Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 시제 사용이 일관되지 않고 어순과 관사 사용에서 오류가 있습니다. 답변은 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 구체적인 세부사항(누구와, 무엇을 했는지)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙여 2~4문장으로 간결하게 구성하세요. 예: 과거를 말할 때는 과거형을 사용하고, 활동을 나열할 때는 자연스러운 연결어(‘and’, ‘then’, ‘also’)를 사용하세요. 또한 ‘running cats’와 같은 의미 불명확한 표현은 명확하게 고치세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often went there with my friends. We would swim in the pond and play games together, and sometimes we even ran races on the grass. Those afternoons were some of my happiest childhood memories.

Sugestão: 답변이 의도는 전달되지만 문법(전치사, 관사)과 어순에 오류가 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 한두 문장으로 직접 답하고 이유를 연결어(‘because’, ‘so’, ‘which’)로 명확히 설명하세요. 또한 감정 표현을 더 구체적으로 말하면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. Being in a park makes me feel relaxed and peaceful, which helps me forget daily stress.

Sugestão: 문장이 매우 어색하고 단어 선택(‘perks’, ‘backdrop’)과 어순에서 큰 오류가 있습니다. 질문에 대한 직접적인 주제 문장으로 시작하고 이유를 두세 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예: 도시의 문제(혼잡, 건물)와 공원 증가가 주는 이점(휴식, 녹지 공간)을 구체적 예로 들기.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are many tall buildings and little green space. More parks would provide places for people and pets to relax and exercise, and they would make the city feel less crowded.

Sugestão: 전달하고자 하는 내용은 분명하지만 관사와 어순 오류가 있고 반복 표현(‘that it that’)이 있습니다. 명확한 주제 문장으로 답하고, 그 공원을 왜 가고 싶은지(예: 경치, 계절적 특징, 활동)를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 위치나 명칭을 자연스럽게 넣으면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Sunshine Park in my country because it is the first national park and is famous for its spring flowers. I want to walk among the trees and see the colorful blooms, and maybe take photos of the scenery.

× Yes, I really like to go to a park as a child because it's really fun actually with my friends go to park, I go to swim and or running cats. It was the best memory in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks as a child because it was really fun to go with my friends; we would swim or run around. Those were my best childhood memories.

The student mixes present and past tense. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense or past habitual forms. Use 'liked' (past) instead of 'like', and 'going' or 'liked to go' for habitual past activities. Correct structure: 'go with my friends' needs an infinitive or -ing form and parallel verbs: 'swim' and 'run' should be base forms after 'would' or gerunds after 'to'/'-ing'. Also 'running cats' is unintelligible — likely meant 'run around'. Suggestion: decide past tense and use consistent verb forms and parallel structure.

× Yes, because it is at the in the park brings back good memories to me and it gives me a real comfortable feeling in that place.

✓ Yes, because being in the park brings back good memories for me and gives me a really comfortable feeling there.

The sentence has awkward phrases and incorrect articles; main issue is tense and verb form consistency: 'being in the park brings' is present simple (correct for current feelings) while original had extra words 'it is at the in the park'. Use 'brings back good memories for me' and 'gives me a really comfortable feeling there'. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use 'being' to indicate the state, and keep present simple for general truths.

× Guess because in these days Korea there are so many buildings in the city and sometimes I feel a pressure myself because in their backdrop. So it will be happy to see more perks and dogs running in there.

✓ I guess that these days Korea has many buildings in the cities, and sometimes I feel pressured by the surroundings. So I would be happy to see more parks and dogs running there.

Multiple structural errors: missing conjunctions and incorrect word choices. 'Guess' should be 'I guess that' to form a clause. 'In these days Korea' should be 'these days Korea' or 'these days in Korea'. 'I feel a pressure myself' should be 'I feel pressured' or 'I feel pressure'. 'Because in their backdrop' is unclear—use 'by the surroundings' or 'because of that backdrop'. 'Perks' is misspelling of 'parks'. Tense/modal: 'would be happy' expresses desire correctly. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb constructions, correct vocabulary, and proper prepositional phrases.

× Yes, actually I want to go park in sunshine in my country. I heard about that it that the park is the first National Park in my country and there are so many flowers and trees in spring.

✓ Yes, actually I want to go to Sunshine Park in my country. I heard that it is the first national park in my country and that there are so many flowers and trees in spring.

Errors with articles, prepositions, and redundancy: 'go park' should be 'go to [the] park' and place names usually use 'to [Name] Park'. 'sunshine' likely is a proper noun and should be capitalized as 'Sunshine Park'. 'I heard about that it that' is redundant; correct is 'I heard that it is...' 'first National Park' — 'national' should be lowercase unless part of the official name. Suggestion: use 'go to' for movement toward places, capitalize proper nouns, remove redundant words, and maintain clause structure 'I heard that ...'.