Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần ngắn gọn hơn và mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và cấu trúc dài quá 1 câu. Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý nếu có thêm ý.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often played football and climbed trees in the park near my home, which helped me stay active and make friends.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và rút gọn. Tránh lặp và sai cấu trúc ("they are not only do they have"). Nên nêu rõ lợi ích tinh thần và thể chất với ví dụ ngắn gọn, dùng từ vựng phù hợp như "relaxation", "exercise".

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy parks even more now because they help me relax and stay fit. For instance, I go jogging there twice a week and find the greenery very calming.

Sugestão: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh tiếng ừ à, lặp từ và ngắt quãng. Nêu lý do chính ngắn gọn (ví dụ: sức khoẻ cộng đồng, không gian giải trí) và nếu muốn, đề xuất giải pháp ngắn. Giữ 2–3 câu tối đa.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and family activities. Although building parks costs money, they improve residents' wellbeing and can increase property values.

Sugestão: Trả lời cần chính xác tên địa điểm và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp/diễn đạt mơ hồ ("related in the capital city", "observe its beneficial"). Nên nêu một lý do cụ thể và cách bạn sẽ trải nghiệm công viên (hoạt động cụ thể).

Exemplo: Yes, I'd love to visit Ho Chi Minh National Park near the capital. I want to hike its trails, see local wildlife and enjoy the forest scenery for a few days.

× Of course, as I get older, I tend to enjoy park even more because I believe that they are not only do they have some mental benefits for me, but they also offers other physical advantages as well.

✓ Of course, as I get older, I tend to enjoy parks even more because I believe that they not only have mental benefits for me, but they also offer other physical advantages.

The sentence has multiple present tense and subject-verb agreement issues. 'enjoy park' should be 'enjoy parks' (plural noun with general meaning). The clause 'they are not only do they have' mixes auxiliary 'do' incorrectly; use 'they not only have'. 'offers' should be 'offer' to match plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: keep verbs in simple present for general truths and ensure verb forms match the subject.

× So I would really like to go to the parks near my house in order to engage in those activities.

✓ So I would really like to go to the parks near my house to engage in those activities.

Phrase 'the parks near my house' is acceptable, but 'in order to engage in those activities' is wordy. This correction simplifies wording and keeps plural 'parks' consistent with 'those activities'. Maintain plural when referring to multiple parks or general activities.

× I had a great deal of time to spend for outdoor activities.

✓ I had a great deal of time to spend on outdoor activities.

The correct preposition with 'spend time' is 'on' not 'for'. Use 'spend time on something'. This is a common collocation; practice sentences using 'spend time on' to internalize it.

× For example, whenever I go to the park, I can actually emerge in, immerse in a natural environments and enhance my physical fitness by doing exercises.

✓ For example, whenever I go to the park, I can actually immerse myself in a natural environment and enhance my physical fitness by exercising.

Use 'immerse myself in' rather than 'emerge in, immerse in'. 'a natural environments' mixes singular article with plural noun; change to 'a natural environment' or 'natural environments'. 'doing exercises' is awkward; 'exercising' is more natural (verb + -ing). Ensure reflexive pronoun 'myself' follows 'immerse'.

× However, UMM as a residence, I would really like to have more park in my hometown because that can enhance umm the range of umm activities and places that individuals can engage in.

✓ However, as a resident, I would really like to have more parks in my hometown because that can enhance the range of activities and places that people can engage in.

'UMM as a residence' is incorrect; use 'as a resident'. 'more park' should be 'more parks' (plural). 'individuals' is formal; 'people' is more natural. Add definite article 'the range'. Ensure pronouns and nouns agree in number.

× Of course I I would as a citizen, actually it can represent an increasing financial burden for umm, the provincial authorities.

✓ Of course I would, but as a citizen I know it can represent an increasing financial burden for the provincial authorities.

Original has repetition 'I I' and poor structure/flow. Use a coordinating conjunction 'but' to connect ideas and reorder to make subject clear. Keep tense present and add definite article 'the provincial authorities'.

× Of course, I would really want to go to the Ho Chi Minh National Park related in the capital city of my country.

✓ Of course, I really want to go to Ho Chi Minh National Park near the capital city of my country.

'Would really want' mixes conditional/modal with simple desire; simple present 'really want' fits when stating a current desire. 'related in the capital city' is incorrect; use 'near the capital city' or 'in the capital region'. Remove unnecessary article before park name.

× The reason is that it is one of the most famous parts in my home in my country, and I really want to visit it once in order to immerse myself in the natural spaces and to observe its beneficial.

✓ The reason is that it is one of the most famous places in my country, and I really want to visit it to immerse myself in natural spaces and to observe their benefits.

'parts in my home in my country' is awkward; use 'places in my country'. 'visit it once' is unnecessary; 'visit it' is sufficient. 'observe its beneficial' is ungrammatical: 'beneficial' is an adjective; use noun 'benefits' and match plural 'their' to 'natural spaces'.