Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make tense consistent, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Keep it natural and concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Use a linking word to connect reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often met my neighbours there, and we played games like hide-and-seek for hours, which made weekends really fun.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence, keep tense consistent, shorten wordy phrases, and add a brief specific example of when you might visit. Use a linking word such as "but" or "although".

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely have time during the week because of my job. I usually visit on Sunday mornings to relax and exercise.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid conditional phrasing that makes the response vague; be confident. Use linking words like "because" to explain.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because many neighbourhoods lack green spaces. For example, a small community park with benches and a playground would benefit families and older residents.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases like "the reason behind it is because," and include a specific activity or part of the park you want to see. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. I have seen it in many films, and I especially want to walk around the lake and visit the Conservatory Garden when I go.

× I like going to parks when I was a child.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I like' with the past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense for habits in the past (I liked going to parks).

× The reason behind it was I was able to meet with my friends and played with them all day long.

✓ The reason was that I was able to meet my friends and play with them all day long.

Two issues: redundant 'behind' is unnecessary and structure after 'was' requires 'that' for clarity. Also verb forms must be parallel: 'was able to meet' followed by base form 'play' (not past 'played') for coordinated actions. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms and include 'that' for clarity: 'The reason was that I was able to meet my friends and play with them all day long.'

× I still like going to parks, however I do not have the luxury to go to these kinds of places every now and then simply because I am now working and I am paying attention to my current job.

✓ I still like going to parks; however, I do not have the opportunity to go to such places very often because I am working and focusing on my current job.

Several problems: 'luxury to go' is unnatural—use 'opportunity' or 'time'. 'These kinds of places' is wordy; 'such places' is better. 'Every now and then' contradicts 'do not have'—use 'very often'. Repeated 'now' and 'current' are redundant. Use parallel progressive/simple forms: 'I am working and focusing' or 'I work and focus'. Suggestion: simplify wording and avoid redundancy for clarity.

× I would love to if my city has more spaces that can accommodate parks for everyone.

✓ I would love to if my city had more spaces that could accommodate parks for everyone.

This is a second conditional structure: the hypothetical condition should use past tense 'had' and modal 'could' to indicate unreal or unlikely present situation. Using present tense 'has' with 'would' is inconsistent. Suggestion: use 'had' and 'could' for hypotheticals: 'I would love to if my city had more spaces that could accommodate parks for everyone.'

× I want to visit the Central Park in New York in the near future.

✓ I want to visit Central Park in New York in the near future.

Article use: 'Central Park' is a proper noun and does not need 'the' before it. Use 'Central Park' without 'the'. Suggestion: drop the definite article before named parks or landmarks (except where conventional usage requires it).

× The reason behind it is because I always see this park in movies and I feel like I will be able to enjoy strolling around the park when I get there someday.

✓ The reason is that I always see this park in movies, and I feel I will enjoy strolling around it when I get there someday.

Multiple issues: 'The reason behind it is because' is redundant—use 'The reason is that'. 'I feel like I will be able to enjoy' is wordy; use 'I feel I will enjoy'. 'Strolling around the park' repeated noun; use pronoun 'it'. Also present simple 'always see' is fine for repeated experience; future 'will enjoy' is appropriate. Suggestion: eliminate redundancy and simplify verb phrases for clarity.