Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce redundancy, correct minor grammar (double “I”), use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep answer within 3–4 concise sentences. For example, state you loved parks, then briefly explain why and give one specific detail about the birds.

Exemplo: I loved going to parks as a child because I grew up in a small coastal city by the Mediterranean. The parks were peaceful and protected, and I sometimes saw rare birds like flamingos or parrots there.

Sugestão: Make the topic sentence direct, fix small register issues (“as a matter of fact”), and connect ideas with a linking phrase. Keep supporting details specific (why smell of grass matters) and limit to 2–3 short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks; in fact, it is part of my daily routine. I especially like the fresh smell of grass after rain because it helps me relax and take a break from my schoolwork.

Sugestão: Avoid vague or exaggerated phrases and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Provide a clear reason and one brief example or result. Use linking words such as because or for example to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think more green spaces would improve residents' wellbeing because parks provide places to exercise and relax. For example, cities with many parks often report higher levels of physical activity and community interaction.

Sugestão: Make the response more concise and avoid repetition (“it has” repeated). Use a topic sentence then two specific details, linked with words like moreover or also. Correct small phrasing issues (southern part, not parts).

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit a new park in the southern part of Hong Kong. It features modern public recreation areas and, moreover, I heard it contains some rare flowers that I would like to see.

× Yes, I used to love parks as a child, especially since I I was living in a small coastal city overlooking the Mediterranean and away from any industrial areas, and we had protected parks accommodating any sort of rare birds such as flamingos or parrots if you're lucky.

✓ Yes, I used to love parks as a child, especially since I was living in a small coastal city overlooking the Mediterranean and away from any industrial areas, and we had protected parks that accommodated rare birds such as flamingos or parrots if you were lucky.

Errors: repeated word 'I' and incorrect tense/relative phrasing. Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use 'that accommodated' (past simple) to match 'used to' and 'we had'. Change 'if you're lucky' to 'if you were lucky' to keep past time frame consistent. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch repetition and ensure subordinate clauses use the same time reference as the main clause.

× Yes, matter of fact, going to parks is part of my daily routine. I love the smell of grass, especially if it rained the day before and also helps me disconnect from school a little bit.

✓ Yes, as a matter of fact, going to parks is part of my daily routine. I love the smell of grass, especially if it rained the day before, and it also helps me disconnect from school a little bit.

Errors: missing article 'as' in the phrase 'as a matter of fact'; sentence missing subject 'it' before 'also helps' causing awkward structure. Add 'it' so the clause has a clear subject. Keep 'rained' (past) to refer to the previous day while main clause is present. Suggestion: ensure idiomatic phrases are complete and every clause has a clear subject.

× Absolutely, the more the merrier. Green spaces are one of the only things you can not go wrong with.

✓ Absolutely, the more the merrier. Green spaces are one of the few things you cannot go wrong with.

Errors: awkward phrase 'one of the only things' is non-idiomatic and 'can not' should be 'cannot' as one word in this context. Use 'one of the few things' to convey rarity. Suggestion: choose idiomatic expressions and use 'cannot' as one word for ability/prohibition.

× Hundreds of cities has proven that green spaces gives you happiness and motivation.

✓ Hundreds of cities have proven that green spaces give you happiness and motivation.

Errors: subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'Hundreds of cities' requires plural verb 'have' not 'has'. Also plural noun 'green spaces' takes plural verb 'give' not 'gives'. Suggestion: identify the head noun of the subject (cities) to select correct verb form; match plural subjects with plural verbs.

× Yes, there is this new park in the southern parts of Hong Kong that I've been meaning to go to. It has amazing facilities, it has some brand new public recreation areas, and it has, I even heard it has some rare flowers in there.

✓ Yes, there is a new park in the southern part of Hong Kong that I've been meaning to visit. It has amazing facilities and some brand-new public recreation areas, and I even heard it has some rare flowers.

Errors: 'this new park' is acceptable but 'the southern parts' is awkward; use 'the southern part' or 'the south of Hong Kong'. Use 'a' for introducing a new park. 'Go to' is informal; 'visit' is better. Remove repetitive 'it has' clauses and the redundant 'in there'. Use hyphenated 'brand-new' and end with 'I even heard it has some rare flowers.' Suggestion: combine short clauses to avoid repetition and choose precise location phrases.