' should be plural 'more parks' (singular/plural issue), wrong preposition 'on my city' -> 'in my city', 'nature Greens Bay' is unclear—use 'green spaces' or 'parks', and collocation 'friends gathering' -> 'when you gather with friends'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Use correct noun number and prepositions.

× Also get help you with refresh your mind and the brain.

✓ They also help you refresh your mind and clear your head.

Original lacks subject and uses incorrect pronoun/order 'get help you with refresh'. This is a sentence structure/pronoun issue. Provide a clear subject 'They' (referring to parks/green spaces) and correct verb phrases 'help you refresh your mind' and natural collocation 'clear your head'.

× Yes, there are one park I would like to go in the future is is located in Chiang Mai, northern of Thailand.

✓ Yes, there is one park I would like to go to in the future; it is located in Chiang Mai, in the north of Thailand.

Errors: 'there are one park' mixes plural verb with singular noun—use 'there is one park'. Missing preposition 'go to'. 'is is' is a repetition. 'northern of Thailand' should be 'in the north of Thailand' or 'northern Thailand'. Correct subject-verb agreement and prepositions.

× I would like to travel there when I visit my mom and I cannot get up early in the morning and go for a running and exercise before starting the day.

✓ I would like to travel there when I visit my mom so I can get up early in the morning and go for a run and exercise before starting the day.

Problems: contradicting modal usage 'would like... and I cannot get up early'—use 'so I can' to express purpose. 'go for a running' is incorrect; use 'go for a run'. Maintain consistent tense and use correct noun 'a run' not 'a running'.

× I have heard that the place is full of landscape and.

✓ I have heard that the place is full of beautiful landscapes.

The sentence ends abruptly 'and.' and uses awkward phrasing 'full of landscape'. Complete the thought and use the plural 'landscapes' or 'beautiful scenery'. Ensure sentences are complete and use natural collocations.'