Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeated words and incorrect tense. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and limit to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they helped me relax. For example, I used to play on swings and have picnics with my family, which made me feel refreshed and happy.

Sugestão: Use correct verb tenses and a clear structure: give a short topic sentence (present simple), then one specific reason or example. Remove filler sounds like 'uh' and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit a nearby park every weekend because walking there lifts my mood and gives my children space to play.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give specific reasons or comparisons. Avoid vague phrasing and repetitions. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to connect ideas and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide recreation and improve air quality. For instance, although Oxford has nice green spaces, having more well-maintained parks would benefit families and encourage outdoor activities.

Sugestão: Be specific and fluent: name the park, give one or two clear reasons why you want to visit, and mention who you would go with. Eliminate fillers and repetitive words; use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Hyde Park in London because it is very spacious and has beautiful greenery. I plan to go there with my family so my children can run around and enjoy the open space.

× Yes, I like that because I, when I, when I go to the park, I, I'm refresh my mood.

✓ Yes, I liked that because when I went to the park, it refreshed my mood.

The student mixed present and past tenses and used incorrect verb form 'I'm refresh'. The question asked about childhood (past), so use past tense: 'liked', 'went', and past simple 'refreshed'. Also replace 'I, I'm refresh my mood' with 'it refreshed my mood' for natural subject and correct verb form.

× So, so I often go to the park with my, with my children.

✓ So I often went to the park with my children.

Because the context is childhood, the verb should be past: 'went'. The original sentence had correct plural 'children' but tense mismatch. Change 'often go' to 'often went' to match past context.

× Of course, uh, I still going to park today, today.

✓ Of course, I still go to the park nowadays.

The student omitted the auxiliary for present continuous ('I am going') and used awkward phrasing. Use simple present 'I still go' or present continuous 'I am still going to the park'. Also include the article 'the' before 'park' and replace 'today, today' with 'nowadays' or 'these days' for clarity.

× So, uh, the park is, uh, the park is, uh, the park made me happy.

✓ The park makes me happy.

The student mixed tenses and repeated phrases. Use simple present 'makes' to express a general truth about parks now. Alternatively, in past context use 'made me happy'. Keep a single, clear clause and correct verb form.

× So I often go to there.

✓ So I often go there.

Using both 'to' and 'there' is redundant. 'Go to' requires a place noun ('go to the park') while 'go there' uses 'there' without 'to'. Remove 'to' before 'there'.

× Yes, I agree with you, uh, because, uh, I live in Oxford, so I went to the, went to park in Oxford.

✓ Yes, I agree. I live in Oxford, so I went to the parks in Oxford.

The sentence has repetition and article errors. Use plural 'parks' if referring generally, or 'the park' for a specific park. Also remove redundant 'went to the, went to'. Keep pronouns and clauses concise.

× So, uh, in the future I will, uh, I would like to go to park in London because I heard, I heard in Hyde Park.

✓ In the future I would like to go to a park in London because I heard about Hyde Park.

Combine modal expressions correctly: 'I would like' is appropriate. Use article 'a' before 'park' and the preposition 'about' after 'heard' when introducing a place you heard of. Remove repetitive 'I heard'.

× Yes, I want to go to park in the future.

✓ Yes, I want to go to a park in the future.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular, non-specific noun 'park'. 'Go to park' without article is incorrect in English.

× Hyde Park is very, uh, spacious and green.

✓ Hyde Park is very spacious and green.

This sentence only needs removal of filler sounds; grammatically it is correct. Keep 'Hyde Park is very spacious and green.'

× So I want to go there and with my family, uh, it's uh, especially my kids, uh, kids, uh.

✓ So I want to go there with my family, especially my kids.

Original had incorrect word order and redundant words. Place 'with my family' directly after 'go there' and use 'especially my kids' to specify who will accompany the speaker. Remove extra commas and filler words for clarity.