Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "when I go to the park"). Use correct tense and possessives ("my body" not "my body's").

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they let me run around and breathe fresh air. For example, I often walked under big trees and played games with friends, which helped both my physical fitness and my mood.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and avoid trailing off.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because my job can be stressful. For example, after a long day at work I walk in a nearby park to relax, clear my mind and get some fresh air.

Sugestão: Make sentences grammatically correct and specific. State your opinion, then give clear reasons and a short suggestion. Avoid fillers and finish sentences clearly.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. My city lacks parks in many neighbourhoods, so residents have nowhere to exercise or relax. I would like local authorities to build small green spaces in those areas so people can access nature easily.

Sugestão: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, name specific parks with correct names, and explain why you want to visit each. Use linking words and complete sentences; avoid vague endings.

Exemplo: Yes, I want to visit several famous parks. For example, I would love to see Yellowstone National Park in the United States to see geysers and wildlife, and Hyde Park in London to enjoy its historic landscapes and outdoor concerts.

× Yes, I've loved to go to a park when I was a child because when I go to the park I can feel the fresh air and the blue sky and I can walk in the park, which is good for my body's health and also the my mental health.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child because when I went to the park I could feel the fresh air and the blue sky, and I could walk in the park, which was good for my physical and mental health.

Errors involve tense consistency and verb form. 'I've loved to go' mixes present perfect with a past time marker 'when I was a child' — use simple past 'I loved'. Use 'going to the park' (verb + -ing) instead of 'to go to a park' for habitual past action. Maintain past tense throughout: 'when I went' and 'I could feel'. 'my body's health' is awkward; use 'physical health' and remove extra 'the' before 'my mental health'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past for past habits and use noun phrases 'physical and mental health'.

× Yes, I still love to go into parks now, uh, because I now I have a work and sometimes I work very hard and I become very tired, so I need to have a park near me to let me relax and.

✓ Yes, I still love going to parks now because I have a job and sometimes I work very hard and become very tired, so I need a park near me to relax.

Issues: use 'going' for habitual present activity. 'I now I have a work' is ungrammatical; use 'I have a job'. Omit redundant 'now'. 'I become very tired' is acceptable but 'become' without subject repetition is fine. 'to let me relax and.' is incomplete — remove 'let' and finish as 'to relax.' Suggestion: use present simple for routines and 'going to parks' with '-ing' for general likes.

× Yes, definitely because now my city did not have enough park uh, especially uh in some area there is completely no parks at all. So I hope I can go to the park whenever where I.

✓ Yes, definitely. My city does not have enough parks, especially in some areas where there are no parks at all. So I hope I can go to a park whenever I want.

Errors: tense and subject-verb agreement. 'now my city did not have' mixes past 'did not have' with 'now' — use present 'does not have'. 'enough park' should be plural 'enough parks' (quantifier + plural). 'in some area' -> 'in some areas'. 'there is completely no parks' wrong agreement; use 'there are no parks at all'. Final fragment 'whenever where I' is incomplete; correct to 'whenever I want.' Suggestion: match present tense for current facts and fix pluralization and sentence fragments.

× Yes, I love some go to some famous park in the world, uh, for example, I would like to go to the Yellowstone park, uh, in the United States or go to the Hyder Park in London and I can not only relax and also have a great tour to see the different.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to some famous parks in the world. For example, I would like to go to Yellowstone Park in the United States or to Hyde Park in London. I could not only relax but also enjoy sightseeing to see different places.

Multiple issues: Use 'would like to' for future desires; avoid 'I love some go'. Use plural 'parks' for general. 'the Yellowstone park' -> 'Yellowstone Park' (proper name) and 'Hyder Park' is misspelled; use 'Hyde Park'. Use parallel structure: 'not only ... but also ...'. 'have a great tour to see the different' is incomplete and unclear — specify 'enjoy sightseeing to see different places'. Suggestion: use correct verb constructions, proper nouns, parallel connectors, and complete objects.