Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法と語彙の誤りを直し、より自然で簡潔な表現を使うこと。まず主文で直接答え（肯定か否定か）を示し、その後に理由や具体例を一つか二つの短い文で補足してください。接続詞（例えば“because”や“so”）を使って論理的につなぎ、動詞の不定詞や分詞の誤用（e.g. “prefer to stay”ではなく“preferred to stay”，“liked drawing”など）を直しましょう。また語順と前置詞（“hang out with”や“puzzle with”の使い方）を確認してください。

Exemplo: No, I preferred staying at home as a child because I enjoyed quiet activities. For example, I liked drawing and solving puzzles with my parents instead of playing outside.

Sugestão: 発音ミス（“park”）や冠詞・前置詞の誤用（“sit on the couch”など）を直し、語を自然に並べてください。主文で直接答えを示した後、具体的な活動を2文以内で述べ、接続詞（“and”や“so”）で流れを整えましょう。“like university”のような表現は不自然なので“our university life”など具体化してください。

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks with my friends. We often bring food and drinks and sit on the grass or a bench while chatting about our university life and recent trips.

Sugestão: 回答の冒頭で簡潔に結論を述べ、その後に理由を具体的に示してください。地名や略語（“UMM”）は文脈に応じて説明するか避けた方が良いです。動詞の形（“interested in walking”）や不要な語（“there”）を修正し、接続詞で文を滑らかに繋ぎましょう。

Exemplo: Definitely. I would like more parks because they are often located near shopping areas, museums and schools. I enjoy walking around and discovering new green spaces I have never visited before.

Sugestão: 主文で直接答えを示した後、具体的な理由や計画を簡潔に述べてください。代名詞の誤用（“it'll be your perfect”→“it would be a perfect”）や動詞形（“having some snacks”→“have some snacks”）を直し、文を2〜4文に収め自然さを保ちましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a large park in Kyoto because it is surrounded by beautiful nature. It would be a perfect place to relax, so I plan to go there with friends and have some snacks.

× Well, if I remember correctly, I was preferred to stay at home and do some activities.

✓ Well, if I remember correctly, I preferred to stay at home and do some activities.

The phrase 'was preferred' is incorrect passive use; 'preferred' should be an active past tense verb to indicate the student's own preference. Use simple past 'preferred' rather than passive 'was preferred'. Suggestion: Use 'I preferred' to express your past preference.

× I really liked to drawing or puzzled with my parents rather than going outside and hang out with other children.

✓ I really liked drawing or puzzling with my parents rather than going outside and hanging out with other children.

After 'liked', use the gerund form (verb + -ing), not the infinitive with 'to'. Also 'puzzled' should be the gerund 'puzzling' to match 'drawing'. 'Hang out' should be 'hanging out' after 'rather than'. Suggestion: Use gerunds after 'liked' and parallel gerunds in lists.

× Yes, I still like going to pack with my friends.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks with my friends.

'Pack' is a misspelling; the correct noun is 'park'. Use plural 'parks' if you mean visiting parks in general. Suggestion: Check spelling and choose singular/plural to match meaning.

× We always bring some food and drinks and sit at the couch and chat about our like university or activities or recent trips.

✓ We always bring some food and drinks and sit on the couch and chat about things like university, activities, or recent trips.

Use 'sit on the couch' not 'sit at the couch'. Also 'our like university' is ungrammatical; use 'things like' to introduce examples. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'on' with 'sit', and use 'things like' to list examples.

× I think Tokyo has many parks near UMM, shopping malls, museums, or even the schools.

✓ I think Tokyo has many parks near UMM, shopping malls, museums, or even schools.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before plural general nouns like 'schools' in this context. 'The schools' implies specific schools already mentioned. Suggestion: Omit 'the' when speaking generally about plural nouns.

× So I'm really interested in to walking around and finding new places that I've never been there before.

✓ So I'm really interested in walking around and finding new places that I have never been to before.

After 'interested in' use the gerund 'walking', not 'to walking'. Also 'been there before' is redundant with 'to'—use 'been to before' or 'been there before', but here 'been to before' fits. Suggestion: Use 'interested in' + gerund and 'been to' for visiting places.

× It's quite large and surrounded by beautiful nature, so I think it'll be your perfect place to relax.

✓ It's quite large and surrounded by beautiful nature, so I think it will be the perfect place to relax.

Using 'your' wrongly addresses the examiner; use 'the' to describe the park generally. Also expand contraction 'it'll' to 'it will' for clarity if desired. Suggestion: Use 'the perfect place' to state a general opinion, not 'your' which implies possession by the listener.

× So I will love to go with my friends and having some snacks.

✓ So I would love to go with my friends and have some snacks.

Use 'would love to' to express desire; 'will love to' is incorrect here. After 'would love to' the base verb 'have' should be used, not 'having'. Suggestion: Use 'would love to' + base verb for polite expressions of desire.