Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Link ideas with simple connectors like “because” or “and.”

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because my family often took me there on weekends. For example, my grandfather would bring me to a small park near our house where I played on the swings and fed ducks.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use present simple for habits. Provide a brief reason and a specific example of what you do there. Avoid repeating words and unnecessary pauses. Use linking words like “because” and “when” correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because they help me relax after work. For instance, I often meet friends there on weekends to walk, sit on a bench and talk.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and a specific reason. Use correct noun forms (e.g., “parks give us space” not “gives us some pressure”) and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences: one opinion sentence and one supporting detail using connectors like “because” or “so.”

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for relaxation and exercise. For example, more parks would let families meet, children play safely, and people walk their dogs.

Sugestão: Make a clear future plan using will or going to, and name a specific park or type of park. Give one reason why you want to visit it and a short supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases and remove hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit the new riverside park in my city next summer because my friends say it has beautiful gardens and walking paths. I am going with colleagues, and we want to take photos and have a picnic there.

× Yes, of course I like uh, like to go in parks as a child because uh that time we are very little and uh umm, we love going outside uh, sometimes, uh, my grandfather going umm give uh, me outside and uh some parks as we.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to parks as a child because at that time we were very young and we loved going outside. Sometimes my grandfather took me to some parks.

The student uses present tense and incorrect verb forms when describing past habits. This is a present tense issue (ID 6) and also relates to past tense usage; however, per the list, change to past tense to match 'as a child'. Use 'liked' and 'were' for past, 'loved' for past habitual, and 'took' as the past form of 'take'. Also remove filler words and correct preposition 'to parks' instead of 'in parks'. Suggestions: use simple past for childhood experiences and use correct prepositions ('to parks').

× Yes, of course I still like going to parks now because we relax when I have some free time, I relax on going to parks. I whenever my friends are free time we are going.

✓ Yes, of course I still like going to parks now because I relax when I have free time. Whenever my friends are free, we go together.

The sentence mixes pronouns and tenses incorrectly (present tense issue ID 6) and has awkward phrasing. Replace 'we relax when I have some free time' with 'I relax when I have free time' to keep subject consistent. Use 'go' not 'are going' for habitual actions: 'we go together'. Remove unnecessary preposition 'on' in 'relax on going'. Suggestions: keep subject consistent and use simple present for regular habits.

× Yes, umm, I, I like to more uh, parks in umm our city, because the parks uh, gives us uh, uh, some pressure and we are going to park some friend, have some friends and uh, we have fun together and uh walks, uh, together uh, I still.

✓ Yes, I would like more parks in our city because parks reduce stress and give us a place to meet friends. We can have fun and walk together there.

This sentence has multiple issues, but per the allowed list, the main error is incorrect use of quantifiers/expressions (ID 14) and related noun-verb agreement. 'Like to more parks' is incorrect—use 'would like more parks' or 'would like to have more parks'. 'Gives us some pressure' is wrong meaning; likely intended 'reduce stress'. Also fix subject-verb agreement: 'parks give us' not 'gives'. Suggestions: use 'would like more parks' and correct verb agreement and word choice ('reduce stress').

× MMM, yes, uh, I went to going to my, uh, my city and in going to, uh, in, in future, uh, because uh, I'm, I am my colleagues and my friends, uh, tell me there are many beautiful places in.

✓ Yes, in the future I want to visit places in my city because my colleagues and friends tell me there are many beautiful places there.

The original mixes past and progressive forms incorrectly; this is a present/future tense issue (ID 6 and 7), but mainly tense and sentence structure. Use 'in the future I want to visit' or 'I would like to visit' for future intention. Remove redundant words and correct clause order. Also add the missing object 'there' at the end. Suggestions: use clear future expression (will/want/would like) and correct word order.