Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be natural and direct, use past tense for childhood, be concise and avoid unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace vague phrases like “Palace of Child” and “play it around” with specific activities or feelings.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play tag and football with neighborhood kids, and meeting new friends there made the weekends very fun.

Sugestão: Keep answers natural and grammatical, avoid repetition (e.g., “still”). Use linking words to organise points and be specific about what you find relaxing. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are relaxing and offer pleasant views. For instance, I like sitting by the pond to read and I also enjoy using the swings because they make me feel carefree.

Sugestão: Use formal phrasing (avoid “wanna”, “and yeah”), be concise and give a clear reason with a specific detail or example. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ correctly and keep to present tense.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because I haven't explored all the green spaces nearby. For example, additional parks would give me more options for weekend walks and places to meet friends.

Sugestão: Give a complete, direct response and avoid trailing off. If you have no specific park in mind, say why and add a brief follow-up (e.g., a type of park you’d like to try). Use one or two sentences only.

Exemplo: Not at the moment; I don't have a specific park in mind. However, I would like to visit a large botanical garden or a riverside park when I get the chance.

× Yes, I do like going to the Palace of Child because I can get to meet new people around me and play it around with them.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the Palace of Childhood because I could meet new people and play with them.

The sentence contains tense and verb form issues. 'Do like' is present but question asked about past; use 'liked'. 'Palace of Child' is incorrect noun form; use 'Palace of Childhood' or 'children\'s palace'. 'Can get to meet' is awkward; 'could meet' matches past. 'Play it around with them' is ungrammatical; use 'play with them'. Improve by aligning tense to past, using correct noun forms, and using 'play with'.

× I still like going to the parks nowadays because it's relaxing, I get to see the view and I still go and play the swing and because I really love swinging.

✓ I still like going to parks nowadays because it's relaxing, I can see the view, and I still go on the swings because I really love swinging.

Problems: unnecessary definite article 'the parks' should be 'parks' for general habit, and mixed verb forms. 'I get to see the view' is acceptable but 'I can see the view' is more natural. 'Play the swing' is wrong collocation; use 'go on the swings' or 'play on the swings'. Combine clauses with correct conjunctions and parallel structure.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in where I live because I haven't explored every park yet and I wanna know and experience new park and yeah.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks where I live because I haven't explored every park yet and I want to discover and experience new parks.

'In where I live' is incorrect preposition use; use 'where I live' or 'in my city'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Know and experience new park' is ungrammatical and missing plural; use 'discover and experience new parks'. Maintain formal register and correct pluralization.

× For now I don't really have any parks in mind that I want to go in the future yet, but.

✓ For now I don't really have any parks in mind that I want to visit in the future.

Redundant words and incorrect verb choice: 'want to go in the future yet' is wordy and awkward. Use 'want to visit in the future'. Remove trailing 'but' if unfinished. Keep future intention clear by using 'in the future' after 'visit'.