Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and add a specific memory or reason to make your answer more vivid. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating words (e.g., “parks”). Use a linking phrase when adding the detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I remember racing my sister around the pond and feeding ducks, which made those afternoons very exciting.

Sugestão: Remove hesitation words (umm) and tighten the response. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a linking word to connect the idea (e.g., “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I often lie on the grass to relax after a busy week, and it helps me recharge for the weekend.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and repetition. Give a concise reason and a specific example of the benefit of more parks, using a linking phrase such as “because” or “so that.”

Exemplo: Definitely — I would like more parks because my city is very crowded and parks would provide green space for relaxation and cleaner air.

Sugestão: Provide a complete, fluent sentence and give a specific example of a park or type of garden you want to visit, explaining why. Use a linking word to add detail (e.g., “for example,” “because”).

Exemplo: In the future, I would like to visit botanical gardens, such as the city’s new botanical park, because I enjoy seeing rare plants and tranquil landscapes.

× Umm, it is mostly for sleeping on the grass and it feels really nice.

✓ Umm, it's mostly for sleeping on the grass, and it feels really nice.

The sentence uses the present simple correctly but needs a contraction and a comma before the coordinating conjunction to improve natural spoken style and clarity. Use 'it's' for natural speech and add a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: Use contractions in spoken responses and punctuate independent clauses with a comma before 'and'.

× These days I'm really busy working and for the weekend it's the best thing to do.

✓ These days I'm really busy working, and at the weekend it's the best thing to do.

The original mixes prepositional phrases awkwardly. Use 'at the weekend' (British English) or 'on the weekend' (American English) for time reference. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: Choose the correct time preposition ('at' or 'on') and separate clauses with a comma.

× Umm, in my city it's really uh, crowded and also, uh, skyscrapers all over.

✓ Umm, in my city it's really crowded, and there are skyscrapers all over.

The phrase 'skyscrapers all over' lacks a verb and subject. Use 'there are' to state existence (there be issue), which corrects the sentence structure and makes it grammatical. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: Use 'there are' to introduce plural nouns in a location and include verbs for complete clauses.

× In the future, I like to go to the. Parks like gardens.

✓ In the future, I'd like to go to parks and gardens.

The original has sentence fragments and incorrect tense: 'I like to go' expresses a habitual present, not a future desire. Use 'I'd like to' (I would like to) to express future intention or desire. Also remove the stray period and combine fragments into one complete sentence. Suggestion: Use 'I'd like to' or 'I would like to' for polite future intentions and avoid sentence fragments by combining related ideas.